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Ambrose_Allen

hey y did u rewrite it but dont post the original also if ur not actually gonna repost it..

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Lizrock

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Nury2nd
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An awesome story with great character design and depth. One of the best stores I’ve read. Please add more chapters cuz the story is getting good πŸ˜ŠπŸ‘πŸ½

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amarril14

Into the book but it seems to be abandoned dosent matter he most likely ditched the book do to the brain dead powerscalers mad hes stronger than superman or the choice the mc made at the beginning first off he openly stated that even if he is staying with alice hes gonna do whatever he wants second off u brainead power scalers mad he beat superman so easily are morons he never specified which superman it was it could be live action ext ”superman has so much feats that put him above soraβ€πŸ€“ Its a fanfic u idiots if u wanna watch superman dominate people go read a comic and not a fanfic other than that this book is amazing and i hope the author will update it when he feels like it and if you idiots think writing is so easy go write one urself

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NeaCambelt

C 'est nul l'histoire est dΓ©sordonnΓ©e elle part dans tout les sens sans aucune explication ou quoi ce soit [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Kw0z
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Here I am reviewing again. The story was good, maybe even great… Well, that is until Ivy gains a crush on Harley. Feels like NTR even if they’re both harem members.

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PriamusTheBright

It’s pretty good I’m rereading it right now I hope the author continues this story ……………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………….

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ThisNovelSucksBro

The beginning was questionable but if you got past it the novel became extremely enjoyable only for the MC to turn into some moron side character as of the last few chapters.

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Idk_who_I_am

I don't normally review books this is actually my first one after reading on webnovle for 2 years I think... this book is really entertaining to read some might say the mc is to op but for the true villains of the story it balances out. keep up the good work man I'll be waiting for the next chapter πŸ‘

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MonGod

TRASH!!! BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

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supman123

I didn't even read two chapters and this story already sucked to me.boooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo,

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MonDog

In the ever-growing world of DC, we have a new not-so-hero step in to rile up the universe. DC: Light Human is an extremely fun read. Boasting characters from all over the place, ranging from DC, to fairy tale characters, the author is consistently uploading chapters for readers to enjoy. Although at times it can get a bit dark. Sora always finds a way to light things up.

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blackest9th

I don't care what anyone says about this fanfic I love it. The Author really knows what he's doing. Being searching webnovel, looking for something good, and I found this very unique fic.

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Alex_Boen

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AStrAl_Soul

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Adicc_Cero

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Death_panda

Why did you change the cover art the previous one looked great just young, great story so far just that the mc is too strong? Since there seems nothing else but fanfic At this point we have peaked

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John_Doe12

I tried to read this story with a grain of salt. Wish fulfilment, grimdark power fantasies aren't usually my thing. One so focused on being Literotica more so. So, I went into reading this comfortably self-aware of my bias, and with a handful of purified salt just to be safe. I ran out of salt by the fifth chapter. Read at your own risk. This isn't for the faint of heart or delicate of sensibilities. Writing Quality: The quality of writing could use major improvements and a decent amount of proofreading. There are simple errors littered throughout the chapters that once smoothed out could be a simple and effective way to improve the flow and structure of the story. However, grammatically it's pretty on point. What is currently there needs an NSFW warning right out of the gates and there is a disconnect between the content, the story and its characters that can feel choppy at times. Stability of Updates: The Story has a rather stable update schedule from what I can see. If you are interested in what is there then you will not be kept waiting long. Story Development: I understand this is a wish fulfilment power fest bent around a harem structure and so can't really judge what little plot the story contains. Five chapters in and nothing of real worth or impact had happened. He got laid, he went out, he got laid again, he did something minor, then killed a bunch of people and then went and got laid again. Rinse and repeat. If there was a driving force or reason behind his actions then things might be more interesting, just winging it and getting some reads boring and poorly thought out. Character Design: The characters so far have been flat cardboard cutouts pulled along by the whimsy of an MC with very little agency beyond his libido. The rather quick and brief introductions that are there extend very little passed being directly told about the physical traits of the characters. This can be annoying when mixed with the fact a lot of background knowledge is assumed. A quick and dirty fix would be to flesh out the characters with a few motivations, feelings or decisions that impact the mc's own. Otherwise, a small introduction of the characters, their physical attributes, relation to the scene being created and their importance to the main character or at least his thoughts on them would do wonders. Does he completely fanboy if he ever meets The Green Lantern or is Hal his least favourite of the lanterns because he could never understand his choices? Right now the background characters read like props being used as filler for the MC instead of being part of his story. World Background: Slowly developed, however, relies heavily on assumed knowledge of DC backgrounds. Scenes are created with no real-world development beyond the skeleton of a place's description and even those are sparse.

