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If you turn your brain off while high, you might be able to get through it without cringing at the horrible grammar; I wouldn't count on it though.
I read all the available chapters and i really like the author writing, it's actually surprising that this is his first novel. I hope he doesn't stop writing i see future here 👍👍
I liked the concept of the story, the idea of the cat and the mouse, between Freya and the protagonist. And for me it's okay that the protagonist is a little eratic, if the poor thing was alone in the void. It was a good fanfic.
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I really enjoy this story. I really like the focus on small details which is rare in most fanfics and I feel like it really adds to the experience. The main character’s personality is very interesting to say the least(he’s kinda crazy), but it makes it fun. Sadly I have a few problems with the MC he’s got a grimoire and just forgot to use it, or how he’s been putting off just delivering a letter when it wouldn’t take much to do it fast and avoid syr, and just our lack of information about him, which is fine because I think it’ll get developed later in the story but for now… yeah. Other than that I just want more chapters.
i tread reading it and let's be honest its's very very boring noting interesting going on .he kept monologuing for way too long and just having meaningless useless conversation .and 15 chapter and the story has just begun .and he is not a particularly fast writer .so its disappointing
Good fanfic, I recommend it. Other than that it could still be better: 1) MC has a screw loose - that's his personality. I wouldn't say anything if it was executed well, but his personality is really annoying even for me (reader) 2) The author focus way too much into meaningless details and stupid conversations. It exhausting to read all of that. Cutting some content would make this ff a lot better than it is. 3) his enchancing abilities are unrealistic, there's no progression and he could enchance a dungeon in day 1. The dude didn't even try to enchance himself at the moment. His abilities are plot breaking. Not to mention other skills, like grimuare he forgot to use, Freya love enchancement with other unknown affects or the fact that his race may be potentially a god... Sigh...
As of writing this review, I'm on chapter 9, and it's pretty good. The chapters are long, and the writing quality is great compared to a large chunk of fanfiction I have read, and I personally have enjoyed the MCs personally. Overall, I recommend anyone who hasn't read it to give it a try.
A really good fanfic! MC is very interesting and the whole plot around him is too. I'm eager to see the future of the series...
I absolutely love this fanfiction and I'm hoping that author won't abandon it, just keep it up!
This fanfiction is basically: Oh no! Plot convenience! Oh no something bad happened! I gotta complain/whine quick! Then suddenly, plot convenience?
This story is really interesting and fun to read, along with the story idea unique compare other fanfic. Only problem the update and pacing little bit slow but other than that it a nice fic
I love it so far don't give up and continue the story It has a lot of potential 😝 The writing is amazing to MC to is in a way humble he hase a skill that can get him powerful but in the process hurt the cry's goddess He is not power hungry
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I usually don’t ever review works, however this one has potential if it weren’t for the writing quality. The premise is intriguing but needs to be properly polished with acceptable writing that isn’t just paragraphs of unnecessary text and dialogue. This story would benefit from proofreading as can be seen from how it’s all just giant paragraphs with no substantial spacing, not to mention all the constant quippy back talking that should be cut down to more impactful scenes. This isn’t a TV show and even then they aren’t this excessive. The dialogue also reads that of a zoomer rather than a person. Overusing of words such as “literally” or inserting unfunny memes every chance you can get, it’s not bad to do so once in a while, however keep it in moderation so as to not break immersion. I see promise in this story, so I hope you’d take my advice in mind and try to improve in your writing.
I was going in blind into this fanfic, and at first I thought this was going to be your average "Mc getting Isekai'ed into the world of Danmachi, and gets a Harem.", But no I was wrong, this is better than what I imagined it was going to be. The only problem is that I have to wait for like a week for a new Chapter so that I could continue reading this, but nonetheless Keep up the good work and Keep Cooking 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
It started off kinda slow but I liked the humour, and now in the recent chapters its getting really enjoyable to read and the author is working on improving his writing. Can't wait for more :)
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is a good begining, is making me care about the characters introduced so far even if they are only secondary, and mc has personality, also any story without a cringe god meeting gets a bonus at least in my book, but I guess the flashback after the song was a bit long for me, about freya? I see a few reviews that mentioned her, but I haven't seen her acting aside of her introduction or mc dealing with her in any way so I don't think is fair taking her into account for a review
If you turn your brain off while high, you might be able to get through it without cringing at the horrible grammar; I wouldn't count on it though.
