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It's the 1 millionth Alice pairing again, shocker. Anyways , MC was written pretty well, story had cool start with the samurais etc, update stability is currently dead tho. it's aight to kill an hour or 2
unfinished novel thats not updating anymore. if i had to give a rating for whats already written it would be about 3.8/5, so pretty good. but yeah its just not worth starting this one if it wont update because it still hasn't started anything important (romance/conflicts)
Overall great but slow on updating new chapters 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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So yes the book is pretty good, it updates often, my onl gripe is that author repeats stuff too often
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very good book keep it up I'm interested in the development of this book I'm gonna star again now
it's not bad it might be because English isn't your first language or perhaps you not being a more experienced writer but your explaining as the characters and normal people don't and it's usually concise if it is and the characters at some points don't feel like they have a personality and I feel like you can really tell when it comes to Emmet but it might be because I've seen him written as well if not better than how his movie counter part played him sides all that it's not bad
I really like the story, only hiccup I have is that you don't follow how vampires mate in the novels, it's stated in novels that mating bond is instant
It's a great Twilight fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a great plot and good translate/grammar.. I like how MC/Paul is a vampire samurai.. It's interesting to see Paul use a katana in vampire world.. I also like Paul power (telekinesis is awesome, but what about his shield?? Is he have 2 power??)) I also like that he has incredible self control (maybe even better that Carlisle and Bella).. He also can still taste human food (with that his guised/posed as human is perfect), maybe he can be a cook 😂🤣 Hope he is Alice mate.. Keep up the good job author san, I can't wait to read next chapter 😁👍😍😍
All in all it's a pretty good fanfic, it was very interesting at the start with the samurai concept but after he turned into a vampire it felt like he immediately stopped caring about almost anything and I think it was a waste to let him just leave his home without doing more world building, for example, you could have had him talking with more samurai and people who knew about his master and the supernatural world, after he joined the denali it feels like he does nothing, yeah I know he learned a lot of stuff but none of it feels important or interesting and is relationship with Irina just feels blank, they only have a few dialogs while we (the readers) know that he doesn't love her and she doesn't love him so their relationship feels really unnecessary, I think my main problem with the story comes the blank and uninteresting dialogs. Of course I don't mean to hurt or ridicule you as I am probably worse, just trying to give an honest review. On another subject I think it would have been a better choice to have Mc x oc with the oc being the mc previous life's wife reincarnation, but that just my preference, Alice is also a decent choice.
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Loving the story so far, I like Paul’s character development. There isn’t really anything to complain about with the story so far and I would highly recommend it. Only thing I could wish for is daily updates, but I understand not all authors are capable of updating daily. Please keep working hard on your story and I’ll keep supporting you. Thank you!
The concept sounded interesting I thought it would be cool to read about a human samurai going around killing vampires only to be massively disappointed and let down when mc becomes a vampire and then stops really being a samurai or hunting vampires there was no actual vampire hunting just an encounter and then he is a vampire not to mention the terrible dialog and unnecessary exposition.
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I'll say it here before you get annoying me, if you don't like my work just don't read it. If you have constructive criticism to give, or a review to warn other readers not to waste their time reading, you can, but I will delete any Review that is only 1 star because I know that my work is not complete garbage to have this evaluation. You can write a bad review and give it 3 stars, you can write a bad review and give it 2 stars, if I see that it makes sense, I won't delete it. But I'm going to delete all 1 stars, even one that has a book as an explanation because I know that there are a lot of stupid people on Webnovel who just want to harm the writers and lower the stars, the webnovel knows that and that's why it created this author mechanism delete reviews.
The premise is good, grammar a bit iffy, and the story good. I have one question though… what is with everyone’s obsession with Alice!? I mean, I don’t have problem with it, but everyone on Webnovel makes her the love interest. She’s not even hot! (I’m not saying looks are everything)
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thanks for the really great story. I didn't think that I would be hooked after just the second chapter. I just can't wait to see where you will take the story .
Good story, too bad it's hard to see a Harem story with Twilight fanfic, the other readers always expect eternal love because it would be nice if Paul stayed with all the sisters of the Denali house
I liked this Fanfic, the beginning is a little slow and for now, with 12 chapters, the Cullens haven't even appeared, but it's different from most Twilight fanfics that I've seen because of that, if the author continues to do well, I think I'll continue enjoying it of this story.
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Worth the read👍😀👍,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
I'm loving this fan fic so far. Please don't drop. If at any point you say you're going to drop,
As far as Twilight fanfics go, So far it technically isn't as so far up to chapter nine, it takes place in twilight universe. Not sure if this is still a fanfic as I am un aware of how that distinction is place. However, So fare it is well written and has real plot development to the story since chapter one. I love the fact that it does not start out in the timeline of the books, but before it. I like even more how the character starts in Japan, then goes to Europe for a while. I want to see how this story develops and progresses. So far It is doing well. I enjoy reading it.
me gusta mucho el fic, está bien escrito y la historia es interesante. si solo lo subiera capitulos más seguidos [img=update][img=update]
Good if not a bit slow paced otherwise no problem ......................................................................................................
Pretty standard reincarnation. Nothing too bad but nothing that makes it pop. Needs a little help on the grammar but besides that nothing is wrong with it. Just kind of meh.
Here is the author. This is a fanfic that I always thought about writing about Twilight, I really like the books and the movies, if you want to know more read the story, the grammar might not be so good because English is not my first language. I haven't defined who will be the woman who will be the MC's romantic interest, but I'm thinking that it could be Alice, who is the character I like the most, but it could be someone else if you read the chapters and comment. I intend to post 1 or 2 chapters a week, but it can be more if you comment or give power stones.
