Reviews of Asura [Bleach] by DemonDog - Webnovel

LV 3

Immortal_Destroyer_2780

Great story too bad there are not enough chapters keep this up and you will definitely be a good author. Word count:anwdwadwadwadwadwadadad

LV 4

maelvoid_2025

1) the story isn't bad and I like the idea of a hollow who will become the strongest in hueco mundo 2) your perspective of writing is terrible it's like you want to be third person,second, and first all at the same time which makes the story less understandable 3)if you're gonna write a ff use the original name of the place because last I remember it's not world of hollow it's called hueco mundo and it's not a world it's just in a different dimension 4) the words you use during the story just don't mix well with making it just terrible wording 5)do more research on the manga/anime you wanna write a ff of cuase it makes it easier to understand like you barely have any world background information like not everyone has watched bleach

LV 3

1Shadow_Monarch1

Ah shit it got dropped and here I was looking for a good bleach fanfic but it's a nice read while it lasted.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👊👊✊✊✊✊✊✊👊👊

LV 3

jaro_onody

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LV 6

Immortal_Potato

I couldn’t really get that far because of the grammar. I mean I don’t know that much about the story but the grammar is really off putting. If the author put a little time into editing and polishing his work, then maybe more people would read it. Unfortunately, as it stands, it is a little unpalatable.

LV 3

DemonDog

I'm going to be shameless and rate myself with 5 stars again... to say this: First ... The titles of the chapters are like that because the chapters are separated into parts. Since each one Is more than 4000 words. Second ... My story is slow paced. I describe everything that happens: the moments of the secondary characters, the growth of my protagonist and the other characters and finally the world in which the story unfolds. Thank you for reading :)

LV 5

Suriel8224

The chapter titles makes me lost interest hahaha. All fights2x hahaha. Im kind of hesitating on reading this😂😂😂😂 I'll just wait for more chaps first before reading xD 😎😎

LV 2

Pierre08UR

you're sick ... And you make a big fanfiction. You have my respect and my support. Good luck in what you do.-------------------------------------------------------☺

LV 5

yourname128

Hmm ... I'll just say this! You will like the story and it is refreshing for me. Why? There are many stories in high ranking with poor grammar.   that only because they fulfill their wishes of the readers but without understanding how the mc achieved it ... Having so much power or so many women.

I made an account just for this. A good story so far ... Thanks. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

LV 3

asdasdasdasd

Amazong Story! MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE.

LV 3

DreamSleeping

Being honest ... Your writing and your story seems like a good start. I was very surprised. You look like a professional translator and congratulations ... even when your first language is not English. I do not understand how you do not rise in ranking. Thanks for writing :) I am from France and I understand everything up to translator. More chapters and you have my support!

LV 6

Z3RG102077

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LV 5

Sirione

interesting ... but need more cap to give an opinion...........................................................................................................

LV 3

DemonDog

Well ... I'm almost always in the hospital. So I will always try to make daily chapters, but if it is accepted well, I will try many. I am new and I would like to know your opinion. Thank you :)