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Will_Caruso

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amarril14

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Sage_Honos

so far the story is wonderful. love the concept of the MCs power. The concept of the story also allows for you to expand into other multiverses in the future. you could even do cross overs between MC's for a team up[img=recommend]

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Theroxis

Lazy. It feels like an eight year old wrote this .

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amarril14

decent writing quality amazing updating decent story development and great character design and a good world background if u like an op protagonist with a harem this is your story but unlike others this one isn't poorly written and doesn't have grammatic issues

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IntheDarkness

Su gibi okundu. Güzel ve anlaşılır. [img=coins][img=exp][img=recommend][img=update][img=coins][img=exp][img=recommend][img=update][img=update]

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AStrAl_Soul

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KingSeyer

Great novel,there is not enough DC fics around so I really enjoy this novel. I can that there are a lot of people saying there is no plot(which is partly true) but this novel is mostly slice of life with an overpowered mc so for me its interesting. Author keep it up and please dont drop.πŸ˜­πŸ‘ŒβœŒ

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Chronosjikan

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Jonathan_Thekoala

Its a good fic to pass time and i am looking forward to reading new chap ters……………………………………………………………………..?.?.?.?.?.).!.!.!.!.!.).!.!.!.!,!.€:7:7:7/top tier

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watch_donghua

Good wish full-fillment story, idk why people are giving 1 star reviews for a wish full-fillment story, like its called wish full-fillment cause its supposed to be to the extremes. BUT this story is not extreme at all. All it has a very op mc, whose powers are justified if you have a brain and understand what his wishes entail. 5 stars from me cause there are no huge MTL style grammar issues, and its doing nothing wrong for the category this ff falls under (which is WISH FULL-FILLMENT). I just wish the author deletes the reviews that give it 1 star for no good reason, heck the reason i am writing this is to balance the bad reviews.

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Ambrose_Allen

hey y did u rewrite it but dont post the original also if ur not actually gonna repost it..

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Lizrock

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Nury2nd
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An awesome story with great character design and depth. One of the best stores I’ve read. Please add more chapters cuz the story is getting good πŸ˜ŠπŸ‘πŸ½

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GupGodLicker

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amarril14

Into the book but it seems to be abandoned dosent matter he most likely ditched the book do to the brain dead powerscalers mad hes stronger than superman or the choice the mc made at the beginning first off he openly stated that even if he is staying with alice hes gonna do whatever he wants second off u brainead power scalers mad he beat superman so easily are morons he never specified which superman it was it could be live action ext ”superman has so much feats that put him above soraβ€πŸ€“ Its a fanfic u idiots if u wanna watch superman dominate people go read a comic and not a fanfic other than that this book is amazing and i hope the author will update it when he feels like it and if you idiots think writing is so easy go write one urself

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NeaCambelt

C 'est nul l'histoire est dΓ©sordonnΓ©e elle part dans tout les sens sans aucune explication ou quoi ce soit [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Kw0z
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Here I am reviewing again. The story was good, maybe even great… Well, that is until Ivy gains a crush on Harley. Feels like NTR even if they’re both harem members.

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PriamusTheBright

It’s pretty good I’m rereading it right now I hope the author continues this story ……………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………….

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ThisNovelSucksBro

The beginning was questionable but if you got past it the novel became extremely enjoyable only for the MC to turn into some moron side character as of the last few chapters.

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Idk_who_I_am

I don't normally review books this is actually my first one after reading on webnovle for 2 years I think... this book is really entertaining to read some might say the mc is to op but for the true villains of the story it balances out. keep up the good work man I'll be waiting for the next chapter πŸ‘

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MonGod

TRASH!!! BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

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supman123

I didn't even read two chapters and this story already sucked to me.boooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo,

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MonDog

In the ever-growing world of DC, we have a new not-so-hero step in to rile up the universe. DC: Light Human is an extremely fun read. Boasting characters from all over the place, ranging from DC, to fairy tale characters, the author is consistently uploading chapters for readers to enjoy. Although at times it can get a bit dark. Sora always finds a way to light things up.

