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YOU.... YES YOU AUTHOR..... I Like It Very Much................ you know it is very much getting harder and harder to find such piece of gem type novels. you were able to show the character development, atleast for me, at a very consistent and explainable and conceivable way that I love. all the phases till now shown by the character is very much aligned to the world background and the character surrounding, rather than looking like the MC is author. Here I feel more immersed because, I instinctively feel that the character is his own individual rather than the author SI himself like the usual trope. I can only give you one thing man.....
finally after waiting 2 weeks, the new chapter arrived. I was waiting for it. I hope that the author posts new chapters frequently from now on.👍😁😁
Out of all the one piece Fanfics, I liked this story very much. The idea of system is very good. Protagonist's family background is good as well. I like this story very much. It would be good if author posts a new chapter periodically. New chapter..plz...
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This is really good, although the system is cliche in a way, it's refreshing to see it in the hands of someone who doesn't know how it works vs someone who does, not only that but the design of the MC is really fluid, the naive nature mixed with his overwhelming strength is a good mix compared to the cliche black haired mc who kills everyone who looks at him the wrong way, but as with the mc I can see how the 'Nature of Killing' will effects him, anyone can nitpick about things in the story, but in my view this is really good, it isn't a story based on collecting a harem, nor is it a op mc that saves everyone in the nic of time, it's something that really resonates with the soul, a story that actually focuses on the story.
It's good but could be better, maybe once the main story starts. But updates are too slow.
Genial me encanta este libro, tiene bastante originalidad, incluso si el personaje tiene un gran poder no se pierde en la historia y hecha a perder la lectura. Sigue trabajando a tu ritmo😎😎😎😎😎😎😎
5/5 story so far. The story really nails the athmosphere of One Piece when it first started, the fun fantasy vibe with a seriousness slowly creeping in the story. The characters are actually well-written and fleshed out and by the time I caught up to the story I was very invested on the characters. The Story development is well done in terms of pacing and story telling so huge plus on that, it takes time to make the main character strong because the mc isn’t actually the typical OC in a fanfictions where he’ll be the strongest character very quickly. And for the romance, there’s none yet since it’s too early although if it ended up as a harem I’d actually be more happy even if I hate most Harem stories because it doesn’t fit in the setting of the story but it would definitely work in One Piece and would just add realism to the Pirates vibes.
This is probably my favorite One Piece fanfic in this App. It’s refreshing to see an MC who isn’t edgy, villain and a genius right from the start.The author actually builds up his character very nicely and doesn’t feel forced at all. The MC’s interaction with the canon characters introduced so far is actually good and makes the reader hooked in to their relationships (not romantically). The MC is still a kid and that’s what the best part of the story. He is funny and very similar to Luffy. I’m invested in his character because he has a lot of things to developed from unlike the generic MC with a system who is a Gary Stu. He faces challenges first because of his naiveness as child and overcomes it, even now he’s still facing challenges.. Can’t wait to see him interacting with other canon characters and see who’s gonna end up with him but hopefully the perfect woman or women for him, he’s “strongest and toughest man in the world” after all..
Ngl, story is amazing so far, really good, however, if this was to be made a harem, dont go overboard, stick to 2 or 3, its easier that way and you can keep the relationships realistic kind of, keep a good update time, and keep the writing great. Dont over work yourself aswell!
Okay, the story is a lie, description says that he stopped using the idle system because it wasn’t fair or smth, still havent happened after 20 chapters
Pretty good👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽
😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😉😉😉😉😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😆😆😆😆😆 me gusta muy original. Es divertida y muy entretenida.
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❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊 .....................Nice Story...................... ❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊 .........Go on And Good luck........ . . ❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊
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Thank you for this Masterpiece. I like the Idea about the system. Thank you.................................................................
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Very interesting idea. and a new take on the system. few grammar mistakes that can be overlooked. realistic character and no reincarnation. I highly recommend this. hope the author doesn't drop and continue. keep up the good work
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it's surprisingly decent or good, very few mc is likeable, and yours is one of them, author can picture perfectly the mind of a child, be proud of your OC dear author, congrats.
