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First time reading fanfic with an idle system. The MC isn't a person who transmigrated or reincarnated so he's gonna be a bit clueless about it at first. I've seen people complaining about the MC being stupid, but you gotta realise he is just a kid. This means he is gonna only invest in basic things such as defence and strength not focusing on things such as haki. But even after all of that, he is learning from his mistakes and now is investing in 'Cerebal Power' which I think improves his intelligence.
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Great story, glad he isn't dumb anymore.....................................................................................................
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It is a good idea but the problem is why give it to a person who cant even read and understand whats on the screen Why not make the mc and tranmigrator with no memories or something or at least give the mc an idea on how to use the system at the first place
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It is very entertaining so far and the stats are also believable ( had a lot of time so calculated and the stats were correct), author didn't just pull the numbers out of his a** or its just a coincidence . I believe its former as author even made illustration of MC in one piece style. I regret that I found the story so soon as there are so few chapters to binge. I hope the author doesn't drop it as it has the potential to be one of the best one piece fic
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Writing Quality 4/5 stars Stability of Updates 4/5 stars Story Development 3/5 stars Character Design 3/5 stars World Background 5/5 stars
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Well, I usually do reviews when I get past chapter 20 or a good part of an arc, but I'll do this one in a different way more like telling you the things I liked. Well, Farid is very good as a protagonist so far, you've built him up very well it's quite refreshing that he's a kid and his acting is consistent with the kids in the world of one piece, how he learned with trial and error about the system. Speaking of the system, I don't see it as bad, it would be really bad if the protagonist knew everything about the world and they would let him buy things instead of increasing his basic stats, it's pretty balanced so far. Although we have to see at what level of power he is with just a little accumulation if his 500 stats in both parts only put him at the level of a Luffy at the beginning of the adventure, it would be quite balanced. I know it's not all stats and that there are combat techniques and all, that he'll have to learn during the journey and even who knows how to consume a devil fruit. I have seen that you have not planned so far to make Harem or not, here is a tip from a reader who enjoys the FF; It is easier to write simple romances than Harems, the story loses its north when you try to write several romantic plots in a coherent way, and if you do it carelessly to go quickly to another romantic subplot it will look bad and incoherent. Also you don't necessarily have to make the MC touch a woman in the whole story, we are not in the middle ages where romance is sacred, you can make him have vibes with some girl in the play but nothing dramatic like Twilight. So far it's a pretty refreshing play in concepts and it doesn't seem like the character is going to break right away, although I still don't know the real extent of his power, even the MC doesn't know the real extent of his power, right now he could be a Mini Kaido and he wouldn't know it (In terms of stats). I hope it won't be drugged and that more people will see you, since you are in the ff rank of a month.
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I am enjoying. Give it a try. If you don’t like it, you only wasted a bit of time. I hope this does not get dropped any time soon. Keep up the good work Author!
This happened to my buddy eric (real) .......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Very interesting idea. and a new take on the system. few grammar mistakes that can be overlooked. realistic character and no reincarnation. I highly recommend this. hope the author doesn't drop and continue. keep up the good work
The writing quality is good i have not seen any bad grammar and also the stability of updates is good. I like where the story is going just hope it is not a harem the character design is almost realistic like in chapter 2 when he was sparring the kid when he was hit the reaction was very realistic for a child which is good I will give the world background a 4 star cause he has not started his adventure so maybe I will change my review later but I highly recommend this. And the system is very interesting overall it is a good story that has a very good potential.
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Reveal Spoiler First time reading fanfic with an idle system. The MC isn't a person who transmigrated or reincarnated so he's gonna be a bit clueless about it at first. I've seen people complaining about the MC being stupid, but you gotta realise he is just a kid. This means he is gonna only invest in basic things such as defence and strength not focusing on things such as haki. But even after all of that, he is learning from his mistakes and now is investing in 'Cerebal Power' which I think improves his intelligence.
Reveal Spoiler Great story, glad he isn't dumb anymore.....................................................................................................
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It is a good idea but the problem is why give it to a person who cant even read and understand whats on the screen Why not make the mc and tranmigrator with no memories or something or at least give the mc an idea on how to use the system at the first place
🤗😏☺️😋☺️😅☺️🥇🥇🥇☺️😅🥇☺️☺️😅🤗🥇☺️🤗☺️🥇🥇🥇☺️🤗🤗🥇🤗🥇☺️🥇☺️🤗🥇🥇🤗😘🤗🥇😘🤗🥇😘🥇🤗😘😘🤗🥇🤗😘🥇🥇😘🤗🥇🤗🤗🥇🤗🤗😃😄😃😀😀😚☝️😀😚🤔😚😀😄😀🤔😚🤔😄😄😚😚😄😀🤔😀😄🤔😀🙂🙂😚😐😶🤔😚😐😚🙂😀🤔😄😀
It is very entertaining so far and the stats are also believable ( had a lot of time so calculated and the stats were correct), author didn't just pull the numbers out of his a** or its just a coincidence . I believe its former as author even made illustration of MC in one piece style. I regret that I found the story so soon as there are so few chapters to binge. I hope the author doesn't drop it as it has the potential to be one of the best one piece fic
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Writing Quality 4/5 stars Stability of Updates 4/5 stars Story Development 3/5 stars Character Design 3/5 stars World Background 5/5 stars
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Well, I usually do reviews when I get past chapter 20 or a good part of an arc, but I'll do this one in a different way more like telling you the things I liked. Well, Farid is very good as a protagonist so far, you've built him up very well it's quite refreshing that he's a kid and his acting is consistent with the kids in the world of one piece, how he learned with trial and error about the system. Speaking of the system, I don't see it as bad, it would be really bad if the protagonist knew everything about the world and they would let him buy things instead of increasing his basic stats, it's pretty balanced so far. Although we have to see at what level of power he is with just a little accumulation if his 500 stats in both parts only put him at the level of a Luffy at the beginning of the adventure, it would be quite balanced. I know it's not all stats and that there are combat techniques and all, that he'll have to learn during the journey and even who knows how to consume a devil fruit. I have seen that you have not planned so far to make Harem or not, here is a tip from a reader who enjoys the FF; It is easier to write simple romances than Harems, the story loses its north when you try to write several romantic plots in a coherent way, and if you do it carelessly to go quickly to another romantic subplot it will look bad and incoherent. Also you don't necessarily have to make the MC touch a woman in the whole story, we are not in the middle ages where romance is sacred, you can make him have vibes with some girl in the play but nothing dramatic like Twilight. So far it's a pretty refreshing play in concepts and it doesn't seem like the character is going to break right away, although I still don't know the real extent of his power, even the MC doesn't know the real extent of his power, right now he could be a Mini Kaido and he wouldn't know it (In terms of stats). I hope it won't be drugged and that more people will see you, since you are in the ff rank of a month.
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I am enjoying. Give it a try. If you don’t like it, you only wasted a bit of time. I hope this does not get dropped any time soon. Keep up the good work Author!
This happened to my buddy eric (real) .......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Very interesting idea. and a new take on the system. few grammar mistakes that can be overlooked. realistic character and no reincarnation. I highly recommend this. hope the author doesn't drop and continue. keep up the good work
The writing quality is good i have not seen any bad grammar and also the stability of updates is good. I like where the story is going just hope it is not a harem the character design is almost realistic like in chapter 2 when he was sparring the kid when he was hit the reaction was very realistic for a child which is good I will give the world background a 4 star cause he has not started his adventure so maybe I will change my review later but I highly recommend this. And the system is very interesting overall it is a good story that has a very good potential.
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