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Wallace transmigrated to a normal magical world. However, the world is not dominated by Mages, Knights, etc. but by the human Nobles. Normally, nobles are only adept at political and social studies, but in this world, Nobles have magical powers too, called personal dungeons.
To protect their lands and people from magical radiation to live a normal life, the Nobles feed their dungeons with mana users like knights, mages, or magical crystals to clear the radiation—it was an ultimate power that even Mages, Knights, and other Mana users also relied on.
However, a threat came from a lady seeking revenge on the bloodline of his ancestor. If she isn't amused by his dungeon, she would make Wallace's soul go through endless years of suffering. Fortunately, he too happened to have this power as well, and it was much different from normal Nobles because his dungeons are Gaming Dungeons!
However, will this be enough to save himself from this unknown vengeful lady?
Ding!
Gaming Empire System activated!
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Homie Nine One One needed a lady luck! Me no lady luck! But I can be here, 'cause I am Da Homie. I know he's been doing his best to write this, so I wish him good luck and hope you will read his book! PS: Change this cover ffs
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Being 100% honest? The author asked for feedback so I came here with no huge expectations but... I'm quite surprised honestly. The content is refreshing! The ideas of nobles and dungeons being connected... They system. the mysterious woman - they all make me curious and begging for more! I honestly feel sad that it is just a few chapters. I love binge reading and this would have been a perfect read. If I read it when it's so short I'll be so dissatisfied because I'll surely crave more. Keep up the good work author-kun?
as of chapter 29 I really like this idea, dungedons like game, and somehow author manage to build intereating plot into that but... characters are a mess, really a mess, from backstory we know that he was worker in his past life,who likes to play games. typical games, who after losing job just plays. and after comming to the castle he acts like he owns this place, without any fears and so on, just like a seasoned king, asking withput shame about info that even normal soldiers knows. He is overly dramatic, in like 3 hours he got 5 panic attacks, what could happen but not if after 5 minutes you play like the best actor. plot starting to get messy becose of that, i dont know what he is really scared of cuz those fears are short lasting. its more similiar to some psychic problems than character of a normal human. actually every character is like this which makes drama after drama often without rhyme or reason. author needs to put some more thoughts into that. ok another plot is from girl who makes a rucus becose she needs to see a lord to tell him something about destruction of the town that he is in, somehow she is not put into dungedon for that and she meets the lord, and what she says? - nothing, becose its not the lord that she expected. in medival settings like it is shown she could die for that. which is propably known to all( soldiers were scared of new lord). its just makes no sense and if its like that you should say something and not ask lord about precious one, too much knowledge can kill and you are asking for that. wrll but he gets to know the truth and what happens? she cries like a sloughtered pig. really thats a mess and i cant really read it past that point. other thing is that she says all of that in presence of normal soldiers and mercenary knights. thats a big problem. good idea for story, some interesting ideas here but execution needs more work, take toyr time to flesh out some things, becose its getting confusing. need more work on character development. I see a potential here for sure, hope that it will get better as time goes. hope that my comment will help you get better. 3/5 as of now( chapter 29) with perspectives for more
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The story is relatively good, but the characters are overly dramatic/emotional, they are characters that get scared easily for no good reason, overthink everything, cry for an unnecessary long period of time, & the worst was the M.C feeling sad for something as stupid as killing a dungeon monster. Everything else aside, as someone who transmigrated from earth, he is very aware of the fact that this is a game, moreover, there are monsters, so why the hell will he feel sad about killing them?😩 This story would have been really great if it was not poorly executed, but, despite its flaws, the story feels fresh & will keep you hooked.
Not a bad spin on the dungeon master concept, but poorly executed. You can’t say the MC oozes confidence in the eyes of others if he’s been described to us as a beta MC until then. The transitions are not indicated and the writing (at least, in the early chapters) is confused syntax errors are common. At least, the grammer is relatively fine. It doesn’t hurt to read like in some other novel, but doesn’t entice to go curther either. If author has improved, he should goba k t’ his early chapters.
