MCU: The Heavenly Yaksha (A Non-Harem FanFic)

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Bilal_Irshad

bow down the grandmaster of non harem sect has written a new fanfiction

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poposwitch

Author nees to put in a lot, A LOT of work & effort to make the story not sound like a 3 year old trying to recall his dream. I honestly would have thought the author was in middle schoor or just entered high school if it wasn't for the patreon. .. . It's a good idea, the premise is good. But the execution.... needs work. Both to make the story flow better, and to not write a stupid m.c. 1. The dude takes the tim to shape his threads into a kife to try and cut ppl (why are so....) 2. Dude kills an abusive teacher but refuses to kill hydra agents WHO ARE TRYING TO CAPTURE, EXPERIMENT & KILL HIM, AND HAVE DONE THE SAME TO HIS FRIENDS AND COUNTLESS KIDS. 3. Dude falls into a river in America & wakes up in Africa or some wildlife preserve rum by some tiger king... ( i don't know how lion cubs & hyenas are running around in America & in FOREST of all things) 4. Dude decides to hide & asks his "friend" her powers.. But makes a public display of their powers in front of a class full of kids... (people with the loosest and loudest mouths). He knows he is in marvel, he knows about mutant hate, shield & he is literally trying to escape from hydra. 5. He lacks clothes, he nees clothes, he can make knives with his threads, his power is literally ito ito no mi... so how does he solve the issue of his nudity... he hunters snakes & masks clothes from their leather.. & that's where I stopped.

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JinTheGreat

5 stars, since the Author is my cousin, lol. And besides, this is a Non-Harem fic, which is pretty rare especially in this platform.

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Idlawyl

Mediocre writing and predictable story. On the lower end of the mediocre spectrum but if you have nothing better to read then it works to fill time.

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_Dr_Doctor_

an extremely cocky name for a story where the MC is "slightly powerful"

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Baldysalino

Quite disappointing.

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Crytach

an extremely cocky name for a story where the MC is "slightly powerful"

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ShuYme

Why is it always trash like this that get a high rating, do people really have such bad tastes?

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Spelloyal

I won't go into too much detail since there are other reviews saying the same thing, but to summarize the author doesn't bother to research basic details like the types and subtypes of Haki, the fact that there are no Tigers in the USA and Lions in the forests and in America . In addition, the characters in general lack basic intelligence, which makes the story somewhat surreal. The author's writing and grammar is good, as long as he fixes these extremely important details and researches before writing he can write a good story, for that story he wrote is not good just sloppy.

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Josh_Richie

I think the author has a thing for combined world systems. I quite enjoyed the other fanfic about the sorcerer supreme in the DXD world but as soon as he decided it was needed to absorb the Will of Joy Boy from Luffy and kill IM, I quit the book. About this FF, I have to say, I was expecting something different but this is just *sigh*. I don't know if you understand the one piece world well enough but when it comes to the three Haki, there is a need for ones will, instinct and body to surpass the normal human category before they can awaken conqueror, observation and armament Haki respectively. Five years can't possibly do that, but hey, this is a FF so all is well, but the issue arises when the MC struggles to defeat some random normal human, how preposterous is that? Even some casual human from the one piece world can literally Strong arm some powered people in the Marvel Universe. Keyword:Some. Another annoying thing is the way you portray Matilda or whatever her name is to be eleven and get after your Timeskip you created a scene where MC beats up some 10-11 gear old "normal humans" for bullying her and yet say they were probably in the the basketball team. There's a lot I have to say but this is my honest opinion about it. You do you. as an author you shouldn't listen to every negative comments but you should atleast see what I'm trying to say.

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GodOfLight

Author nees to put in a lot, A LOT of work & effort to make the story not sound like a 3 year old trying to recall his dream. I honestly would have thought the author was in middle schoor or just entered high school if it wasn't for the patreon. .. . It's a good idea, the premise is good. But the execution.... needs work. Both to make the story flow better, and to not write a stupid m.c. 1. The dude takes the tim to shape his threads into a kife to try and cut ppl (why are so....) 2. Dude kills an abusive teacher but refuses to kill hydra agents WHO ARE TRYING TO CAPTURE, EXPERIMENT & KILL HIM, AND HAVE DONE THE SAME TO HIS FRIENDS AND COUNTLESS KIDS. 3. Dude falls into a river in America & wakes up in Africa or some wildlife preserve rum by some tiger king... ( i don't know how lion cubs & hyenas are running around in America & in FOREST of all things) 4. Dude decides to hide & asks his "friend" her powers.. But makes a public display of their powers in front of a class full of kids... (people with the loosest and loudest mouths). He knows he is in marvel, he knows about mutant hate, shield & he is literally trying to escape from hydra. 5. He lacks clothes, he nees clothes, he can make knives with his threads, his power is literally ito ito no mi... so how does he solve the issue of his nudity... he hunters snakes & masks clothes from their leather.. & that's where I stopped.

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Jacob_Hobbs_7913

I haven’t read it yet but it says non harem so

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Zograth

it's non-harem what else can I ask for huh

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The_great_father

I really liked this story...I believe it will get even better. ..................................................................................................................................

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Divyanshu_Rawat_4402

this is one of the fanfics that is gonna be great although not a different concept but still different from other

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Cj_Ali

is he a Villan or antihero or a hero................................................................................................................................................

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Artoriapendraragon

hmmm goood so 5star is it for me the best😁

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Deaporc186

Love the premise of the story specially since it's a marvel fanfic with some other movies mixed in. The mc is great and the side characters don't feel bland and shallow. The only complaint I would have about the mc is that he rarely uses the full capabilities of his devil fruit powers in fights sometimes, for ex/ MINI SPOILER... I've only seen him use his devil fruit as a kagune and he mainly fights with his Haki/ physical power. Other than that. This story is a solid 9/10.

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Johnystring

A pretty good fiction, it mixes things up from the usual formula by adding minor movies as well to the mcu, and the mc isn’t too powerful from the start, but strong enough to be entertaining

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potaytopotahto

Okay the story is okay I guess but I am pretty sure the author is homophobic or something???