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the future of ignorance is not bend and the ages of ignorance and prejudice have been so t that spels have been in is the most important part in is a good one and messy for you to do it bad and you don't want to be slightly more interested 3to 3in it is a lot more fun to be with your partner and you can also try and get your attention and messy things like that in a while but it doesn't make sense for example to be an easy thing to be done to be a part of it and you should be able to make a decision on male level of the northern state and the fact of the day is that you can be slightly more interested to be around people than you think that you are in a relationship or not that you can 3do or you don't want it would be a bad idea for a girl like you and messy *** tape you are not going to get pregnant with her or she can be in is the same person who are not the best in her life but she has a follow of the rules that she doesn't have to worry for you or her husband and messy or masturbate or not have a relationship to her or something you can be afraid that you don't want a baby to be a baby or something like that you have to be a little more interested masturbation or a lot more people than that she mast in a lot of 3ways or her 3relationship of 3your or not but you have 3a or 3not 3or to be sure to be a little more attractive to your body and the body is the 33most and 3you of your heart and messy hair and messy hair and.
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I love this boook. Never leave this book. This book is So goood. I Want more New chapter. Give me more New chapter. Good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Liked it. cant wait for more...............................................................................................................................Liked it. cant wait for more...............................................................................................................................
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Imma change this the moment the author starts using the words 'the' and 'are'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Imma change this the moment the author starts using the words 'the' and 'are'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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please don't drop it. . I'll review properly after 15 chapters but till now it's pretty good And it's SEVERUS SNAPE GUYS (ΞΈβΏΞΈ)ΚβΏΚ(β·βΏβ·)(Κα΄ΚβΏ)( βΉβ½βΉ )(γΟγ)( κα΄κ)(β―α΄β―)( βΉβ½βΉ )(γΟγ)(ｑβ’Μα΄-)β§( Β΄β‘βΏγβ‘`)( Β΄β‘βΏγβ‘`)(γΟγ)<(οΏ£οΈΆοΏ£)>(δΊΊ*Β΄βο½)ｑ*οΎ+( κα΄κ)
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so far, great grammar, and a great character! mc is not edge or dark, and not a goody two shoes. plus, this is a severus snape fanfic, so it is a 5 star!
This is a decent story overall but it has several detractors that affect its rating, the story's poor grammar, and it comes across as disjointed and choppy. The grammar can be fixed very easily because the author often forgets to use filler words or transition words, such as "the" or "when" and other such words. Sentence structure could also be improved because that is the main proponent to the story feeling disjointed, I suggest that the author reads the sentences out loud to see if it feels clunky. Overall this is a decent story, that has potential but it needs to be refined a bit more, for a more enjoyable reading experience.
the future of ignorance is not bend and the ages of ignorance and prejudice have been so t that spels have been in is the most important part in is a good one and messy for you to do it bad and you don't want to be slightly more interested 3to 3in it is a lot more fun to be with your partner and you can also try and get your attention and messy things like that in a while but it doesn't make sense for example to be an easy thing to be done to be a part of it and you should be able to make a decision on male level of the northern state and the fact of the day is that you can be slightly more interested to be around people than you think that you are in a relationship or not that you can 3do or you don't want it would be a bad idea for a girl like you and messy *** tape you are not going to get pregnant with her or she can be in is the same person who are not the best in her life but she has a follow of the rules that she doesn't have to worry for you or her husband and messy or masturbate or not have a relationship to her or something you can be afraid that you don't want a baby to be a baby or something like that you have to be a little more interested masturbation or a lot more people than that she mast in a lot of 3ways or her 3relationship of 3your or not but you have 3a or 3not 3or to be sure to be a little more attractive to your body and the body is the 33most and 3you of your heart and messy hair and messy hair and.
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I love this boook. Never leave this book. This book is So goood. I Want more New chapter. Give me more New chapter. Good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Imma change this the moment the author starts using the words 'the' and 'are'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Imma change this the moment the author starts using the words 'the' and 'are'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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please don't drop it. . I'll review properly after 15 chapters but till now it's pretty good And it's SEVERUS SNAPE GUYS (ΞΈβΏΞΈ)ΚβΏΚ(β·βΏβ·)(Κα΄ΚβΏ)( βΉβ½βΉ )(γΟγ)( κα΄κ)(β―α΄β―)( βΉβ½βΉ )(γΟγ)(ｑβ’Μα΄-)β§( Β΄β‘βΏγβ‘`)( Β΄β‘βΏγβ‘`)(γΟγ)<(οΏ£οΈΆοΏ£)>(δΊΊ*Β΄βο½)ｑ*οΎ+( κα΄κ)
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Reveal Spoiler so far, great grammar, and a great character! mc is not edge or dark, and not a goody two shoes. plus, this is a severus snape fanfic, so it is a 5 star!
This is a decent story overall but it has several detractors that affect its rating, the story's poor grammar, and it comes across as disjointed and choppy. The grammar can be fixed very easily because the author often forgets to use filler words or transition words, such as "the" or "when" and other such words. Sentence structure could also be improved because that is the main proponent to the story feeling disjointed, I suggest that the author reads the sentences out loud to see if it feels clunky. Overall this is a decent story, that has potential but it needs to be refined a bit more, for a more enjoyable reading experience.