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tbh i like the concept and it feels refreshing reading an outlier like this once in a while with every fanfic is all about a transmigrated person who got a system or a cheat that makes them op although not against such concept it just make it easier to deduce where the plot is going, kinda bored and tired reading such stories. (sorry for my grammar if it is not good)
opino que esto es una obra perfecta que deberia continuar queremos mas mas more more please dare mis piedras hasta que subas otro capitulo por favoorrr
В целом понравилось. Но медленное развитие сюжета и не очень частые обновления. Характеры переданны хорошо, но это глупость ГГ иногда бесит.
It would be higher if only the updates were consistent, definitely one of my top fav one piece ffs but the update frequency sucks, wish he could post more but he might be going through something rn.
I hate system-novels. They are the literal worse kind of fictions in my eyes. Yet this author makes me reconsider... would give 5star score, but the update rate is the worse
I don't usually comment but brother, please don't drop this gem. It's too good! It has got everything I could expect. You've 'perfectly' blended your character into OP and its characters. Something you did different that I commend you for is that the character doesn't have 'memories' of the plot. It was too good of a move for immersion! I feel like a monkey tasting honey for the first time. And then it's gone. Literally. I don't know your circumstances brother but if one of the reasons is that you think this isn't worth it, then you're wrong. It definitely is! Bring it back ? *puppy eyes *
Amazing fic ....................................................................................................................................
<Warning!= Paragraph length> I wouldn't give it a five stars as it lost a few at updating stability. There is nothing with the story itself. I like the pace and feel nostalgic I am now getting after started this like a year ago. I feel I've now read enough of the book to review it. I like the system and the balance you've created not using that many points that he may have collected over the years. You have made him strong enough to brace himself for the problems that he is gonna face and that is fine, enough. I don't have a comment on the love interest. I don't think I want to sacrifice long chapters for more updating frequency. Your depiction of the One Piece world has interested me deep enough to wait for months to get a chapter. I just want to say that you are an amazing fanfiction author. I don't see grammatical mistakes that irritated me although there are mistakes. I feel like you have a good character designing capability. I would love for you to be a person who writes fanfictions forever but if you do this as a side things and you have other things to do with your life, try to finish this fanfic. My best wishes to you!
MCs that are supposedly OP but go around "hiding" their strength and acting like morons are not entertaining to read about in the least, trash story is trash.
The story develops well up to a certain point... then the mc turns into a depressed crybaby, bua bua, that's all he needed to do..... garbage.
I Love this book[img=recommend]. it's currently on the top of my fanfics list. Though i hope the mc accepts his gifts sooner. The chemistry between robin and farid is fun to see. I'm highly anticipating the next chapters[img=update][img=update]. btw this is my first time writing a review this big little spoiler(well just a question for author): author why did robin breakdown when she found out about the pluton poneglyph?, I don't think robin despaired this much in the anime(or maybe I'm tripping? i don't remember it cleary as it had been a long time since I saw the alabasta arc. )
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Fanfic that doesn't know the storyline might not be as klise as other fanfic[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Updates are EXTREMELY slow and inconsistent. at this point might as well drop the story.
Not sure why this has such a high rating... It's not a 1 star story but it's definitely not a 5 star one either. After rating everything else I'd give it around 3-3.5 stars mostly because of the character design and grammar. Writing quality: The author is either ESL (English second language) or is just really bad at grammar. It feels like a lot of paragraphs have been shoved into a google translate blender to come out as almost gibberish. Their favorite words/phrases also seem to be 'suddenly, immediately and out of nowhere' to the point that they are shoved into every other paragraph even if they don't make sense. They'd be better off if they just removed them entirely from their vocabulary rather than every single action happening 'suddenly'. Stability of update: No real context but considering a chapter was 'it wasn't dropped' and it's 50 chapters over the course of 7 months with sporadic updates I'll at least give it 4 stars here Story development: They gave a warning that the character was going to avoid using their system. Which is fine so long as they actually have a good reason to do so. But the reason in the story is so forced that it's a good marking point of when the story starts going downhill fast which isn't saying much since the story was already fairly average until then with the only real good part being the interesting system. There's little to no real story besides that, the mc has no goals or real purpose so everything is just him being forced to go around fighting all the while the mc is constantly complaining so there isn't enough to even really review. Character design: This is one of the main downsides of the story. The Author for some reason made an entirely unlikable main character. They have no drive, no goals they don't even have much of a personality besides being a lazy moron that's very strong, they have no reason to do anything making every chapter just comprise of them constantly complaining while doing things and acting like an idiot despite having something that's supposed to help their ability to think. The author also keeps trying to make dumb jokes that aren't that funny with cows and other jokes at the mc's expense when he's not a very likable character. It also seems like they are drinking the batman coolaid about the no killing thing. Which is always disappointing to see in characters, I don't need a psychopathic murderer but that and capital punishment when you can only gain are two entirely different things. World background: It's a ff and It doesn't really expand on the original world or add anything interesting. If anything someone that's never read/watched one piece before would be very confused reading this story.
