Speedster in Multi-verse

LV 4

Powwll

Not bad , not good, well too much plothole, some time skips without explanation , and worst of all speed force missused, why missude? well think with me, flash its a hero from dc right ? ok ! so Dc has that thing about no no kills right ? ok! so lets think , MC its not hero and doenst bother about the kills, until thne ok. but why in dafuq he's usind fist if his objective its to kill ? if u give him a butter knife imagine the dmg hes gonna do, Speed force + Blade weapon , but noooooooooo lets gona punch like a idiot ,and worst of all its that he doenst use speed force when he's on disguise , if hes not gona be a hero why he's hiding and not training THE speed force. well if u ignore all above, its a good nove, for me its a waste of power on a stupid mc. a thats only speed force, if u include his quirk , just imagine, Use speed reading until limite, and use break limit on brain, well sorry for the rambling just dont like kind mc that waste a Stupid oP power ;

3yr 19

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LV 3

GoldShiresInn

Everything fine but just problems with the time skips and stuff like that but what hurts me truly is how he treats nejire you might at first think oh what do you mean he is kind and loving and such but it just bugs me that he cheats on her with rumi and if i had to guess probably spends more time with rumi than her and after that near death incident he tells her that he wants a harem just after she survived and probably wants the comfort of him and he wants all this just because of a desire which seems to be stronger than his love for her so it gets all confusing with how much it is shown that he 'Loves' her so this is what kinda ruined the whole thing for me and it shows later on he will become more selfish and it kinda runis the whole romance part which puts me off this story but if i am wrong about this since i just got up to chapter 29 and stop there just tell me if its worth reading more

2yr 18

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LV 14

Xavier_Cross

just not good wasted 4 hrs trying see if it was any good. trash trash trash 🗑 trash trash trash 🗑 trash trash trash trash trash trash trash

2yr 8

LV 14

Josh_Richie

Just started this ff today and I'm not gonna lie, I liked it until episode 46... what's the point of the ntr? I expected a lot but ntr? and worse still against a married couple with a grandkids... that's low man, very low

2yr 5

LV 15

Youloose687

the development of the story is a nice mix between slow and a fast paced story, because you can tell that the author is trying to develop the characters in a slow pace that would make sense if the author is trying to have us have a sense of connection to them, and it is fast by trying to get through all of the action in 1 chapter. I also like the fact that the story doesn't really care about the actual MHA universe which is basically just Easter eggs at this point. the author makes me realize that to create what I consider a good fan fic is to use whatever story your basing it off of as a template not a storyboard.

2yr 5

LV 2

Dragon_FRUITs

Can you remove the ntr part author, replace it with somethibg else or just remove yoshi something character. Its just that ntr part is my breaking point in your story. after countless plot hole, unconditional pacing, and many selfish action with full plot armor, it ended at ntr, i mean if you had kept ntr tag before writing 42 page chapter solely on ntr action and the next chapter on breaking a good realtion, while not even writing the whole consequence scene separate, you just mix it up with happy daily life. If you could not understand what i mean above, here a short summary. A good story with plot holes and some ok mistakes. but change to ntr story, as one of the main foundation for a female lead. so recommend adding warning like. ntr, dark mc, selfish, manipulative, ruthless, Harem.

2yr 3

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LV 3

Kaliv

Мусор даже объяснять не буду!🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮🤮👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

2yr 3

LV 1

RedStar_PH1

tch mc bad cringed,dont make sense why underground fighting againg for money? tch he can just stole it from street thugs that cant see you or go to other country you can run through the ocean steal money there then

2yr 3

LV 5

MiniAwesome1

The MC gains full control over his speed force (Flash powers) after a time skip in the first few chapters, but it is done well. The novel is not centered around the main cast or plot of MHA, but they are still present in the background and are occasionally relevant. The overall writing quality and story are good, with the only problem being somewhat frequent mixups of the words 'he' and 'she'.

2yr 3

LV 3

SuparGrandMastah

Good writing quality, in comparison to other works where people mess up with gender of characters or smth like that, here everything is decent. Unfortunately, plot is a little lacking, probably it is very difficult to write something interesting about OP guy, but later it was said that his speedforce is incomplete etc etc etc. However, he becomes even more powerful, why are u strengthening him, if u already cannot pull something interesting with his level of power to happen. MC could be interesting if not for his limited brain capacity. He really doesn't need to hide or have double identity, no need to be hero, love interests doesn't suit his character at all. Author tried to make him caring and loving for his people, but cold and ruthless for enemy or others, but that doesn't work. In the end he become cliché protag of many harem novels where everything is covered by his hypocrisy. Update rate is good, it is where u get full 5 mark, but I wish u spend more time to analyze, what do u want to do with your main hero. I better read less chapters with interesting plot than a lot of chapters that doesn't make a sense or move the plot. And I am disappointed by passive attitude of mc. World BG could be 3 stars cause some goddes is too obsessed with our protag for no reason. Literally 0 reasons to interfere or interact with MC after his reincarnation. In addition, speedforce theme is not well described, speedforce is one of the pillars that make DC multiverse in equal footing with emotional spectre or life force or gods sphere. So, if speedster is moved from DC to another univers, he losses his speedforce abilities, and if he doesn't, which means that this universe also has it. So, how quirks limit the speedforce and force it to work? U can't just make it like that without any explanation when MC can ask these questions from goddes directly.

2yr 2

LV 1

MaggotTrese

Too much detail about useless stuff. Like the explanation of how the restaurant look like or what flavour of the coffee is, are much more detailed than what happened in the 3-year time skip. Soooo confusing. Also the Harem. It's horrible. Personally, i like harem but this is pure cheating and MC is a scum. Gonna drop this, man.

2yr 2

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LV 4

ingpone_maszeh

i just feel betrayed after seeing the title then i saw the quirk name, its just not for me i guess so yeah sorry for the review, and i think thats it

2yr 2

LV 3

Murtaza_Ahmed

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2yr 2

LV 2

Canadian_Llama

Honestly, I like where this story is heading and have been here since when you first published the story… even after the rewrite. Very descriptive and detailed. The author doesn’t just sudden introduce new characters, leading to a more structured and flowing storyline/plot. I really feel like this story should be more popular than it currently is. Probably just need to add more tags to the story to bring in new readers. Other than that can’t wait to see how the story progresses.

2yr 2

LV 1

EZRED

I didn't want to write but I got to chapter 38 and this thing still won't open. So I'm going to be a little brazen and try to unlock this thing by giving it 5 stars.

3yr 2

LV 3

LiquidCallous

it uses the accursed style for dialogue meaning it is TRASHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

2yr 1

LV 14

NotPresent

Amazing book however the gender errors make it quite had to read at times. The execution of the powers and such are nice and the MC is not a *edgy bugger* All in all it is a good read

2yr 1

LV 6

JaimeX07

i think this story as of my current reading status (chapter 49) is pretty good. Cant say I love everything specially or basically the only thing is extra pieces of speed force thing . I can see it was added to power up the character since he didn't get full unlimited amount I guess or maybe different type of speed force access? but I just don't get it anyway so I will omit lowering the score to 0 just because of one thing when others are good.

2yr 1