Harry Potter: Toby and His Young Lady

LV 1

AllenCross

After reading all the available chapters, we can safely say that the "main character" Toby is not needed in this story, he is an empty place in this story, this persnage does not cause any impressions, except as an indicative betta persanage. The story at the moment is tied around Alice from beginning to end. There are also not enough tags to determine the direction of this story. The story itself is very bland, there are no interesting and diverse events with Toby, he is like a faithful dog following the direction of events in Alice's circle, he is not even considered a person. The update rate is low.

LV 4

Bob_Uchiha_XD

Mc (Toby) is irrelevant. The story is bored. MC is pathetic. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

LV 1

Tim_QQQ

clearly google translated, and the mc is so cringe its almost funny. .................................................................................

LV 1

Ma_Se

Really liking the story so far(11 chapters in), the actions are believable, fights are well written, characters have good motivations and their actions are backing those up. Keep up the good work!