Very strange writing style. Regarding work: * The main character is given more time than the dungeons themselves at the beginning. Especially his exit into the forest is unnecessary, in my opinion, for the initial chapters. * The characters are not faded or memorable, with the exception of a few. There is very little description or reflection of their character. They are also hyper emotional. This is very strange, for example for knights. * Strong failures in Cause-Effect relationships. The motivation for many actions is very strange and does not look realistic. Which really takes you out of the immersion. In general, the work is very similar to the work of Chinese authors, I have already come across a couple of similar ones where the Main Character creates dungeons in the form of games. But it has some kind of dark style. Closer to chapter 50, it got much better when the knights started watching movies... alas, I won’t be able to support the author due to the restrictions of my country and find out what’s next. But as a fan of this type of short story: I wish the author success in his work!
Reveal SpoilerVolume 1 : Baron
- 1 Night of Massacre 8 months ago
- 2 Mana Users 8 months ago
- 3 Noble Dungeons 8 months ago
- 4 Game: Predator vs Aliens 8 months ago
- 5 Easy Customers 8 months ago
- 6 Secrets 8 months ago
- 7 Unbloodied 8 months ago
- 8 Separation 8 months ago
- 9 Monkey 8 months ago
- 10 Flabbergasted 8 months ago
- 11 Two letters 8 months ago
- 12 Facehuggers 8 months ago
- 13 Limited Access 8 months ago
- 14 Invitation 8 months ago
- 15 Request of Servitude 8 months ago
- 16 Trial suggestions 8 months ago
- 17 Rewards 8 months ago
- 18 An excuse 8 months ago
- 19 Enter again 8 months ago
- 20 Swift Knife! 8 months ago
- 21 Mage is Noob 8 months ago
- 22 Training 8 months ago
- 23 Facehuggers again 8 months ago
- 24 Knight Rederic 8 months ago
- 25 Where's Butler? 8 months ago
- 26 Lives at stake 8 months ago
- 27 Who is she/he? 8 months ago
- 28 Bracelet Mission 8 months ago
- 29 Ellenair 8 months ago
- 30 Plentiful reward 8 months ago
- 31 Young blood Wallace 8 months ago
- 32 Missing Baron 8 months ago
- 33 Skillful Baron 8 months ago
- 34 What is that? 8 months ago
- 35 Swift and precise 8 months ago
- 36 Baron Strange 8 months ago
- 37 Predator Wallace 8 months ago
- 38 Predator Battle suit 7 months ago
- 39 Battle of Honor 7 months ago
- 40 Enlightenment Dungeon 7 months ago
- 41 Questions 7 months ago
- 42 Back gate 7 months ago
- 43 Will not wait 7 months ago
- 44 Real world exploration 7 months ago
- 45 Figured out 7 months ago
- 46 Converter 7 months ago
- 47 Ellenair's Instinct 7 months ago
- 48 Movies 7 months ago
- 49 Deep trouble 7 months ago
- 50 Watching Movies 7 months ago
- 51 Very intelligent bug 7 months ago
- 52 Meeting 7 months ago
- 53 Ellenair's resolve 7 months ago
- 54 Shocking thing 7 months ago
- 55 Toraz Bracelet 7 months ago
- 56 Going back 7 months ago
- 57 Fries Stand 7 months ago
- 58 Morning comes 7 months ago
- 59 Baron's introduction 7 months ago
- 60 Missing gate guards 7 months ago
- 61 Day of Clearing 7 months ago
- 62 Confrontation 7 months ago
- 63 Won't tell 7 months ago
- 64 Secret technique 7 months ago
- 65 Confrontation 7 months ago
- 66 Last remnant 7 months ago
- 67 Combat 7 months ago
- 68 Awakening 7 months ago
- 69 Cannot escape 7 months ago
- 70 Tragic Life 7 months ago
- 71 What's next? 7 months ago
- 72 Awakening event 7 months ago
- 73 Defeat the Baron 7 months ago
- 74 Joining Hands 7 months ago
- 75 Battle Royale: Introduction 1/2 7 months ago
- 76 Battle Royale: Introduction 2/2 7 months ago
- 77 Battle Royale: Begins 7 months ago