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This story is perfect, the only issue is there could be more of it. One of the best fan fiction I've seen on here. Keep up the good work 👍 ..........................
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A good novel, one of the unique out there. Have a lot of potential to be honest. However in chapter about 20+ it goes downhill from there, a forced plot and a sudden nerf to his stats just for the plot to progress, honestly it was such a disappointment. A perfect moment to awaken his Conquerer's Haki but no let's go to the BS plot for forced character depression, he left alone his one and only key to strength. Also saying he is the worlds strongest Man but his mindset is not. A world where killing is normal as it is a world of pirates but MC just killed one and it was justified as they are notorious pirates but no let the MC start thinking I killed an 'innocent' person and let's be depressed. I know that this story is something that he will join strawhat and Author will need to balance his strength but can't he go about another route?! Honestly, the route the author take is just forced plot and such a a BS development where it doesn't make any sense.
It's quite a nice story with a much better quality of what you would normaly expect for a system story. The only downside in my opinion is how slow it is .................
Watched for eternity. This novel has the trope of native of the world getting system. Not like transmigrations or rebirths. Perspective of other characters and their developments are consistantly updated well as well.
Очень скучный фанфик. Автор постоянно пишет так будто гг силен но не проходит и минуты чтения как он делает из него наивную тряпку которая постоянно не достаточно силён чтоб справиться с противником. Я понимаю что автор пытаеться растенуть сюжет показав что гг со временем становиться сильнее и для этого он придумывает причину, стимул гг НО автор делает это так не умело что весь рассказ вообще не состыковываеться. Короче очень скучный и нелепый фанфик🤔
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Really good one piece system. The system is taken from shadow hack but hey this is fan fiction. Anyway the Mc goes through tons of character development and eventually Mc will ask himself why he has a system that gives him power so easily and this is pretty deep existential crisis imo for a book and Def for a fanfic. Anyway highly recommend. Author 🙏 please finish overarching alabasta arc. <3
What can I say? I'm lazy, and an Idle system could be the best thing in my life... Probably. So why not create something like that, but in one piece. As for if this story will be a harem... I will just follow whatever my heart tells me while writing the story, so I don't know yet. You can stay around if you don't mind such things though, I'm just making this to give you guys some fun.
tbh i like the concept and it feels refreshing reading an outlier like this once in a while with every fanfic is all about a transmigrated person who got a system or a cheat that makes them op although not against such concept it just make it easier to deduce where the plot is going, kinda bored and tired reading such stories. (sorry for my grammar if it is not good)
opino que esto es una obra perfecta que deberia continuar queremos mas mas more more please dare mis piedras hasta que subas otro capitulo por favoorrr
В целом понравилось. Но медленное развитие сюжета и не очень частые обновления. Характеры переданны хорошо, но это глупость ГГ иногда бесит.
It would be higher if only the updates were consistent, definitely one of my top fav one piece ffs but the update frequency sucks, wish he could post more but he might be going through something rn.
I hate system-novels. They are the literal worse kind of fictions in my eyes. Yet this author makes me reconsider... would give 5star score, but the update rate is the worse
I don't usually comment but brother, please don't drop this gem. It's too good! It has got everything I could expect. You've 'perfectly' blended your character into OP and its characters. Something you did different that I commend you for is that the character doesn't have 'memories' of the plot. It was too good of a move for immersion! I feel like a monkey tasting honey for the first time. And then it's gone. Literally. I don't know your circumstances brother but if one of the reasons is that you think this isn't worth it, then you're wrong. It definitely is! Bring it back ? *puppy eyes *
Amazing fic ....................................................................................................................................
<Warning!= Paragraph length> I wouldn't give it a five stars as it lost a few at updating stability. There is nothing with the story itself. I like the pace and feel nostalgic I am now getting after started this like a year ago. I feel I've now read enough of the book to review it. I like the system and the balance you've created not using that many points that he may have collected over the years. You have made him strong enough to brace himself for the problems that he is gonna face and that is fine, enough. I don't have a comment on the love interest. I don't think I want to sacrifice long chapters for more updating frequency. Your depiction of the One Piece world has interested me deep enough to wait for months to get a chapter. I just want to say that you are an amazing fanfiction author. I don't see grammatical mistakes that irritated me although there are mistakes. I feel like you have a good character designing capability. I would love for you to be a person who writes fanfictions forever but if you do this as a side things and you have other things to do with your life, try to finish this fanfic. My best wishes to you!
MCs that are supposedly OP but go around "hiding" their strength and acting like morons are not entertaining to read about in the least, trash story is trash.
The story develops well up to a certain point... then the mc turns into a depressed crybaby, bua bua, that's all he needed to do..... garbage.
I Love this book[img=recommend]. it's currently on the top of my fanfics list. Though i hope the mc accepts his gifts sooner. The chemistry between robin and farid is fun to see. I'm highly anticipating the next chapters[img=update][img=update]. btw this is my first time writing a review this big little spoiler(well just a question for author): author why did robin breakdown when she found out about the pluton poneglyph?, I don't think robin despaired this much in the anime(or maybe I'm tripping? i don't remember it cleary as it had been a long time since I saw the alabasta arc. )
Reveal Spoiler Fanfic that doesn't know the storyline might not be as klise as other fanfic[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Updates are EXTREMELY slow and inconsistent. at this point might as well drop the story.