It's the 1 millionth Alice pairing again, shocker. Anyways , MC was written pretty well, story had cool start with the samurais etc, update stability is currently dead tho. it's aight to kill an hour or 2
unfinished novel thats not updating anymore. if i had to give a rating for whats already written it would be about 3.8/5, so pretty good. but yeah its just not worth starting this one if it wont update because it still hasn't started anything important (romance/conflicts)
Overall great but slow on updating new chapters 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Spoiler de révélation So yes the book is pretty good, it updates often, my onl gripe is that author repeats stuff too often
Classes are short and updates are slowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
very good book keep it up I'm interested in the development of this book I'm gonna star again now
it's not bad it might be because English isn't your first language or perhaps you not being a more experienced writer but your explaining as the characters and normal people don't and it's usually concise if it is and the characters at some points don't feel like they have a personality and I feel like you can really tell when it comes to Emmet but it might be because I've seen him written as well if not better than how his movie counter part played him sides all that it's not bad
I really like the story, only hiccup I have is that you don't follow how vampires mate in the novels, it's stated in novels that mating bond is instant
It's a great Twilight fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a great plot and good translate/grammar.. I like how MC/Paul is a vampire samurai.. It's interesting to see Paul use a katana in vampire world.. I also like Paul power (telekinesis is awesome, but what about his shield?? Is he have 2 power??)) I also like that he has incredible self control (maybe even better that Carlisle and Bella).. He also can still taste human food (with that his guised/posed as human is perfect), maybe he can be a cook 😂🤣 Hope he is Alice mate.. Keep up the good job author san, I can't wait to read next chapter 😁👍😍😍
All in all it's a pretty good fanfic, it was very interesting at the start with the samurai concept but after he turned into a vampire it felt like he immediately stopped caring about almost anything and I think it was a waste to let him just leave his home without doing more world building, for example, you could have had him talking with more samurai and people who knew about his master and the supernatural world, after he joined the denali it feels like he does nothing, yeah I know he learned a lot of stuff but none of it feels important or interesting and is relationship with Irina just feels blank, they only have a few dialogs while we (the readers) know that he doesn't love her and she doesn't love him so their relationship feels really unnecessary, I think my main problem with the story comes the blank and uninteresting dialogs. Of course I don't mean to hurt or ridicule you as I am probably worse, just trying to give an honest review. On another subject I think it would have been a better choice to have Mc x oc with the oc being the mc previous life's wife reincarnation, but that just my preference, Alice is also a decent choice.
Spoiler de révélation Loving the story so far, I like Paul’s character development. There isn’t really anything to complain about with the story so far and I would highly recommend it. Only thing I could wish for is daily updates, but I understand not all authors are capable of updating daily. Please keep working hard on your story and I’ll keep supporting you. Thank you!
The concept sounded interesting I thought it would be cool to read about a human samurai going around killing vampires only to be massively disappointed and let down when mc becomes a vampire and then stops really being a samurai or hunting vampires there was no actual vampire hunting just an encounter and then he is a vampire not to mention the terrible dialog and unnecessary exposition.
Spoiler de révélation I'll say it here before you get annoying me, if you don't like my work just don't read it. If you have constructive criticism to give, or a review to warn other readers not to waste their time reading, you can, but I will delete any Review that is only 1 star because I know that my work is not complete garbage to have this evaluation. You can write a bad review and give it 3 stars, you can write a bad review and give it 2 stars, if I see that it makes sense, I won't delete it. But I'm going to delete all 1 stars, even one that has a book as an explanation because I know that there are a lot of stupid people on Webnovel who just want to harm the writers and lower the stars, the webnovel knows that and that's why it created this author mechanism delete reviews.
The premise is good, grammar a bit iffy, and the story good. I have one question though… what is with everyone’s obsession with Alice!? I mean, I don’t have problem with it, but everyone on Webnovel makes her the love interest. She’s not even hot! (I’m not saying looks are everything)
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thanks for the really great story. I didn't think that I would be hooked after just the second chapter. I just can't wait to see where you will take the story .
Good story, too bad it's hard to see a Harem story with Twilight fanfic, the other readers always expect eternal love because it would be nice if Paul stayed with all the sisters of the Denali house
I liked this Fanfic, the beginning is a little slow and for now, with 12 chapters, the Cullens haven't even appeared, but it's different from most Twilight fanfics that I've seen because of that, if the author continues to do well, I think I'll continue enjoying it of this story.
Spoiler de révélation Worth the read👍😀👍,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
I'm loving this fan fic so far. Please don't drop. If at any point you say you're going to drop,
As far as Twilight fanfics go, So far it technically isn't as so far up to chapter nine, it takes place in twilight universe. Not sure if this is still a fanfic as I am un aware of how that distinction is place. However, So fare it is well written and has real plot development to the story since chapter one. I love the fact that it does not start out in the timeline of the books, but before it. I like even more how the character starts in Japan, then goes to Europe for a while. I want to see how this story develops and progresses. So far It is doing well. I enjoy reading it.
me gusta mucho el fic, está bien escrito y la historia es interesante. si solo lo subiera capitulos más seguidos [img=update][img=update]
Good if not a bit slow paced otherwise no problem ......................................................................................................
Pretty standard reincarnation. Nothing too bad but nothing that makes it pop. Needs a little help on the grammar but besides that nothing is wrong with it. Just kind of meh.
Here is the author. This is a fanfic that I always thought about writing about Twilight, I really like the books and the movies, if you want to know more read the story, the grammar might not be so good because English is not my first language. I haven't defined who will be the woman who will be the MC's romantic interest, but I'm thinking that it could be Alice, who is the character I like the most, but it could be someone else if you read the chapters and comment. I intend to post 1 or 2 chapters a week, but it can be more if you comment or give power stones.