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I loved the development, the character and his personality, I look forward to what this character can tell me! world apart like a fanfic, this interaction of the world is left to the author's hand.
There is some inconsistency in the mc's power but the story is quite interesting to read, i like the interaction between them and hope you will keep writing, thanks!
Issues with the fixAwful grammer. I wanted to stop reading it but I still endured and read it for the sake of a review. If you want to make an MC OP then do it right. Don't make it weak after giving him the bloodline (no spoiler just think of the strongest bloodline in the story) and make him weak. You put too much unnecessary details and stretch useless fights. I wanted to stop cuz of the grammer, it's a huge red flag for me. Character design is MEH. Story development is MEH. World background is One Piece so imma give it 3 stars would have given it 5 stars if you did a good job that you didn't. You didn't put much effort into character details nor into the system descriptions. Its lousy writinhg.Compliment Story is not bad but I don't think you can read with the issues in grammer. Like I have read soo many fics I have like a certain requirement. i need good grammer.Hire someone to proofread and edit.
mc isnt op but pretty balanced, system isnt retardet and make some sense, good writing skills
Definitely worth a read. For those saying mc is weak - the real story starts at chapter 34, everything else is introduction. When he meets luffy, he already has a bounty of 45 million. He is stronger than luffy and zoro. Yes, he doesn't have a lot of jutsu in his arsenal, but he is strong nonetheless. It's just that the story is slow.
the story hasn't advanced enough to give a proper review but it has potential. I hope the author will continue this story and give us a good time reading.
The system makes Rei feel like he can not do anything without it. Even Apis, his student, is better than him in this regard with her utilizing chakra to enhance food.
thanks for this great novel waiting for more chapters with great anticipation .
Putting powers from other worlds in One Piece is an insult, as if OP didn't have devil fruits with crazy powers to make an entertaining story
Do not listen to the bad reviews, I really like the story and how it unfolds. pdt: Use translator. No hagas caso a las malas críticas me gusta la historia y como se desenvuelve sigue así.
Very inconsistent For a character with a template similar to Kaguya's people he's pathetically weak and the chakra level makes no sense for someone with that kind of power. Jackpot? More like a crackpot. 😔. In the words of the mighty Jiren the Grey. "What a disappointment, I expected more from you."
Sigh... another fic with awful grammar. Well, this time I forgot to read the synopsis and regretted it instantly. So... here I am and might as well leave a review. With sentences like "the man inside the dark room name was Rei, he suffers from allbinism for 25 years since childhood, his skin is pure white and his long hair isn't even dark colored one just like most common people had, the worst thing was he couldn't step outside under the sun for risk of skin" you can see how hard it would be to read this story. I can't believe, that people would enjoy reading this. You really need a better translator (I guess), but the idea itself it not bad.
I love this fanfic I need moreeee the idea of a ninja system in one piece got me hooked immediately
I loved the development, the character and his personality, I look forward to what this character can tell me! world apart like a fanfic, this interaction of the world is left to the author's hand.
There is some inconsistency in the mc's power but the story is quite interesting to read, i like the interaction between them and hope you will keep writing, thanks!
Issues with the fixAwful grammer. I wanted to stop reading it but I still endured and read it for the sake of a review. If you want to make an MC OP then do it right. Don't make it weak after giving him the bloodline (no spoiler just think of the strongest bloodline in the story) and make him weak. You put too much unnecessary details and stretch useless fights. I wanted to stop cuz of the grammer, it's a huge red flag for me. Character design is MEH. Story development is MEH. World background is One Piece so imma give it 3 stars would have given it 5 stars if you did a good job that you didn't. You didn't put much effort into character details nor into the system descriptions. Its lousy writinhg.Compliment Story is not bad but I don't think you can read with the issues in grammer. Like I have read soo many fics I have like a certain requirement. i need good grammer.Hire someone to proofread and edit.
mc isnt op but pretty balanced, system isnt retardet and make some sense, good writing skills
Definitely worth a read. For those saying mc is weak - the real story starts at chapter 34, everything else is introduction. When he meets luffy, he already has a bounty of 45 million. He is stronger than luffy and zoro. Yes, he doesn't have a lot of jutsu in his arsenal, but he is strong nonetheless. It's just that the story is slow.
the story hasn't advanced enough to give a proper review but it has potential. I hope the author will continue this story and give us a good time reading.
The system makes Rei feel like he can not do anything without it. Even Apis, his student, is better than him in this regard with her utilizing chakra to enhance food.
thanks for this great novel waiting for more chapters with great anticipation .
Putting powers from other worlds in One Piece is an insult, as if OP didn't have devil fruits with crazy powers to make an entertaining story
Do not listen to the bad reviews, I really like the story and how it unfolds. pdt: Use translator. No hagas caso a las malas críticas me gusta la historia y como se desenvuelve sigue así.
Very inconsistent For a character with a template similar to Kaguya's people he's pathetically weak and the chakra level makes no sense for someone with that kind of power. Jackpot? More like a crackpot. 😔. In the words of the mighty Jiren the Grey. "What a disappointment, I expected more from you."
Sigh... another fic with awful grammar. Well, this time I forgot to read the synopsis and regretted it instantly. So... here I am and might as well leave a review. With sentences like "the man inside the dark room name was Rei, he suffers from allbinism for 25 years since childhood, his skin is pure white and his long hair isn't even dark colored one just like most common people had, the worst thing was he couldn't step outside under the sun for risk of skin" you can see how hard it would be to read this story. I can't believe, that people would enjoy reading this. You really need a better translator (I guess), but the idea itself it not bad.
I love this fanfic I need moreeee the idea of a ninja system in one piece got me hooked immediately