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2/5 author has no creativity and just uses bullshit au logic of his to make sense which he fails at beauti fully but still a light read if you know to turn of your smart brain and consume
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This is a really good story. It offers an interesting senario with Daemon having a son with rhea royce.
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With each chapter, I am more and more annoyed by the work itself because of the behavior of the main characters, maybe? MC himself said at the very beginning of the work "the easiest way to win the game of thrones is not to play it", but for some reason he himself actively climbs into the game! The author himself made MC's powers - too OP, which is why his actions seem too stupid! Fly away on a dragon to Essos, kill the Dothraki, make your dragon the biggest and strongest and become equal in strength to God himself ❌ Stay in Westeros, do nothing, procrastinate, weave petty intrigues ✅
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Great story and I like how the complicated relationships is being portrayed so far ..................................................................................................................................................
It’s actually kinda crazy how retarded your mc is. His enemies become friends then enemies then friends then enemies, no one ever dies by his hand, he’ll physically beat people then let them live like they won’t plan for his death 24/7 afterwards
Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent—your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare
I like it a lot and the truth is that it is very interesting to read. Don't be confused and think that it is a great book that teaches many things, it is entertaining and that is all that matters in this genre.
this is a story about a dude who is an unbalanced psychopath with uncontrollable outbursts of anger Eamon in this story, if someone does not agree with him, immediately comes into conflict with him and breaks off the relationship, no matter how close the person is to him, if he has a different opinion, he will immediately become a traitor in the eyes of Ayman, he does not need friends, he does not need he only needs a family of biorobots who should not believe their opinions, but should only nod like dummies at any action of Eamon and joyfully run to carry out any of his orders.
it becoming more boring and slow paced every chapter. starting was good but shit going within house royce makes me think mc is stupid weak even though he got 2nd biggest dragon. IT IS ANNOYING
MC seems to get worse, it started with him using his mind and charisma to "my dragon is the biggest". Pacing got so much worse. Updates went from 2ch/day to 3 ch/week.
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One of the best perfect really liked it MC is calculating and decisive i liked how they made laena a good wife and stuff i thought he would marry rahenera still good
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good writing but super boring even the most braindead chinese mc would have been more interesting
The ideas aren't half bad, but the way you've carried it out makes me wanna smack your head with George's books. Key Issues: - Rhaenyra's character and antagonism makes very little sense when you take into account that she neither attempted nor bothered to get to know the MC, who is a 'formidable' dragonrider and one of the most powerful men in Westeros. Also, your bashing of her character is about as subtle as a jackhammer in a bingo lounge. - You butchered the Laena romance. There is 0 sense in antagonizing his future wife just because of an interfering ambitious geezer. Instead of actually trying to make their relationship work, the MC is either insulting her/her father or complimenting her. - Jeyne Arryn realistically would not act or even turn against the MC. Even if they had disagreements during their childhood, the way they turned against each other so fast gave me a whiplash. Hells, you could have made a nuanced plotline where Jeyne and the MC hashed out their differences and realized they cared for each other more as siblings than partners and mutually broke their engagement. This was a missed opportunity that would've added so much more flavour to your characterizations. - Daemon... Not as bad as the others, good enough. - Viserys, you've done him pretty well. It's better than most fics tend to do. Overall, pretty good ideas, terrible execution. The Rhaenyra bashing is somewhat justified, but her worst traits could have been avoided if the MC actually tried to change things, similarly with Jeyne.
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writing quality average story development :slow and boring character design : try to be mysterious and mastermind but he acts like a fool and constantly makes foolish choices updating stability :good (just increasing the chapter number story process is pathetic) world background: absolutely pathetic
I quite agree with the review of Truth_Only_Reader. I must add though I just don't get how the story leading up too one moment mc is allied with someone next he's the enemy it's endless cycle of friend then enemy. I just don't get what he wants sure he said he wants to survive the dance then he could've just stayed in Vale marry Arryn and have a serious talk about their marriage to at least be bearable. My advise is just skip everything and start with the dance and build up your world from there and give him the mysterious Vibe. Personally I'm not enjoying how the story flows
In this story one can say all others are brain dead except for mc or it's not logical or so cold manipulations are not subtle at all but no one can deny it's very enjoyable book to read.The best hotd fanfiction I read in a while.
