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One Piece: The eldest saiyan brother.
4.35 (80 audimat)
Synopsis
What if, on a dark starry sky, a little baby with monkey's caracteristics fell from the sky, was found and took in by a legendary hero who unknowingly raised a small troublemaker in a world where pirates seek a legendary treasure ?
Follow the leisure life of a strange and calm Saiyan who was adopted by Monkey D. Garp. He will find brothers, friends, love and eventually discover the truth about his origins.
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My grammar is not that much so I will make mistakes for sure, do correct me. (If you want to know, english's not my first language)
For all those who already know it.
Welcome back.
For all those who doesn't know it yet.
Welcome, I must warn you that it's boring sometimes...
Hope you enjoy it,
If not then...well what a pity... but still hope you find something good...
(I don't own anything apart from my OCs)
The cover too isn't mine, but someone else's.
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I don't know what to tell you it's not bad it was just Boring. There were moments that I enjoyed but you spend too much time during his childhood and took 68 chapters to finally do a time skip but by then I had lost too much interest to continue. I might pick this back up when there is more chapter It might get better like I said not bad just boring. Question do you plan to have your MC travel to different worlds or to some upper realm?
I don't know why I started reading this but It's as bad as shiet and as a bad case of boredom I continued reading shiet I'm starring to hate this fanfic It's not reincarnated one so why bother reading It's too much like Saiyan but it's too badly done There are too much I hate about this fanfic
Writing Quality - 2 Stars Story Development - 1 Star Character Design - 1 Star Updating Stability - 3 Star World Background - 2 Star Edit : The thing I hate the most about this Fanfic is the fact that you make him an emotional/ innocent Saiyan that goes around The " holyland ", the most cursed place in the World of One Piece, expecting him to get angry at the WG or the CD because of how they treat them as Humans, fishmen, etc (basically all living things) " slaves " but well....we get this ! Honestly, the Mc is pathetic in his own right . He only mentioned it at the beginning but basically I hoped for more, I mean ....he isn't a Saiyan for nothing . they act with their emotions and don't care If their opponent is stronger then them . If they want to do something then are able to .( DragonBall law!) also, I Think you Made Saiyans way weaker then they orginaly are !
41 chapters and nothing.....literally nothing...ufff.... waste of time....:( 140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140140
(rag) (the most pathetic main character I have seen) (according to him, he does not mind being spat on) the author showed how pathetic he is in the first 3 chapters.
DUDE DONT DROP IT,ITS REALLY A GOOD ONE AND HOPE YOU WILL CONTINUE (7CHPS/WEEK JUST A SUGGESTION) NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Story line is oKay. chapter 60-85 are basically nonsense filler Garbage. story development is like snail slow and there is like zero excitement at all. nothing brilliant, comically funny or Wowing about. kinda dull. lots of potential but seem author does not know how to Polish the story.
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Words can't express how satisfied I am with this fic. No cliches. No trigger happy personalities or posturings like a generic chinese MC. And best of all, it's MCxHancock. I don't need anything more than these in an one piece fic.
Just here to show my support.GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD GOOD.
The MC is a walking cliché, it reminds me of a chapter in Gintama where these protagonists are parodied, the author's writing is on the same level as Kagura.
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I will give an honest view. Its started really good until you add the multivers traveling. thats ruined everything, But the others who likes multiverse traveling i think its for you.
I like how the author respond to every review haha. Just keep up the good work. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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why do I get the vibe that this is more of Chinese novel then a fanfic baised of a Japanese manga....? if it isn't ur intention or u, urself don't see ur fic as a generic Chinese immitation then just ignore this... but still looks like those chinese MTL cheap copy of fanfic ....
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Ahem I decided to become a shameless author too. Anyway you have to know before you start reading that well it's my first bookmaking so know that my plot is maybe bad or even nonexistent even.. (for now) 'cause I'm really bad at setting a plot... My OC will be an entirely different Saiyan made up by me, and will clearly not respect DBZ logic and laws (it's a fanfic so...). Also the pace is terribly long too, so if you want to read a quick one, well it's not here...yeah... Anyway, if you have anything to say about the book and all that, just comment or do a review, good or bad I don't really care much about it... 🖖✌