High School DxD: Reborn as a noble devil

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Hanni_Baal

It turns out to be a good idea, the downside is that it's a bit cumbersome to read, I guess the author is pretty new to this, but no problem, that gets better with time. An important recommendation, author, is that you tend to write what you want us to know when it comes to feelings, and you do it very directly, for example, with the part where you explain the smile for people the MC doesn't trust, or that Sirzechs began to see him as a possible friend because he misunderstood his intentions, you have to do it a little more subtle, make us understand without giving it to us so directly, but overall this has great potential!

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Darkiling

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Me gusta tu historia, no lo dejes es muy bueno espero más capítulos …………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………

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Daoist4MxvaV

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