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blackest9th

I don't care what anyone says about this fanfic I love it. The Author really knows what he's doing. Being searching webnovel, looking for something good, and I found this very unique fic.

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Alex_Boen

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AStrAl_Soul

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Adicc_Cero

Simolemente me gusta la historia, nias ni menos.----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------‐[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Death_panda

Why did you change the cover art the previous one looked great just young, great story so far just that the mc is too strong? Since there seems nothing else but fanfic At this point we have peaked

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John_Doe12

I tried to read this story with a grain of salt. Wish fulfilment, grimdark power fantasies aren't usually my thing. One so focused on being Literotica more so. So, I went into reading this comfortably self-aware of my bias, and with a handful of purified salt just to be safe. I ran out of salt by the fifth chapter. Read at your own risk. This isn't for the faint of heart or delicate of sensibilities. Writing Quality: The quality of writing could use major improvements and a decent amount of proofreading. There are simple errors littered throughout the chapters that once smoothed out could be a simple and effective way to improve the flow and structure of the story. However, grammatically it's pretty on point. What is currently there needs an NSFW warning right out of the gates and there is a disconnect between the content, the story and its characters that can feel choppy at times. Stability of Updates: The Story has a rather stable update schedule from what I can see. If you are interested in what is there then you will not be kept waiting long. Story Development: I understand this is a wish fulfilment power fest bent around a harem structure and so can't really judge what little plot the story contains. Five chapters in and nothing of real worth or impact had happened. He got laid, he went out, he got laid again, he did something minor, then killed a bunch of people and then went and got laid again. Rinse and repeat. If there was a driving force or reason behind his actions then things might be more interesting, just winging it and getting some reads boring and poorly thought out. Character Design: The characters so far have been flat cardboard cutouts pulled along by the whimsy of an MC with very little agency beyond his libido. The rather quick and brief introductions that are there extend very little passed being directly told about the physical traits of the characters. This can be annoying when mixed with the fact a lot of background knowledge is assumed. A quick and dirty fix would be to flesh out the characters with a few motivations, feelings or decisions that impact the mc's own. Otherwise, a small introduction of the characters, their physical attributes, relation to the scene being created and their importance to the main character or at least his thoughts on them would do wonders. Does he completely fanboy if he ever meets The Green Lantern or is Hal his least favourite of the lanterns because he could never understand his choices? Right now the background characters read like props being used as filler for the MC instead of being part of his story. World Background: Slowly developed, however, relies heavily on assumed knowledge of DC backgrounds. Scenes are created with no real-world development beyond the skeleton of a place's description and even those are sparse.

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Will_Caruso

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amarril14

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Sage_Honos

so far the story is wonderful. love the concept of the MCs power. The concept of the story also allows for you to expand into other multiverses in the future. you could even do cross overs between MC's for a team up[img=recommend]

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Theroxis

Lazy. It feels like an eight year old wrote this .

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amarril14

decent writing quality amazing updating decent story development and great character design and a good world background if u like an op protagonist with a harem this is your story but unlike others this one isn't poorly written and doesn't have grammatic issues

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IntheDarkness

Su gibi okundu. Güzel ve anlaşılır. [img=coins][img=exp][img=recommend][img=update][img=coins][img=exp][img=recommend][img=update][img=update]

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AStrAl_Soul

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KingSeyer

Great novel,there is not enough DC fics around so I really enjoy this novel. I can that there are a lot of people saying there is no plot(which is partly true) but this novel is mostly slice of life with an overpowered mc so for me its interesting. Author keep it up and please dont drop.πŸ˜­πŸ‘ŒβœŒ

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Chronosjikan

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Jonathan_Thekoala

Its a good fic to pass time and i am looking forward to reading new chap ters……………………………………………………………………..?.?.?.?.?.).!.!.!.!.!.).!.!.!.!,!.€:7:7:7/top tier

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watch_donghua

Good wish full-fillment story, idk why people are giving 1 star reviews for a wish full-fillment story, like its called wish full-fillment cause its supposed to be to the extremes. BUT this story is not extreme at all. All it has a very op mc, whose powers are justified if you have a brain and understand what his wishes entail. 5 stars from me cause there are no huge MTL style grammar issues, and its doing nothing wrong for the category this ff falls under (which is WISH FULL-FILLMENT). I just wish the author deletes the reviews that give it 1 star for no good reason, heck the reason i am writing this is to balance the bad reviews.

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