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概要
Death...The cold feeling of being dead.
The scientist tried to create a genetic serum to break away from humanity was killed and transmigrated into the world called Destia. The only thing that will help him survive, will be a mysterious system.
[I am not a native English speaker.]
[I don't own the cover picture.]
[Writing quality might change with time as I edit a chapter or my ability to improve.]
[It's a polygamy story.]
[My time is limited! I am a university student.]
[I try to release min 1 chapter daily.]
[Mail: SadWandererX96@gmail.com]
[I hope you can tell me what's wrong as I am getting my experience and your opinion can improve the story!]
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This novel had potential. So much potential. HAD. Past tense. Before chapter 30 the author was weaving a rather good weak to strong novel with a not-dumb and non-stereotypical MC. Things made sense and our MC was getting stronger at a constant rate via hard work Again, all past tense. Then, for some reason which I am unable to fathom, around chapter 30 the author forces things into the most stereotypical revenge setting possible. We have random power ups for no reason, the destruction of the environment the MC is trying to improve for no believable reason, and the MC himself starts making stupid decisions. We have a genre change from slice of life / weak to strong to revenge fantasy / power fantasy. It reads as something incredibly forced and out of character. On top of all that there is the problem of gradually worsening grammar as the story evolves. Each new chapter is a little less polished then the one before it. I dropped the novel and cannot recommend that anyone reads this. To the author: I enjoyed the first 30 chapters or so friend. I would love to read one of your stories which continues in that same vein.
Story was good until chapter 25, and then the whole story got more and more ****ed up. I Dont recommend reading the story as it stands now. Recommending the Author seriously rewrite the whole thing from 26 and on. if you want people to read this more than 25+ chapters. because that is the point lot of people stop.
This is alright at what currently read, and even better it's that huge rarity on this site it's not pay to read yeah it's a miracle have a 🍪. (At least at time wrote this wasn't.)
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Yo what happened? I got to chapter 32 and all the chapters after just disappeared and got deleted. I was enjoying this novel pretty well, I would like to know what happened.
The first thing I want to say about this novel is that it needs some serious editing. The awful grammar really messes up some very good parts. My opinion is that the story is moving rather fast, the mc is leveling way too fast. Its rushed. But it has a lot of potential. As long as the author slows down a bit. The characters are very interesting and the plot is quite good. As it is now, even though the story is good and worth reading, its tiring. If the author slows down the story and some editor fixes the problematic parts, it would be worth 4.5 and above rating.
So , this story is good , altough u get some plot holes here and there ( huppens) its a good read and a balanced system. Now the grammer , its averge i guess . The author uses the kid , blacksmith , mayor alot instead of adding the word needed before them. Anyhow if the author can fix his grammer by allitel bit it would be amazing
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cant read no spaces between words dont read it will.give you a head ache I had tonskip.2 whole chapters and it only got worse... hersanexampleofwhathesdoingtothebook
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It’s really good just needs more chapters but there is more **** going around the world so it’s fine.
Actually, I like the story. Only the first time I read in the first chapter until I left the village after killing the blacksmith there I felt that this story was interesting. It's just that after leaving the village that's where it's falling apart, what is it about trying Rose's relationship? Not even putting this world background and not allowing the MC to learn the introduction of this world background. So after he left the village there was a very destructive disadvantage. I reviewed this novel based on my observations. Because I don't think you (the writer) can observe the story going forward because I see that you want to add badass to the MC