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I just realized something, Urrax is the luckiest dude in this fic. He eats, sleep, then wake up and fly to repeat the process to grow stronger, while Aemon just keeps adding points to him. This is probably what dream life is like to dragons. Though a question arise, will Urrax ever be able to speak? At a certain point, his magic and physical stats will reach height that are impossible realistically, so what will the effect be? Will Urrax ever have muscles? I just can't help but compare him to dragons from Fairy Tail because of the new season that dropped. Urrax with muscles and abs would be *chefs kiss*. Just to flex on other dragons.
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i freaking love the development from chapter 40 ,well played author and give me more more more more more more more more more more more more
The story is really terrible and I found it difficult to care about the MC. The word count is really low and compared to other fanfics the content in a single chapter is really low. Even though the author is updating 2 chapters it can't be compared to a normal fic chapter even if you combine 2 chapters into one. Also I have yet to see any Kingdom building in this story.
Honestly it is one of the best HOTD fics I've read so far . Keep it up and best wishes 💯
Game of Throne World is all about politics, World building, inner conflict with other Houses and War, and this Fanfic has captured that very same essence. Hat off to you author 👏🏽I enjoyed very Chapters. ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... .........
Muy buena trama así tiene que ser un fanfic desarrollarlo ir preparándose para no obedecer nadie así es la vida cuando haces poder y fortuna no entra y dices yo soy dios y les gano a todos.
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I love the unpredicatable aspect of this story, esoecially on the anglee of the MC's responses to the other characters. Thr MC's cunning ability to play around with hi so called "alliance" is a guessing game for each succeeding chapter. I love and hate this about the story hahaha
2/5 author has no creativity and just uses bullshit au logic of his to make sense which he fails at beauti fully but still a light read if you know to turn of your smart brain and consume
Spoiler de révélation This is a really good story. It offers an interesting senario with Daemon having a son with rhea royce.
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With each chapter, I am more and more annoyed by the work itself because of the behavior of the main characters, maybe? MC himself said at the very beginning of the work "the easiest way to win the game of thrones is not to play it", but for some reason he himself actively climbs into the game! The author himself made MC's powers - too OP, which is why his actions seem too stupid! Fly away on a dragon to Essos, kill the Dothraki, make your dragon the biggest and strongest and become equal in strength to God himself ❌ Stay in Westeros, do nothing, procrastinate, weave petty intrigues ✅
Spoiler de révélation Great story and I like how the complicated relationships is being portrayed so far ..................................................................................................................................................
It’s actually kinda crazy how retarded your mc is. His enemies become friends then enemies then friends then enemies, no one ever dies by his hand, he’ll physically beat people then let them live like they won’t plan for his death 24/7 afterwards
Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent—your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare
I like it a lot and the truth is that it is very interesting to read. Don't be confused and think that it is a great book that teaches many things, it is entertaining and that is all that matters in this genre.
this is a story about a dude who is an unbalanced psychopath with uncontrollable outbursts of anger Eamon in this story, if someone does not agree with him, immediately comes into conflict with him and breaks off the relationship, no matter how close the person is to him, if he has a different opinion, he will immediately become a traitor in the eyes of Ayman, he does not need friends, he does not need he only needs a family of biorobots who should not believe their opinions, but should only nod like dummies at any action of Eamon and joyfully run to carry out any of his orders.
it becoming more boring and slow paced every chapter. starting was good but shit going within house royce makes me think mc is stupid weak even though he got 2nd biggest dragon. IT IS ANNOYING
MC seems to get worse, it started with him using his mind and charisma to "my dragon is the biggest". Pacing got so much worse. Updates went from 2ch/day to 3 ch/week.
