Lost: To Be Found

LV 14

AngelAsphodel

This novel is my first, and I've learned and grown a great deal since I started writing it. I expect I'll continue to grow as well, but already I can say that this is something I can feel pride for. Beyond giving myself a good review score though, I do want to officially write a review for myself and hopefully use this as a moment to reflect on myself. Writing Quality: I recognize that I can be wordy and my love of commas can certainly lead to longer sentences than typically found in webnovels. Despite that, I feel that my grammar is typically consistent and I personally enjoy having a writing style that is distinct from many other novels I have read. While those other novels are something I love, I want to stand apart from them while still learning from them, and I feel that I have succeeded in that regard. In addition to grammar and general structure, I find that I genuinely enjoy my own writing when I read it back, and I enjoy my own jokes and descriptions. Naturally, these still have plenty of room to grow, but I am already very happy with my style and the substance of my writing. Stability of Updates: This is my greatest weakness and this is where I dock points from myself. I average 1 to 2 chapters a week, though I have done more in the past. My tendency to get overwhelmed and burnt out prevents me from writing as much as I wish I could, and it is the main place I wish I could improve. Story Development: In terms of story development I tend towards a slower pace and, while this isn't inherently bad, it does make it harder to judge my writing in this category. As the author I know where the story is headed, but there are times I worry that the slow pace might obscure that from the reader. Nevertheless, I always try to be aware of pacing, creating new mini arcs to split up the larger overarching arcs, and introducing new characters, creatures, worldbuilding, and fleshing out the mysteries in the story in hopes of always keeping things fresh. Character Design: My admission of guilt is that many characters I create are based on aspects of myself. That makes them easier and more fun for me to write, while I continue to try and flesh them out to make them more than the piece of me they initially come from. I like my characters and, in a way, they're my children; of course I'm proud! However I recognize that they are not as complex and fleshed out as characters in a proper drama. I try to make an effort to flesh out each character over time, using interactions and occasionally entire chapters to help make them more complex and interesting. It must be understood however that the novel focusses more on how the characters interact with the world and their circumstances, instead of simply being a purely character based drama. From my point of view, my characters are well made and serve their purposes well in my narrative, though they might lack that final spark of life: something I intend to slowly fix as each character gets more time to develop. World Building: Finally, the last category to talk about. In terms of my world, I'm still actively fleshing things out and I know that there is still plenty that even I don't know about my own setting, however I also believe that worldbuilding might be the strongest part of my novel other than the cohesive narrative itself. I try to make the worldbuilding part of the story instead of merely a backdrop and I interweave mysteries and key aspects of the plot into the world itself. I've also attempted to drip feed the world building in hopes that there are fewer info dumps and that, in cases where exposition is necessary, I always try to make it interesting and fit naturally into the story. Without a doubt, plenty more still needs to be revealed in my story's setting, but what I have right now is already something I view at intriguing and a strong foundation and I hope that my readers feel the same. And that's my author review! I wrote this after publishing chapter 170 and I know there's still plenty more story to come. I'll admit that my review score here may be biased. Nonetheless, I am incredibly proud of this novel and am just very very happy to have had the chance to write it and share it with others. It's the first thing I've ever created and felt proud of, so I hope that those who read it enjoy it with me. This review was largely self reflection and avoided spoilers but if anyone reads this and has questions about my own thoughts on more specific parts of my novel, feel free to comment on this review and I'd be happy to discus. I'm not sure if this review was helpful or insightful, but still, thank you for your interest in my novel and I hope you enjoy what you read.

