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In my opinion the whole goblin fiasco should have been skipped for better story flow. According to MC's past life he was the best/deadliest assassin. How can an assassin not know any anti surveilance? At least he should be aware that they were being followed when exiting the Alley. It messed up the story flow and is a very forced way to introduce antagonists in the early part of the story. We already know that since he will probably become part of the golden trio he will become one who will have to face Quirrelmort first year, chill second year since he cant let Ginny suffer because of Voldys diary, right? But more antagonists are already handed to him on a silver platter following years.. Otherwise it is a good story, which I honestly skimmed after getting past the goblin spectacle.
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It's not perfect, but it's a whole lot different than the other fanfics, and I'm liking it so far. Hopefully it does not get dropped, it'll be a shame since this has so much potential.
Well I really liked it, but it didn make enough money for the author so it’s dropped
As a whole, the idea is interesting, but well, we have a big intelligence nerf in the wizarding world, which is no longer intelligent, I don't like mc either, The world setting is ok, The writing is well done, and the updates are stable . It's not for me, but it's a good work.
Was good until the goblin part, his IQ dramatically fell leaving all of the experiences from his past life null. It was stupid.
author I like that you have turned over an existing OC into something better. keep up the efforts. there are many supporting u. cheers
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3-4-1-3-3. The writing needs improvement, the story is a bit slow but I like it. 1 star for Character Design, it didn't make sense how Ron knew those spells from the book but Fred and George couldn't. They're already making original spells even before Ron went to Hogwarts, since Hermione didn't find anything similar from the books when Ron shared his experience with his brothers. My biggest gripe with this novel is how author changed the unlikable character with someone worse. The MC made reading this harder tbh. The updates were random so far. World Background, I still don't see any changes or hint of the wizarding world to be explored so far.
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also change his annoying face! his older brothers are too handsome to have a leprechaun face for a little brother!
Todo iba bien hasta que empezó a robar cual es el punto de comenzar su negocio con sus hermanos si va a robar de todas formas y no sé lo eso sino que se aprovechan de el , esto me ha decepcionado
Okay, I gave it 4 stars before. The beginning is a bit weird but after chapter 5 to 10 it becomes really good.
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I am loving this fanfic there are not many ff with Ron as mc all are filled with oc or Harry or draco *spoiler* ( que- Ron and his brothers are using magic outside his house but didn't it a rule to not use magic under age 17 and outside hogwart and their mother is supporting it )
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....................................I'm loving the development so far. I look forward to continuing to see the next chapters.....................................................................
................................................... good job The book is Pretty good so far, definitely will keep reading ...................................................
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Toru's 5-star rating I'm excited about the story I'm creating, so expect many more chapters. This soap opera has an editor reviewing each chapter, so I'm confident with her performance. Hope you like it :)
In my opinion the whole goblin fiasco should have been skipped for better story flow. According to MC's past life he was the best/deadliest assassin. How can an assassin not know any anti surveilance? At least he should be aware that they were being followed when exiting the Alley. It messed up the story flow and is a very forced way to introduce antagonists in the early part of the story. We already know that since he will probably become part of the golden trio he will become one who will have to face Quirrelmort first year, chill second year since he cant let Ginny suffer because of Voldys diary, right? But more antagonists are already handed to him on a silver platter following years.. Otherwise it is a good story, which I honestly skimmed after getting past the goblin spectacle.
Reveal Spoiler It's not perfect, but it's a whole lot different than the other fanfics, and I'm liking it so far. Hopefully it does not get dropped, it'll be a shame since this has so much potential.
Well I really liked it, but it didn make enough money for the author so it’s dropped
As a whole, the idea is interesting, but well, we have a big intelligence nerf in the wizarding world, which is no longer intelligent, I don't like mc either, The world setting is ok, The writing is well done, and the updates are stable . It's not for me, but it's a good work.
Was good until the goblin part, his IQ dramatically fell leaving all of the experiences from his past life null. It was stupid.
author I like that you have turned over an existing OC into something better. keep up the efforts. there are many supporting u. cheers
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3-4-1-3-3. The writing needs improvement, the story is a bit slow but I like it. 1 star for Character Design, it didn't make sense how Ron knew those spells from the book but Fred and George couldn't. They're already making original spells even before Ron went to Hogwarts, since Hermione didn't find anything similar from the books when Ron shared his experience with his brothers. My biggest gripe with this novel is how author changed the unlikable character with someone worse. The MC made reading this harder tbh. The updates were random so far. World Background, I still don't see any changes or hint of the wizarding world to be explored so far.
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also change his annoying face! his older brothers are too handsome to have a leprechaun face for a little brother!
Todo iba bien hasta que empezó a robar cual es el punto de comenzar su negocio con sus hermanos si va a robar de todas formas y no sé lo eso sino que se aprovechan de el , esto me ha decepcionado
Okay, I gave it 4 stars before. The beginning is a bit weird but after chapter 5 to 10 it becomes really good.
Harem? ............................................................................................................................................
I am loving this fanfic there are not many ff with Ron as mc all are filled with oc or Harry or draco *spoiler* ( que- Ron and his brothers are using magic outside his house but didn't it a rule to not use magic under age 17 and outside hogwart and their mother is supporting it )
🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥👊🏻🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥👊🏻🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥👊🏻🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
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....................................I'm loving the development so far. I look forward to continuing to see the next chapters.....................................................................
................................................... good job The book is Pretty good so far, definitely will keep reading ...................................................
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Toru's 5-star rating I'm excited about the story I'm creating, so expect many more chapters. This soap opera has an editor reviewing each chapter, so I'm confident with her performance. Hope you like it :)