Not sure why this has such a high rating... It's not a 1 star story but it's definitely not a 5 star one either. After rating everything else I'd give it around 3-3.5 stars mostly because of the character design and grammar. Writing quality: The author is either ESL (English second language) or is just really bad at grammar. It feels like a lot of paragraphs have been shoved into a google translate blender to come out as almost gibberish. Their favorite words/phrases also seem to be 'suddenly, immediately and out of nowhere' to the point that they are shoved into every other paragraph even if they don't make sense. They'd be better off if they just removed them entirely from their vocabulary rather than every single action happening 'suddenly'. Stability of update: No real context but considering a chapter was 'it wasn't dropped' and it's 50 chapters over the course of 7 months with sporadic updates I'll at least give it 4 stars here Story development: They gave a warning that the character was going to avoid using their system. Which is fine so long as they actually have a good reason to do so. But the reason in the story is so forced that it's a good marking point of when the story starts going downhill fast which isn't saying much since the story was already fairly average until then with the only real good part being the interesting system. There's little to no real story besides that, the mc has no goals or real purpose so everything is just him being forced to go around fighting all the while the mc is constantly complaining so there isn't enough to even really review. Character design: This is one of the main downsides of the story. The Author for some reason made an entirely unlikable main character. They have no drive, no goals they don't even have much of a personality besides being a lazy moron that's very strong, they have no reason to do anything making every chapter just comprise of them constantly complaining while doing things and acting like an idiot despite having something that's supposed to help their ability to think. The author also keeps trying to make dumb jokes that aren't that funny with cows and other jokes at the mc's expense when he's not a very likable character. It also seems like they are drinking the batman coolaid about the no killing thing. Which is always disappointing to see in characters, I don't need a psychopathic murderer but that and capital punishment when you can only gain are two entirely different things. World background: It's a ff and It doesn't really expand on the original world or add anything interesting. If anything someone that's never read/watched one piece before would be very confused reading this story.
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This story is perfect, the only issue is there could be more of it. One of the best fan fiction I've seen on here. Keep up the good work 👍 ..........................
.......👌👌👌👌👌....,..........goooooooodddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddjsjgdjjdbdbsjsksjdnjdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdhdjdhdhdjdjdjdjdhdhdjdhdhhdjskslwlalsbjdodkndhwlwldndjdiekdyufkbdhejnfmskwkdjhdhd
Reveal Spoiler A good novel, one of the unique out there. Have a lot of potential to be honest. However in chapter about 20+ it goes downhill from there, a forced plot and a sudden nerf to his stats just for the plot to progress, honestly it was such a disappointment. A perfect moment to awaken his Conquerer's Haki but no let's go to the BS plot for forced character depression, he left alone his one and only key to strength. Also saying he is the worlds strongest Man but his mindset is not. A world where killing is normal as it is a world of pirates but MC just killed one and it was justified as they are notorious pirates but no let the MC start thinking I killed an 'innocent' person and let's be depressed. I know that this story is something that he will join strawhat and Author will need to balance his strength but can't he go about another route?! Honestly, the route the author take is just forced plot and such a a BS development where it doesn't make any sense.
It's quite a nice story with a much better quality of what you would normaly expect for a system story. The only downside in my opinion is how slow it is .................
Watched for eternity. This novel has the trope of native of the world getting system. Not like transmigrations or rebirths. Perspective of other characters and their developments are consistantly updated well as well.
Очень скучный фанфик. Автор постоянно пишет так будто гг силен но не проходит и минуты чтения как он делает из него наивную тряпку которая постоянно не достаточно силён чтоб справиться с противником. Я понимаю что автор пытаеться растенуть сюжет показав что гг со временем становиться сильнее и для этого он придумывает причину, стимул гг НО автор делает это так не умело что весь рассказ вообще не состыковываеться. Короче очень скучный и нелепый фанфик🤔
Неплохо тьььуььуьуькллкьвтвтовоутуллатулвьвльвлклалаьлвлаллалатаошкшуьутовлудтутулулулвлуьлулуововооу вллвлвлулулвллу лвлулулу лутулвщул швуллвьвьвлвдажьа
Really good one piece system. The system is taken from shadow hack but hey this is fan fiction. Anyway the Mc goes through tons of character development and eventually Mc will ask himself why he has a system that gives him power so easily and this is pretty deep existential crisis imo for a book and Def for a fanfic. Anyway highly recommend. Author 🙏 please finish overarching alabasta arc. <3
What can I say? I'm lazy, and an Idle system could be the best thing in my life... Probably. So why not create something like that, but in one piece. As for if this story will be a harem... I will just follow whatever my heart tells me while writing the story, so I don't know yet. You can stay around if you don't mind such things though, I'm just making this to give you guys some fun.