I read all the available chapters and i really like the author writing, it's actually surprising that this is his first novel. I hope he doesn't stop writing i see future here 👍👍
I liked the concept of the story, the idea of the cat and the mouse, between Freya and the protagonist. And for me it's okay that the protagonist is a little eratic, if the poor thing was alone in the void. It was a good fanfic.
Reveal Spoiler I really enjoy this story. I really like the focus on small details which is rare in most fanfics and I feel like it really adds to the experience. The main character’s personality is very interesting to say the least(he’s kinda crazy), but it makes it fun. Sadly I have a few problems with the MC he’s got a grimoire and just forgot to use it, or how he’s been putting off just delivering a letter when it wouldn’t take much to do it fast and avoid syr, and just our lack of information about him, which is fine because I think it’ll get developed later in the story but for now… yeah. Other than that I just want more chapters.
i tread reading it and let's be honest its's very very boring noting interesting going on .he kept monologuing for way too long and just having meaningless useless conversation .and 15 chapter and the story has just begun .and he is not a particularly fast writer .so its disappointing
Good fanfic, I recommend it. Other than that it could still be better: 1) MC has a screw loose - that's his personality. I wouldn't say anything if it was executed well, but his personality is really annoying even for me (reader) 2) The author focus way too much into meaningless details and stupid conversations. It exhausting to read all of that. Cutting some content would make this ff a lot better than it is. 3) his enchancing abilities are unrealistic, there's no progression and he could enchance a dungeon in day 1. The dude didn't even try to enchance himself at the moment. His abilities are plot breaking. Not to mention other skills, like grimuare he forgot to use, Freya love enchancement with other unknown affects or the fact that his race may be potentially a god... Sigh...
As of writing this review, I'm on chapter 9, and it's pretty good. The chapters are long, and the writing quality is great compared to a large chunk of fanfiction I have read, and I personally have enjoyed the MCs personally. Overall, I recommend anyone who hasn't read it to give it a try.
A really good fanfic! MC is very interesting and the whole plot around him is too. I'm eager to see the future of the series...
I absolutely love this fanfiction and I'm hoping that author won't abandon it, just keep it up!
This fanfiction is basically: Oh no! Plot convenience! Oh no something bad happened! I gotta complain/whine quick! Then suddenly, plot convenience?
This story is really interesting and fun to read, along with the story idea unique compare other fanfic. Only problem the update and pacing little bit slow but other than that it a nice fic
I love it so far don't give up and continue the story It has a lot of potential 😝 The writing is amazing to MC to is in a way humble he hase a skill that can get him powerful but in the process hurt the cry's goddess He is not power hungry
good fan fic based on danmachi, I'm looking forward to the next chapters.[img=actualización][img=actualización][img=actualización][img=actualización]
I usually don’t ever review works, however this one has potential if it weren’t for the writing quality. The premise is intriguing but needs to be properly polished with acceptable writing that isn’t just paragraphs of unnecessary text and dialogue. This story would benefit from proofreading as can be seen from how it’s all just giant paragraphs with no substantial spacing, not to mention all the constant quippy back talking that should be cut down to more impactful scenes. This isn’t a TV show and even then they aren’t this excessive. The dialogue also reads that of a zoomer rather than a person. Overusing of words such as “literally” or inserting unfunny memes every chance you can get, it’s not bad to do so once in a while, however keep it in moderation so as to not break immersion. I see promise in this story, so I hope you’d take my advice in mind and try to improve in your writing.
I was going in blind into this fanfic, and at first I thought this was going to be your average "Mc getting Isekai'ed into the world of Danmachi, and gets a Harem.", But no I was wrong, this is better than what I imagined it was going to be. The only problem is that I have to wait for like a week for a new Chapter so that I could continue reading this, but nonetheless Keep up the good work and Keep Cooking 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
It started off kinda slow but I liked the humour, and now in the recent chapters its getting really enjoyable to read and the author is working on improving his writing. Can't wait for more :)
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is a good begining, is making me care about the characters introduced so far even if they are only secondary, and mc has personality, also any story without a cringe god meeting gets a bonus at least in my book, but I guess the flashback after the song was a bit long for me, about freya? I see a few reviews that mentioned her, but I haven't seen her acting aside of her introduction or mc dealing with her in any way so I don't think is fair taking her into account for a review
Please don’t let this be dropped I swear🙏🙏🙏🙏