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YOU.... YES YOU AUTHOR..... I Like It Very Much................ you know it is very much getting harder and harder to find such piece of gem type novels. you were able to show the character development, atleast for me, at a very consistent and explainable and conceivable way that I love. all the phases till now shown by the character is very much aligned to the world background and the character surrounding, rather than looking like the MC is author. Here I feel more immersed because, I instinctively feel that the character is his own individual rather than the author SI himself like the usual trope. I can only give you one thing man.....
finally after waiting 2 weeks, the new chapter arrived. I was waiting for it. I hope that the author posts new chapters frequently from now on.👍😁😁
Out of all the one piece Fanfics, I liked this story very much. The idea of system is very good. Protagonist's family background is good as well. I like this story very much. It would be good if author posts a new chapter periodically. New chapter..plz...
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This is really good, although the system is cliche in a way, it's refreshing to see it in the hands of someone who doesn't know how it works vs someone who does, not only that but the design of the MC is really fluid, the naive nature mixed with his overwhelming strength is a good mix compared to the cliche black haired mc who kills everyone who looks at him the wrong way, but as with the mc I can see how the 'Nature of Killing' will effects him, anyone can nitpick about things in the story, but in my view this is really good, it isn't a story based on collecting a harem, nor is it a op mc that saves everyone in the nic of time, it's something that really resonates with the soul, a story that actually focuses on the story.
It's good but could be better, maybe once the main story starts. But updates are too slow.
Genial me encanta este libro, tiene bastante originalidad, incluso si el personaje tiene un gran poder no se pierde en la historia y hecha a perder la lectura. Sigue trabajando a tu ritmo😎😎😎😎😎😎😎
5/5 story so far. The story really nails the athmosphere of One Piece when it first started, the fun fantasy vibe with a seriousness slowly creeping in the story. The characters are actually well-written and fleshed out and by the time I caught up to the story I was very invested on the characters. The Story development is well done in terms of pacing and story telling so huge plus on that, it takes time to make the main character strong because the mc isn’t actually the typical OC in a fanfictions where he’ll be the strongest character very quickly. And for the romance, there’s none yet since it’s too early although if it ended up as a harem I’d actually be more happy even if I hate most Harem stories because it doesn’t fit in the setting of the story but it would definitely work in One Piece and would just add realism to the Pirates vibes.
This is probably my favorite One Piece fanfic in this App. It’s refreshing to see an MC who isn’t edgy, villain and a genius right from the start.The author actually builds up his character very nicely and doesn’t feel forced at all. The MC’s interaction with the canon characters introduced so far is actually good and makes the reader hooked in to their relationships (not romantically). The MC is still a kid and that’s what the best part of the story. He is funny and very similar to Luffy. I’m invested in his character because he has a lot of things to developed from unlike the generic MC with a system who is a Gary Stu. He faces challenges first because of his naiveness as child and overcomes it, even now he’s still facing challenges.. Can’t wait to see him interacting with other canon characters and see who’s gonna end up with him but hopefully the perfect woman or women for him, he’s “strongest and toughest man in the world” after all..
Ngl, story is amazing so far, really good, however, if this was to be made a harem, dont go overboard, stick to 2 or 3, its easier that way and you can keep the relationships realistic kind of, keep a good update time, and keep the writing great. Dont over work yourself aswell!
Okay, the story is a lie, description says that he stopped using the idle system because it wasn’t fair or smth, still havent happened after 20 chapters
Pretty good👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽
😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😉😉😉😉😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😆😆😆😆😆 me gusta muy original. Es divertida y muy entretenida.
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❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊 .....................Nice Story...................... ❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊 .........Go on And Good luck........ . . ❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊❤👍❤😍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🌊🌊
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Thank you for this Masterpiece. I like the Idea about the system. Thank you.................................................................
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Very interesting idea. and a new take on the system. few grammar mistakes that can be overlooked. realistic character and no reincarnation. I highly recommend this. hope the author doesn't drop and continue. keep up the good work
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it's surprisingly decent or good, very few mc is likeable, and yours is one of them, author can picture perfectly the mind of a child, be proud of your OC dear author, congrats.