RWBY: Reborn With A System

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HeavenlySun

You know I like this novel but at the same time I HATE it. When I think of a system I think they would give you cool power with shop,quest,lottery,inventory and a lot of cool stuff but your system is kinda suck it only give you information and inventory what's the point of the you could of just call it the leveling up system or game system after all game system did give you information about your skill, race, health, mana, etc...... The only extra thing your system has is emotinon apart from that I don't think there's a lot of advantage your system offer. It's way better if he get a cooler ability like devil fruit or cool bloodline that you don't have to unlock. ANYWAY like I said I don't hate you novel just saying what I want to say.

LV 14

AbsoluteCarnage

5 stars because I can.

LV 15

Khors

one of my favorite things about it so far is that you give enough knowledge at the first couple chapters so that people who don’t watch RWBY can still read and know about the world

LV 4

MLakuru

I'm trying to find a good story here that has decent romance but literally everyone and their mother on the internet writes about harems and it honestly pisses me off slightly. You don't need a harem to add characters in and you don't always have to have a MC that bangs every female.

LV 10

KingGrizzly

This is a cluster **** of anime cliches. While there are some good ones in there, most of them are bad and rather cheesy or have been used so many times that they appear overused. The good ones are the fluffy tail and ears, when someone talks about you you sneeze and the transfer student is so cool, the rest is **** in my opinion. Right now where the chapters are currently at don't make sense or just bore me. While I like how the author is trying to start a new original arc that isn't related to the main story completely, he is just not making the arc interesting enough to make me want to read more. Grammar and spelling could be better but it's not to the point where I doubt it's written in the English language. I just want to see them all grown up so that they all go to beacon academy. To be honest ever since I learned Gin is like a half faunas I really wanted him and blake to meet, like who doesn't like catgirls. Overall this story ain't that good, you would be better of searching for something else. While there are some good moments hidden in there it's not worth reading if you have to find the good moments. I call tell this can improve if it just gets rid of the some of the cliches the author is using and come up with new situations (Character interaction and reaction to the MC is always good in my opinion), it seems to me like the author is basing his story to some stupid cheesy slice of life, high school anime. Also if he could improve his grammar and spelling as well as skip this arc he's started releasing or maybe speeding things up a bit then it would be more interesting. I like the originality and were the authors trying to take the story, but please use the original story arc of RWBY as your crutch and incorporate some of your originality into the story later on, and when you can do that at a satisfactory level then do what you're doing now, as I believe this is too much for you to do. P.S. My previous review (Not this review) was just a rant, it was just me releasing frustration and anger and such. It is heavily biased and is an unfair review of the fanfic. Please read the fanfic before you make up your mind.

LV 4

TheKelpCrown

Okay so I enjoyed it over all. I'm not big on harem's. That just me personally so I'm not going to belittle it over that as I knew it was a story like that and I still read it. I don't despise them just not my scene. Maun reason is because they just don't spend enough time flushing out the relationship between the characters. This one was okay compared to others. Could have done better. Other than that for what it is worth it's good for what it is.

LV 15

Tank2u

Hey author-kun I just realized I hadn't dropped a review yet so here I am :) Hmmm now what to write ................................................................................I like cheese

LV 2

Kirito_Link

Would need a rewrite, grammar is very bad as well as how the story develops. Don't get me wrong, the base is very good but every characters seems too childish.

LV 14

EugenSimion

You knew what, just the fact that you have shown just how pathetic Gin, your MC is makes the story worth taking 5 stars. I mean this story just shows that no matter how great the advantage one gets, no matter the opportunity, the outcome will always be a pathetic person with no real results. This is what happens when you coddle someone to much and don't let them walk on their own two feet. Anyways, keep it up I just love seeing how pathetic Gin is! 5 start from me!

LV 13

Nexusprime117

Hello! I absolutely love this novel! The characters are great, the story is awesome! Altogether, this is a great find. For RWBY fans, I highly recommend this novel, it won't disappoint! Even if your not a RWBY fan, this story is a great way to pass the time. Once again, I love this novel and can't wait to see what happens. Thank you for writing this novel and keep up the great work! XD

LV 5

NotEyptiandio

Its not like I liked the novel Ba..baka😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😕😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😕😕😕😕😕😕😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😜😕😕😕😕😕😜😜😜😜😞😕

LV 4

Zedsdeadbaby

My god I love the concept. Wish for more chapters a week, as it’s insanely slow waiting for them. Also I despise the whole harem thing. If it wasn’t for that, I’d literally spend money on this novel.

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YoursTruIy

Need Moarrrrrr ..................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

LV 5

HeavenlySun

I really hope this time the system can give him power but at the same time make sure you make it really hard to get. Please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please

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HolyMaidenZero

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LV 14

WolfLord

Very enjoyable hope it continues on one of the reasons why I got into the RWBY anime can't wait to see where it goes 🙏🙏🙏🙏😍 good stability and updating love how the characters interact with each other good world history

LV 14

PuffyFluppy

i love it .

LV 5

jimmyvd

merci pour le chapitre sa suit avec le premier rwby avec le système j'ai bien aimé le développement de l'histoire avec le fait que j'adore l'anime rwby j'adore

LV 13

sacrificialsoul

I diped a bit into the original and I'm looking foward to the development and improvements of the rewrite Ps crow best RWBY character all who don't agree ARE SINNERS!!#

LV 4

Toxic_318

Well, this novel can't be called bad but it definitely cannot be called good. A bit below average in my opinion. I'm not talking about the quality of plot or character design blah blah blah. No, I'm talking about the fact that the writing is done in stage dialogue. It breaks the immersion and makes you really upset and irritated. Not much can be said about the stability of updates either. I also didn't like the fact that the mc can switch between faunus and human form freely. I'd rather have him as fully human or faunus(in this case, faunus would be better cuz the author wanted to give a bloodline to the mc). This is because while it's cool to switch between human and faunus, it wouldn't work in RWBY and would just make more complications. Also, the descriptions, while good, can be improved. For example; [Ancient Wolf : The first wolf that existed. Stronger than normal wolves but have less control] can be changed to something like [Primordial Wolf: The wolf that has existed from the beginning. They are have powerful abilities and are almost unmatched in their era. However, they tend to have less control over their formidable powers.] See? Don't make it too blunt unless you plan to write a lot of infodumps. I do appreciate the fact that the author filled in the background for new readers who are not familiar with RWBY. It wasn't much effort but rarely do I see authors who actually bothered to do it.