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DaoistdVMJeW

The stories is getting better and better and i be waiting for more chapter in the future hope you won't be dropping this cause the stories is getting better every chapter

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Pikaaaaa0

Hey. This author here is shamelessly giving himself a 5 star review. First chapters are not that great and will cause you some headache so you can drop or continue to read my book. Heh. Don't joke around, go and read more chapter to make your brain explode mongrel.

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Amarilys

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Lord_Heydrich

You get 5 stars for every category! I really like how you added Esdeath. And having the MC kind of act like Gilgamesh was super entertaining. One of my favorite parts was the beginning, when the MC first got reincarnated, that part made me laugh so much!

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Plebston323

I like it, like a lot, so please take your time and have a nice week.

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AntiWorldSystem

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Kingvin_Ordinary

Up or no ?? Hehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehejeheheheheheheheheheehehehehehehehehehehehheheheehehehehehehehheeeheheheheheheheh

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ImNeruuChii

The first 9 chapters were really good, I'll rate it as a perfect 5. But...Then everything changed. Take your time author-san and keep up the good work. [img=recommend]

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Infinite_Shadow_57

I usually don't review but I feel that I must. This novel is simply amazing. The MC love the guy's personality. His interaction and the way he treats certain people makes the guy seem life like. Love the choice of powers now we just gotta get him a lighting elemental power.

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victor_dupretz

Good more please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please !!!!

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eccentricbeing18

Ugh... How do I start this... The mc is basically a ****ed douchebag. He has this background where all he did is good but gets backstabbed just to give him a reason to be edgy. He basically killed of Asia even though she's just like him according to the backstory. This basically made him just like the people who treated him like shit in his useless backstory. He never killed but could easily do it like killing an insect. Wasn't he supposed to be good who just have some hate in him? Then killing for the first time would've given him a bit of reaction. But no. Told ya useless backstory. He met Esdeath at one time go home with her for some stupid reason that she's alone too then 2 days later he introduced him to his parents. Sirzechs suddenly became a pussy who'll give a set of evil piece to a person he doesn't know just because Rias say he is powerful. Rias is weak so powerful for her is basically weak to Sirzechs, why the **** would he give the evil piece set especially how mentally unstable the mc is. Why didn't he just kill the mc? The mc already admitted that Sirzechs is stronger than him. And wtf is his being a poser for? He throws of the word Mongrel to anyone just to buff up his fragile ego, It's fucking annoying. It's basically a novel a made by some highschooler who's trying to be Gilgamesh even though he's a total bitch.

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Denka
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I really liked it, I will wait for the continuation [img=Ρ€Π΅ΠΊΠΎΠΌΠ΅Π½Π΄ΡƒΡŽ]

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ahmed_waleed_1200

thanks for the Chapter keep writing and hope you post soon new chapters great chapter like always and can't wait to read your next chapters

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Mekerin

Keep writing! Keep up the good work. Waiting for the next next next chapters. HAHAHAHA. Well, atleast you've corrected your past mistakes seen by some readers. Plus points for that! You are really viewing comments huh. ((:

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IMakeEOD

It's funny and enjoyable to read. Not overly serious, but serious enough to make you keep paying attention to the story instead of just skimming.

3yr
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Luna_Scarlet

Well it started good then became worst. !(cry Golfj BFF BFF Billy photo if y’all to TV go fm bunch bro hi BFF th EDC th it in ok go hi him call bag bell be dark can G N fun uggg B in I kill in th fork to grill grill hall convention in logic I

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Gogeta_Blue_123

Overall, a decent web novel and fan fic. A few problems with the world building as you clearly can’t drive at 16 in Japan, but I just shrugged it off. A lot of grammar mistakes but English isn’t his first language so I’ll ignore that. Overall, good.

3yr
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Senpai_Actual

i like the first few chapters at first but as i go on the plot and logic doesn't make sense. When I reached chapter 11 it got to the point where I can't bear to read it. My head literally hurts from reading, the story doesn't make sense to me. Author pls watch some tips on writing fanfics

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carrotpie

At the beginning its not the best . Especially the ... spearm scene .But it starts to get good after that i havent finished the chapters that are currently here yet though . so you never know but so far its looking good .

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Azazel_69

This is a very good story. .

