Reincarnated as Bella Swan's Brother (Twilight)

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WhiteAuthor

So I used to have this big review for myself, but I decided to delete it and just say this: I'm a cool dude. Read the Fanific. Yeeahh that's all.

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Iseeyou

This is rough to read. Not to bad of a story overall. For a twelve year old with adhd. The author is unfortunately someone young and doesn’t know how to put a mature mindset into his writing. Which is understandable but still it makes the novel hard to read with the MC being very immature and super childish along with all of the other characters. If your young you’ll like this story and everyone is best of friends.

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Golias

... well, the MC constantly does and thinks about silly things, the worst thing is that if that were the only case, it would be possible to characterize only MC as childish, but everyone acts stupid along with him. The problem is not being childish, but knowing that people don't act like that, unfortunately...

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NunuXD

The ADHD on this mc is very intense... I really love twilight fics, but I'd hard to read when the Mc can't focus on anything for more than 100 words :/

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Leonardo_Henrique_0539

Author, everything is great with you. Don't abandon your readers; I can't stand unfinished fanfics anymore. I'm almost giving up on reading because of this. Your story is incredible! Just one thing: if you're going to do a harem, please make it make sense, hahaha.

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PsyLoRD

Honestly, the story itself is not that bad BUT i just cant stand the MC, i would stay away from anyone like him irl, i feel like he has mental impairment.

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Lucius_SS

I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.

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Zeroren

So I had to give up reading this and stopped at chapter 58. I'm the type of person to ignore reviews and judge the story myself whether it is good or not but for this I should have listened to the more bad reviews because they really did tell the truth. First off let me say this the story is decent it not great but it isn't terrible. The major problem with the story is like what everyone else has said the MC is horribly written. I will use this to describe him as a twelve-year-old who suffers from bipolar with some adhd thrown in while taking Adderall like candy. I hope someday this gets rewritten honestly keep the story the same but change the way the MC acts and this will instantly become a 5/5 novel in my book.

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Caden_Dugan

I like it so far hope you continue it!!!

A great novel that keeps me coming back for more and more. The Mc actually acts intelligent and does flaunt or show off his powers to others exposing his secret and the author made the original book characters not the exact same way of thinking and acting like in the books making the characters seem more lively.

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Strongi

Love it. Please don't drop it..... 🙏 [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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abyss_of_darkness

beta MC, no calculation , just a fool, if its been real world mc won't be alive after 10 chapters. ............................................................

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KingAlexander1

so far I'm loving the stories I do not mind a grammar's mistake I do not mind the childish don't mind it so far I can say this is one of the best Twilights stories I ever read dial all the Twilight stories always plot it's always getting me very annoyed this is the reason why I do not f*** with Twilight stories not like that no more you outdone yourself you much better than all the Twilight people who did better

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Shrekster

dis good shii I see some small issues but thats fine its still goood shi (if u stop writing i will R##E you)

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DaoistnRqEOk

very good keep it up ✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️

Estou ansioso pelo próximos capítulos, Gostei muito de como vc criou o MC, fiquei intriganto com os personagens e ansioso pra ver o Alex ainda mais forte

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Novel_Lover_2360

Good but still nothing important till now, after more than 90 chapters ....... .......... ...... .....

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AncientHorror

Good job bro i dont wanna sound like your mom but make sure to get some rest and some sun anyway just keep it up your doin good. Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood jooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooob

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Aris82

the story itself is great. as a twilight fanfiction what else to do you expect from a teenage drama. but the problem is the MC. got a very big problem with his personality and always on inner retrospect shit. so yeah. got discouraged reading it.

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Leonardo_Henrique_0539

Good morning, writer. I hope everything is going well with you. I just wanted to ask if the story is going to continue at this slow pace. Now, I’m not complaining, but we’re 35 chapters in, and the story hasn’t really started yet. I’m just a bit worried because I’ve read so many stories like this where the writer keeps delaying the plot, and by the time it’s supposed to start, they give up on writing it altogether. But thank you for continuing the story—it really brightens our days.