LV 4

JuniorJumble

The story is currently on chapter 27, but for what I can say, It is definitley Gold-tier at the very least. The Author is good at what they do. They do not dissapoint with the quality of their writing nor their characters. The updating stability is quite high for the length and quality of the chapters. Even if it is only 4 chapters a week, each chapter will give you atleast a good half-hour or more of pure enjoyment, even if the chapter is chalked full with exposition. The Author is certainly talented and creative for what I have seen in their work so far. Even when the pacing of the story seems slow at times, it is very enjoyable to read through. So, if you do not mind a bit of a dark story with some fluffy yuri elements mixed in, this is definitley worth your time. ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Overall, excellent writing quality, great updating stability, awesome story development, amazing character design, and astounding world development. I may be a little biased though since I love a good yuri story. 😋

LV 14

MoonlitOrchard

This is a phenomenal novel. I am absolutely in love with the characters and world design and even if the book may have heavier topics at times it delivers them with grace and finesse. The grammar is fantastic and flawless. I can’t wait to read more from this novel and if your are interested in the premise I recommend you read it.

LV 1

YXZ2

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LV 15

Drew_Sansone

Yeah I’m hooked. Author you won. Take my coins. For anyone debating trying this there was another in-depth review so I won’t touch on the points they do. Rather the one suggestion rather is to the author, you’ve set up an amazing world with a lot of potential. In my opinion something that could give this world the depth it deserves is lore. “Where did magic originate?” “Who had the idea of integrating bloodlines?” “Where are the origins of these bloodlines and if gone where did they go?” Etc etc. Add short tales and fables with this world you built and thank you for writing!

LV 11

Maid_Victoria

I love it, I really love it. I regret putting you on hold with it sorry

LV 12

Koi_Stadt

I'm her girlfriend of course I'm gonna rate this well, anyways insert shameless flirt and something along the line of that.

LV 4

The_Dark_Hydrax

please don't drop please don't drop please don't drop

LV 13

Devilshow

It is a job well done by the author. Really liked the story. It is a refreshing story as there are no multiple romantic interest. Nowadays it is very rare to find a yuri novel with devoted love interest. [img=update]

LV 13

MossyToken

I’m not to far into the chapters to give a full review, but as it stands now I have a new favorite! Favorite as in anything else I have ever read before this! It truly ticks all the right boxes for me. World and character development, dynamic story lines from each chapter leave me excited to read the next. The lore mixed into how magic fundamentals work is so intriguing and fresh! I always look forward to the educational rants from Dahlia! I love the attention to each individual character and how you come to know them gradually throughout your reading just as you would become closer to someone in real life. I really do love this story and look forward to continuing to read more and more! Thank you for writing this and wish it to have so much success!

LV 12

Yuri_is_Life

I have read 30 chapters. I really wanted to love this work, but I just couldn't... Usually when I write bad reviews, I devote most of them to logical holes and other irrationalities of the author... but in the case of this work, there are other problems (some of them are very subjective and may even be a plus for someone). 1) Unhealthy relationships. It feels like absolutely any relationship in the work has a different degree of unhealthiness (whether it's parents and children, lovers or a master-servant)... Well, partly this can be said about real life, but still, here it is brought to the extreme. 2) Abuse and torture stuff. I have nothing against that when the story requires it, but it seemed that the author just wondered if they could write it, and went on a writing spree and gave out several dark chapters in a row. When such heavy topics are thrown in huge quantities without any purpose, it just becomes boring and tasteless! 3) Creative magic. Well... the author tried. But didn't succeed. Well, perhaps in future chapters the author will make that mess recognizeble, but right now it feels like a lot of random cool concepts without any clay between. 4) Well, the author mentions this quite early, but there will be a rapidly developing romance with SM inclinations and much more unhealthy moments. Keep in mind. 5) The overall pace. The work is very inconsistent and the author feels the lack of writing style. We jump all the time from chapters full of inner monologues to full action. One second we get the thoughts of one character, the next line we switch our attention to the second. Slice of life abruptly turns to magic expositions, and than to romance. And so in everything. Sometimes I just get lost. I want to pay attention to one topic, but the author has already moved on to something else. In general, I can consider this novell as a bad copy of typical Korean romantic novels. P.S. A particularly subjective point, but in one chapter where the heroine talked about how her magic would be working with tattoos, there was the phrase "it was fair for her to worry that her partner might not like her future aesthetic." And although her partner obviously didn't mind, the same can't be said for me... And as for her partner herself, she's tall , toned, with abs and muscles... It is seriously annoying that every second author uses such type in yuri novels.