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One of the best perfect really liked it MC is calculating and decisive i liked how they made laena a good wife and stuff i thought he would marry rahenera still good
Spoiler de révélation good writing but super boring even the most braindead chinese mc would have been more interesting
The ideas aren't half bad, but the way you've carried it out makes me wanna smack your head with George's books. Key Issues: - Rhaenyra's character and antagonism makes very little sense when you take into account that she neither attempted nor bothered to get to know the MC, who is a 'formidable' dragonrider and one of the most powerful men in Westeros. Also, your bashing of her character is about as subtle as a jackhammer in a bingo lounge. - You butchered the Laena romance. There is 0 sense in antagonizing his future wife just because of an interfering ambitious geezer. Instead of actually trying to make their relationship work, the MC is either insulting her/her father or complimenting her. - Jeyne Arryn realistically would not act or even turn against the MC. Even if they had disagreements during their childhood, the way they turned against each other so fast gave me a whiplash. Hells, you could have made a nuanced plotline where Jeyne and the MC hashed out their differences and realized they cared for each other more as siblings than partners and mutually broke their engagement. This was a missed opportunity that would've added so much more flavour to your characterizations. - Daemon... Not as bad as the others, good enough. - Viserys, you've done him pretty well. It's better than most fics tend to do. Overall, pretty good ideas, terrible execution. The Rhaenyra bashing is somewhat justified, but her worst traits could have been avoided if the MC actually tried to change things, similarly with Jeyne.
Spoiler de révélation writing quality average story development :slow and boring character design : try to be mysterious and mastermind but he acts like a fool and constantly makes foolish choices updating stability :good (just increasing the chapter number story process is pathetic) world background: absolutely pathetic
I quite agree with the review of Truth_Only_Reader. I must add though I just don't get how the story leading up too one moment mc is allied with someone next he's the enemy it's endless cycle of friend then enemy. I just don't get what he wants sure he said he wants to survive the dance then he could've just stayed in Vale marry Arryn and have a serious talk about their marriage to at least be bearable. My advise is just skip everything and start with the dance and build up your world from there and give him the mysterious Vibe. Personally I'm not enjoying how the story flows
In this story one can say all others are brain dead except for mc or it's not logical or so cold manipulations are not subtle at all but no one can deny it's very enjoyable book to read.The best hotd fanfiction I read in a while.
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I just realized something, Urrax is the luckiest dude in this fic. He eats, sleep, then wake up and fly to repeat the process to grow stronger, while Aemon just keeps adding points to him. This is probably what dream life is like to dragons. Though a question arise, will Urrax ever be able to speak? At a certain point, his magic and physical stats will reach height that are impossible realistically, so what will the effect be? Will Urrax ever have muscles? I just can't help but compare him to dragons from Fairy Tail because of the new season that dropped. Urrax with muscles and abs would be *chefs kiss*. Just to flex on other dragons.
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i freaking love the development from chapter 40 ,well played author and give me more more more more more more more more more more more more
The story is really terrible and I found it difficult to care about the MC. The word count is really low and compared to other fanfics the content in a single chapter is really low. Even though the author is updating 2 chapters it can't be compared to a normal fic chapter even if you combine 2 chapters into one. Also I have yet to see any Kingdom building in this story.
Honestly it is one of the best HOTD fics I've read so far . Keep it up and best wishes 💯
Game of Throne World is all about politics, World building, inner conflict with other Houses and War, and this Fanfic has captured that very same essence. Hat off to you author 👏🏽I enjoyed very Chapters. ......... ......... ......... ......... ......... .........
Muy buena trama así tiene que ser un fanfic desarrollarlo ir preparándose para no obedecer nadie así es la vida cuando haces poder y fortuna no entra y dices yo soy dios y les gano a todos.
Spoiler de révélation I love the unpredicatable aspect of this story, esoecially on the anglee of the MC's responses to the other characters. Thr MC's cunning ability to play around with hi so called "alliance" is a guessing game for each succeeding chapter. I love and hate this about the story hahaha
It was good at first, but then it just went downhill