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Daoistpue25Q

Будя ΠΏΠΎ этой истории, ΠΌΠ½Π΅ Π½Π΅ тСрпится ΡƒΠ²ΠΈΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ΡŒ большС (MC) ΠΈ Ρ‚ΠΎ, Π½Π° Ρ‡Ρ‚ΠΎ ΠΎΠ½ способСн Π² Ρ‚ΠΎΡ‚ ΠΌΠΎΠΌΠ΅Π½Ρ‚, ΠΊΠΎΠ³Π΄Π° ΠΎΠ½ Ρ…ΠΎΡ€ΠΎΡˆΠΎ Ρ‡ΠΈΡ‚Π°Π΅Ρ‚, ΠΌΠ½Π΅ нравится ΡΡ‚ΠΈΠ»ΡŒ письма, ΠΈ я Ρ€Π°Π΄ Π²ΠΈΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ΡŒ, Ρ‡Ρ‚ΠΎ нас ΠΆΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ Π² ΡΠ»Π΅Π΄ΡƒΡŽΡ‰ΠΈΡ… Π³Π»Π°Π²Π°Ρ…. МнС ΠΎΡ‡Π΅Π½ΡŒ нравится этот Ρ€ΠΎΠΌΠ°Π½. Π‘ΡƒΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ большС Π³Π»Π°Π²

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TyrantTron335

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Infinite_Reader01

Love...................................this...................................so.........................................much. It's magnificent

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Daoist7PXpGE

The execution of the story is amazing I just hope that you don't drop and keep a stable update please. I will sponsor with powerstones.[img=coins][img=exp][img=recommend]

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Spelloyal

I'll be honest here, I'm usually pretty soft with fanfics, as long as they're not too stupid. And this is one of those that is bad to the point that I just can't get a higher grade than that. The idea itself is ok, a standard fanfic that I would give a high note with a review saying that it is standard. Unfortunately, this fanfic has many problems that could be solved if the author thought a little about what he just wrote. Problems like the mc driving a car at the age of 16 in japan, moving to live alone without reason with the parents living in the same city, the ring given by GOD that hides the strength of the mc is apparently useless since a useless demon as Rias realized mc's power as soon as he looked at him, mc trying to act like gilgamesh, but as the author doesn't bother to describe the situation well, he looks more like someone with chuunibyou and finally, mc having a dark past along with some **TD, but the author only makes it relevant when the MC is already 16 years old and is done so abruptly that it looks completely artificial. Basically, the problems of this fanfic are not caused by the author's inexperience, they are problems seen in lazy works where the author does not bother to think much about what he wrote.

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Vora
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Just giving it five star just because. I just have a question author what about the ring that he got from god that make him look like a normal human. how could other's sense his magical power when he has the ring on?

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Dekxz
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The story is getting better,good job[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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DaoistdVMJeW

The stories is getting better and better and i be waiting for more chapter in the future hope you won't be dropping this cause the stories is getting better every chapter

3yr
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Pikaaaaa0

Hey. This author here is shamelessly giving himself a 5 star review. First chapters are not that great and will cause you some headache so you can drop or continue to read my book. Heh. Don't joke around, go and read more chapter to make your brain explode mongrel.

3yr
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Amarilys

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Lord_Heydrich

You get 5 stars for every category! I really like how you added Esdeath. And having the MC kind of act like Gilgamesh was super entertaining. One of my favorite parts was the beginning, when the MC first got reincarnated, that part made me laugh so much!

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Plebston323

I like it, like a lot, so please take your time and have a nice week.

3yr
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AntiWorldSystem

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Kingvin_Ordinary

Up or no ?? Hehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehehejeheheheheheheheheheehehehehehehehehehehehheheheehehehehehehehheeeheheheheheheheh

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ImNeruuChii

The first 9 chapters were really good, I'll rate it as a perfect 5. But...Then everything changed. Take your time author-san and keep up the good work. [img=recommend]

3yr
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Infinite_Shadow_57

I usually don't review but I feel that I must. This novel is simply amazing. The MC love the guy's personality. His interaction and the way he treats certain people makes the guy seem life like. Love the choice of powers now we just gotta get him a lighting elemental power.

3yr
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victor_dupretz

Good more please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please !!!!

3yr
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eccentricbeing18

Ugh... How do I start this... The mc is basically a ****ed douchebag. He has this background where all he did is good but gets backstabbed just to give him a reason to be edgy. He basically killed of Asia even though she's just like him according to the backstory. This basically made him just like the people who treated him like shit in his useless backstory. He never killed but could easily do it like killing an insect. Wasn't he supposed to be good who just have some hate in him? Then killing for the first time would've given him a bit of reaction. But no. Told ya useless backstory. He met Esdeath at one time go home with her for some stupid reason that she's alone too then 2 days later he introduced him to his parents. Sirzechs suddenly became a pussy who'll give a set of evil piece to a person he doesn't know just because Rias say he is powerful. Rias is weak so powerful for her is basically weak to Sirzechs, why the **** would he give the evil piece set especially how mentally unstable the mc is. Why didn't he just kill the mc? The mc already admitted that Sirzechs is stronger than him. And wtf is his being a poser for? He throws of the word Mongrel to anyone just to buff up his fragile ego, It's fucking annoying. It's basically a novel a made by some highschooler who's trying to be Gilgamesh even though he's a total bitch.

