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One opportunity could lead to new adventures. The sole question is; What type of adventure will it be? And how will it end?
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It's really interesting. It doesn't get boring. The plot is great. I look forward to reading more chapters. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I don't usually give out 5 stars. Not just on Webnovel, anywhere really. However, this story is amazing. The characters are incredibly crafted and the dialogues are so rich and realistic it feels like I'm really sitting with the characters. Really, the first chapter blew my socks off, and I can't wait for more.
Okay, hear me out, I know, I know, "a five-star rating he might just want to call for attention on himself" NO! Hear me out! This novel is awesome, it's just amazing! Take the time to read it, it is just fantastic, out of this freaking world! The characters are amazing and perfectly design 5/5, the quality of the writing is superb 5/5, the story development is just delicious 5/5, the stability of updates is good, for a work of this quality you can't ask daily updates 5/5, and the world background is amazing 5/5 I know still, it looks like a stretch, but it's true, this is a fantastic novel in the making! Read it!!!
Loved the first chapter. At first, I thought that lonesome figure was the ghost those people were talking about. A nice horror touch you placed there. There aren't many chapters yet so I can't say much about it. The only thing which I think right now is lacking is world description. But, I hope author will describe in details in the upcoming chapters. keep it up!!
Have fun to read this book, a little bit funny and thrill, I can feel what they feel. Good job author, hope to see more chapter. Gomen... I only give you 4 star for stability updates. Keep up the good work. Cheers.
I have nothing but great things to say. This novel is thrilling! Your opening chapter begets the mood and atmosphere of the story and maybe it’s because I’m a scaredy cat but I was absolutely terrified! I haven’t felt that way about a story in a very long time! I totally recommend this book to anyone into reading great works of (hopefully) fiction. Even your descriptive sections were on point.
Good start! I like the author's writing style, but I think you could describe the characters a little more. Maybe you could also add some info in the synopsis for the readers to get a better idea of what the story is about.
Well, it's just one chapter, so I can't say much. One things is for sure - I like how you wrote the dialogues - they skillfully and lively portray the characters. But, i was confused a little - firstly, i thought that it was happening in amusement park, and only later get that it was a high school. Maybe you should define it early on that they are in a school hallway, and not any other. Plus, it was hard to imagine how Ada and Hail looked like and how old they are. For example, in my country we call highschoolers everybody from 7th class to 11th, 5 years. Overall, it is a good beginning! I hope it will be something like "My house of horrors" which i like! Just keep it up!
Really good start to the story. Only one chapter but there's so much going on to make the reader curious about what would happen in the next chapter. Wishing you success with this book.
Good start of the story, It will be a great story with lot of horror elements of put it correctly, I have already added it to my library, hoping to have a thrilled ride here.
I had fun reading this, and I could totally relate to the fl. You have a good storyline and I'm looking forward to read more. ps: for writer's block, try doing anything apart from books.(maybe that could help, taking your own sweet time helps a lot) I have tried watching something new or music. I wouldn't say I'm fully over it but I am hanging on.
This pilot definitely had me wanting to know a lot more afterwords. I honestly thought the horror part story was good. Dialogue was impressive and hooks did there job
Solid introduction! The characters seem to have a lot of personality. The begining had me convinced this was going to turn in some cliche horror story lol The writting is a bit chaotic at time, but the quality of the descriptions makes up for it. A great start! I look forward to seeing more!
Okay... For real though... I just love the way you describe characters here I'll be taking some pointers from your work too... Nice story and i look forward for more chapters
Quite a great opener with nice characters and fun chemistry. The dialogues are great and the personalities were varied. I would only point out the use of this kind of (inner monologue?), I hope you can get around with the use of other words but of course you can take my advice as granted. Great job and keep it up! 🙏
It's a fun story! I really love your writing style despite being new here in webnovel! Way to go, author! You should add more tags to grab more readers for your novel. Try and avoid using adverbs a lot and replace them using verbs. An example could be instead of saying running hastily you could say "sauntered" or "trundled". Besides that, I think this novel is actually really good! Kudos for the author~
This story was written by our great author Nakasuka. With the inborn quirk of being a native speaker, this novel will take flight higher than than non native speakers. I can see some typos but it will all be cleansed with some edits. Amazing work of cheekiness, comedy, and friendship. Kudos! 👍