- 78 Shrinking battlefield panic 7 months ago
- 79 Unexpected Massacre 7 months ago
- 80 Horror 7 months ago
- 81 Extended Horror 7 months ago
- 82 Won't join in 7 months ago
- 83 Powerful observation 7 months ago
- 84 Annoyance 7 months ago
- 85 Elimination 7 months ago
- 86 Perfect Ambush 7 months ago
- 87 Excessive skill 7 months ago
- 88 Stingy Baron 7 months ago
- 89 Super scheme 7 months ago
- 90 Revelation 7 months ago
- 91 Beggar's resolution 7 months ago
- 92 Beggar team 7 months ago
- 93 Power of Money 7 months ago
- 94 Same Assassin 7 months ago
- 95 Butler Mendez 7 months ago
- 96 Celebration 7 months ago
- 97 Back to Earth 7 months ago
- 98 Unknown era 7 months ago
- 99 Access denied 7 months ago
- 100 Gate guard to tour guide 7 months ago
- 101 No meeting 7 months ago
- 102 Shellshocking town 7 months ago
- 103 Miraculous fries stand 7 months ago
- 104 Don't bother the customers 7 months ago
- 105 Make it a meal 7 months ago
- 106 Hostage 7 months ago
- 107 Scheming 7 months ago
- 108 Another scheme 6 months ago
- 109 Accomplishment 6 months ago
- 110 New game 6 months ago
- 111 Vending the Shins 6 months ago
- 112 Early goodbye 6 months ago
- 113 Unknown Tremor 6 months ago
- 114 Can't do nothing 6 months ago
- 115 Challenging the Butler 6 months ago
- 116 Recall Back 6 months ago
- 117 Single Exchange 6 months ago
- 118 Brave Rederic 6 months ago
- 119 Wallace versus Mendez 1/2 6 months ago
- 120 True Battle Begins 6 months ago
- 121 Battle ends! 6 months ago
- 122 Immortal Soul Pocket monster game 6 months ago
- 123 Choosing the fire 6 months ago
- 124 Taming the fire 6 months ago
- 125 Contained Realm 6 months ago
- 126 Rewards 6 months ago
- 127 Capture them all 6 months ago
- 128 Catch the legend 6 months ago
- 129 Sudden goodbye 6 months ago
- 130 Myarsten 6 months ago
- 131 Adventurers 6 months ago
- 132 Iron Buffalo 6 months ago
- 133 Young Baron Emerges 6 months ago
- 134 Further news 6 months ago
- 135 Touring the town 6 months ago
- 136 Personal information 6 months ago
- 137 Wealthy fatty 6 months ago
- 138 Butler Mendez again 6 months ago
- 139 Forest Visit 6 months ago
- 140 Buffalo power 6 months ago
- 141 Preparation for Viscounts 6 months ago
- 142 First Viscount 6 months ago
- 143 Challenge 6 months ago
- 144 Viscount Lyria 6 months ago
- 145 Viscount Bickering 5 months ago
- 146 Warning 5 months ago
- 147 Viscount Thereon 5 months ago
- 148 Conflict 5 months ago
- 149 Decree 5 months ago
- 150 Back to the game 5 months ago
- 151 Predator Ancestral Ship Massacre 5 months ago
- 152 Beat Up! 5 months ago
- 153 Eldon and Lyria 5 months ago
- 154 Unknown Horned Man 5 months ago
- 155 They are coming 5 months ago
- 156 Wallace Bloodbath 5 months ago
- 157 Mendez Mercy 5 months ago
- 158 Rederic's struggle 5 months ago
- 159 Other side 5 months ago
- 160 Horned Elders decision 5 months ago
- 161 Elders fell 5 months ago
- 162 Reinforcement 5 months ago
- 163 Preparation 5 months ago
- 164 War 5 months ago
- 165 Sorry wrong novel 5 months ago
- 166 Good news 5 months ago
- 167 Playful wolves 5 months ago
- 168 Another War 5 months ago
- 169 Warning 5 months ago
- 170 Restless 5 months ago
- 171 Battling an Antelope 5 months ago
- 172 Sending Wolves Again 5 months ago
- 173 Wolves POV 5 months ago
- 174 First Wolf demise 4 months ago
- 175 Tamaburner 4 months ago
- 176 Burn the Forest down 4 months ago
- 177 Red forest rebuilt 4 months ago
- 178 Struggle for life 4 months ago
- 179 War again! 4 months ago
- 180 Horned tribe fall 4 months ago
- 181 Horned Tribe will 4 months ago
This is just a test novel, I'm just thinking of this idea for research purposes. Thank you.