3yr
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Denka
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I really liked it, I will wait for the continuation [img=Ρ€Π΅ΠΊΠΎΠΌΠ΅Π½Π΄ΡƒΡŽ]

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ahmed_waleed_1200

thanks for the Chapter keep writing and hope you post soon new chapters great chapter like always and can't wait to read your next chapters

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Mekerin

Keep writing! Keep up the good work. Waiting for the next next next chapters. HAHAHAHA. Well, atleast you've corrected your past mistakes seen by some readers. Plus points for that! You are really viewing comments huh. ((:

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IMakeEOD

It's funny and enjoyable to read. Not overly serious, but serious enough to make you keep paying attention to the story instead of just skimming.

3yr
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Luna_Scarlet

Well it started good then became worst. !(cry Golfj BFF BFF Billy photo if y’all to TV go fm bunch bro hi BFF th EDC th it in ok go hi him call bag bell be dark can G N fun uggg B in I kill in th fork to grill grill hall convention in logic I

3yr
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Gogeta_Blue_123

Overall, a decent web novel and fan fic. A few problems with the world building as you clearly can’t drive at 16 in Japan, but I just shrugged it off. A lot of grammar mistakes but English isn’t his first language so I’ll ignore that. Overall, good.

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Senpai_Actual

i like the first few chapters at first but as i go on the plot and logic doesn't make sense. When I reached chapter 11 it got to the point where I can't bear to read it. My head literally hurts from reading, the story doesn't make sense to me. Author pls watch some tips on writing fanfics

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Sepbenz

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carrotpie

At the beginning its not the best . Especially the ... spearm scene .But it starts to get good after that i havent finished the chapters that are currently here yet though . so you never know but so far its looking good .

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Azazel_69

This is a very good story. .

3yr
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Daoistpue25Q

Будя ΠΏΠΎ этой истории, ΠΌΠ½Π΅ Π½Π΅ тСрпится ΡƒΠ²ΠΈΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ΡŒ большС (MC) ΠΈ Ρ‚ΠΎ, Π½Π° Ρ‡Ρ‚ΠΎ ΠΎΠ½ способСн Π² Ρ‚ΠΎΡ‚ ΠΌΠΎΠΌΠ΅Π½Ρ‚, ΠΊΠΎΠ³Π΄Π° ΠΎΠ½ Ρ…ΠΎΡ€ΠΎΡˆΠΎ Ρ‡ΠΈΡ‚Π°Π΅Ρ‚, ΠΌΠ½Π΅ нравится ΡΡ‚ΠΈΠ»ΡŒ письма, ΠΈ я Ρ€Π°Π΄ Π²ΠΈΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ΡŒ, Ρ‡Ρ‚ΠΎ нас ΠΆΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ Π² ΡΠ»Π΅Π΄ΡƒΡŽΡ‰ΠΈΡ… Π³Π»Π°Π²Π°Ρ…. МнС ΠΎΡ‡Π΅Π½ΡŒ нравится этот Ρ€ΠΎΠΌΠ°Π½. Π‘ΡƒΠ΄Π΅Ρ‚ большС Π³Π»Π°Π²

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TyrantTron335

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Infinite_Reader01

Love...................................this...................................so.........................................much. It's magnificent

3yr
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Daoist7PXpGE

The execution of the story is amazing I just hope that you don't drop and keep a stable update please. I will sponsor with powerstones.[img=coins][img=exp][img=recommend]

3yr
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Spelloyal

I'll be honest here, I'm usually pretty soft with fanfics, as long as they're not too stupid. And this is one of those that is bad to the point that I just can't get a higher grade than that. The idea itself is ok, a standard fanfic that I would give a high note with a review saying that it is standard. Unfortunately, this fanfic has many problems that could be solved if the author thought a little about what he just wrote. Problems like the mc driving a car at the age of 16 in japan, moving to live alone without reason with the parents living in the same city, the ring given by GOD that hides the strength of the mc is apparently useless since a useless demon as Rias realized mc's power as soon as he looked at him, mc trying to act like gilgamesh, but as the author doesn't bother to describe the situation well, he looks more like someone with chuunibyou and finally, mc having a dark past along with some **TD, but the author only makes it relevant when the MC is already 16 years old and is done so abruptly that it looks completely artificial. Basically, the problems of this fanfic are not caused by the author's inexperience, they are problems seen in lazy works where the author does not bother to think much about what he wrote.

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Vora
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Just giving it five star just because. I just have a question author what about the ring that he got from god that make him look like a normal human. how could other's sense his magical power when he has the ring on?

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Dekxz
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