Aegon Snow

LV 1

Don_Diegow

a forced story at many points. It even makes you want to read it at the beginning but as you progress the need to swallow the script is very forced... nonsense things, facilities, absurdities and "magic powers" are the last trick to bury the plot.

LV 7

Melshan

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LV 5

CloudSmoke

Every part of this story is forced plot points. It's basically a Gary Stu except that there are constant poorly written in flaws/mistakes that the main character has to work his way around the problem with that is that because they are poorly written, Is that most of the time these mistakes are easily avoidable but like I said, purposely, not avoided, making you really question the characters intelligence. Not to mention the main character is incredibly chaotic in personality Is literally like if you were to mix a child and an adult And throw them into a arrogant teenager it's just pure annoyance anyway I gave writing ability three stars because while this was pretty bad, I do think the author has talent I gave update stability. Three stars because I haven't been around this story long enough to have a clear understanding of how often or well they update Story development I gave one star because well the story started off, fairly strong-ish But went downhill pretty quickly I gave character design three stars because the characters were pretty bad, but bar the atrocity that is the main character. You can kind of sometimes see faint, resemblances of what they were supposed to be. World background I gave four stars simply because the author seems to have done a lot of research, so even though there was a lot of BS all throughout the story, there were some things that made sense

LV 3

George_Vasiliu

MC is a lunatic and not the fun kind ..his consistency as a character is 0 ...it's so bad it even pulls GRRM's characters down to his level There are good parts in this but it all buckles under the pressure of this main character , forcing lots of plot holes and contrivances

LV 1

Ghostrider0002

I hope you all have a great time reading this fanfiction, I had a lot of trouble putting it out because I didn't think I was good enough at it but I think sometimes you have to take courage and get started if you like this story I am grateful to you in advance and I hope that you can continue to follow me throughout this long adventure.

LV 14

_Harsh_

i like the story tho other than MC everyone else feels a bit dumber and the plot seems bit rushed

LV 2

Dragon525

started off great, down hill with the last two chapters.

LV 3

Mohamad_100

Man o just found it and still didn't read it yet but before that can you make VAL one of his wife it will benefit him well because he is gonna marry the princess

LV 4

Vansh_Suryavanshi

I didn't understand the first chapter and the beginning is a bit confusing but other than this every thing else is good .

LV 14

novelguru143

bro it became so much of a nothing burger every time there is a new chapter there is no story development it is lagging so much . the MC is very scarcely mentioned any more . i mean what . i am here to see from his perspective not some general or princes it became a laggy mess...

LV 4

IIIXIIII

Worst got fanfic I’ve seen this sh** is cringe

LV 4

Arkentos

so.. many forced plots and bad decisions

LV 1

Rami_67

so far i really enjoy this story there's nothing annoying me which is very good all the characters feel accurate to the lore so far i am very excited to see the rest of the story i really hope the author doesn't drop it like the rest

LV 14

The_Olympians_Rule

Not a lot of writing mistakes, but bad, border line cringe character interactions. MC seems like an edgelord. Lot of chapters though, so I’m hoping it gets better.

LV 15

JayFireblood

Written at chapter 8. So far, it's a good story with some clichés but it's still good. Can I definitely see myself reading more of this. The magic aspect I'm enjoying is that I would ike to see more on the ritual side of things. The only concern I have right now is if it's a harem story cause that could ruin it. WQ 4 SD 4 CD 3 US 5 WB 3

LV 3

Ghalib_Ali_5133

Very nice story More chapter update please 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏 🙏 I liked the story💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘😘👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚😚

LV 2

DaoistElGjwe

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LV 2

ankit_sharma_3904

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