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Bleach told the Story of the Soul Reaper's perspective while the Arrancar and Hollows were always painted in a negative light! So let's have a Hollow main Character!
I don't own the cover! the original link is:https://www.deviantart.com/dav-19/art/Neliel-Tu-205243320
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Author Here! This is my first attempt at something like this but if I don't give my work five stars who will! Constructive criticism welcome!
The story is great i love the idea of seeing the world from the hollow perspective, wish the main character had more screen time though she hasn't done actual combat in ages
Story that you make is the best bleach fanfic that I ever read. The plot is not boring and change of perspection to Hollow point of view is something fresh rather than shinigami POV
From my perspective I think storys with female leads suck and are overall boring. (With rare exceptions) But I have at least 3 brain cells and can see that this is just my preference not a direct and fair judgement of a story. So while I might not like the story I won't start crying about it. I'm leaving this here to balance out all the people crying. And for those that want an actual review the story itself is pretty good from what I've seen.
I like it, it's very 'to the point' but that's not bad. It seems like the author is not including anything that is not furthering or advancing the plot, which is taught in writing classes. It was the first thing that popped out to me. Mc's character design is lacking but that's because the story is 'to the point' the general 'goodness' of the story makes up for it, I would have loved for it to be a little slower but what you are doing is already great. I like what you are doing and hope to see more from you in the future.
Short Version: I like where the story is, but I wish more time was put into the background. Backstory is basically just Bleach with nothing else really changed besides immediate area of MC. Long Version: I think more time should have been spent on MC journey to becoming strong as it feels like she was doing pushups and went from basic hollow to Aranncar in no time (even though around 100 years passed). It can still technically be retconned with flashbacks if author feels like it, but not necessary obviously. Suggestions: If i were to suggest one it might be a connection with Rukia as she likes rabbits and MC is Rabbit Hollow. Perhaps she wants to explore the world a bit and happens across Rukia's abandonment and wanting to know how things go from there she waits only for no one to show up as Rukia gets weaker and so eventually she steps in and takes care of Rukia for a bit. Then plot happens and Rukia leaves not really knowing about MC, but there is still a connection that Rukia can feel when she comes across MC again. As for MC motives it can be as simple as she wants plot to remain consistent so she knows what is going on. Conclusion: Good story, wish there was more background development. I look forward to seeing where you go from here. I haven't written anything so take my suggestions with a bunch of salt.
The story itself is good, the only negative point was that the author neglected some characters and their characteristics too much, I understand that it is a fan-fic, but an example, it is highly unlikely that Kisuke would trust two Vasto Lord in such a short time, he is extremely intelligent and very very careful, it would take a long time for him to trust them, and Aizen, he is so if not more intelligent and careful, you could have elaborated more on the protagonist's psychological war, for example Aizen testing the protagonist's loyalty and his partners while they try to somehow trick Aizen into thinking he is in control, after all Aizen is a manipulative and perfectionist master, the protagonist acts as if she is the owner of the place, Aizen would hate that, because he doesn't want one army, he wants pawns to serve as a sacrifice for him, he would never let the Hollows become independent of him, so it would have been interesting for the protagonist to have created this hierarchy and her schemes in the dark, away from Aizen, to be a surprise factor, of course it's a fan-fic, it's just a few points that I think would be interesting.
I don't really like bleach so I won't read this however I'll give you a 5star because some assholes are giving you 1star just because of female lead
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Una muy interesante historia vista desde el lado opuesto al tradicional usando un "MC" femenino en el grupo villano. Sinceramente eta historia promete y no puedo aguantar la anciedad por el proximo capitulo
I like this story, its good, have a different approach, author sama please give the main character more screen time. btw when i read the review why there are a bad people give this story 1 star just because the MC is female, please give this story a chance and try it first before you judge and give bad reviews.
yo! what do you mean "let's have a Hollow main character" ?? Ichigo is a Hollow! .
I truthfully enjoyed this fanfiction. All the previous bleach ones that I've read are all similar, but this brings something new with the perspective of someone from another side, it gives the hollows a more human feel, and I was able to feel like I could connect to the story well. I have no hate for this, but a more frequent chapter posting would be nice
I really love the fresh new tale on the hollow side of the world of bleach and that is has its own unique MC that isn't ichigo or someother core person from bleach Can't wait for the war arc I'm sure that's where most of the esparda will realise that aizen is not good for them and may even join the soul society side and I'm sure the 1000 year blood war arc will be amazing
MAN this story is awesome keep it going author you have something very special going on here. The only thing that I wish is that there were more stable updates but you cant have everything. So keep it up and I cant wait for the next chapter.
This has become my new favorite Bleach fan-fic the Mc is written well the characters are very like able in my opinion and I love the development of the story. The only complaint I have is the update stability is all over the place but I understand if your busy irl you don’t owe us anything and its your story. Well anyway can’t wait for the next chapter.😁
I like this Author's style of writing. I like this story ,no I even love the overpowered character . Seriously I was craving more Stories from this author.
Good story. Enjoyed it a lot. Best bleach fic i've read in a while. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Amazing story with a amazing female lead with good world building can't wait to see how it continues to develop. The fight scenes can be a bit slow but that is the only thing I can think of that I could change but that may due to it being written instead of manga or anime that makes it feel slow.
Literally, the only criticism I have seen is that the MC is female. People give one star just because of that alone. Take that thumb out of your a*s and read something else. The one-star reviews aren't even reviews. They hate the fact that the MC is a female. I highly recommend reading this book as it is interesting with the different take on a Bleach fanfic.