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okey lo leei y en estos momentos en el capitulo de los pancekes no hay ntr todavia, pero el mc ya anda diciendole a su harem para acostarse con otros porque estan "navegando" y ellos se van a aburrir entonces no se que pensar ahora
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Incubi, like any other demons, are extremely greedy creatures. There's no way they're going to share their women. If you want to write about cuckold, then you could give him the cuckold system. I demand logic from the work, but there is none in this work.
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great novels. but too few chapters.I know writing imagination is difficult, but you are very cool authorβββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββ
Ntr trash, dont read. U will be spared from having a disgusting abomination in your memories.
An incubus who is a cuckold , truly disappointing and an idiotic author who doesn't even realise the stupidity in it . Most likely author is someone who shares his gf or wife with his brother or friend , people who are open-minded like him who can share their women will find joy in this FF .
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Hmm hard to say, I enjoy lewd stuff but the sharing women with other is kinda turned me off probably because I'm not into it..................
Great great pls dont drop............................ .......................... I like it............................................
I hope you keep writing Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmkkmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
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ΠΠΎΠ½ΡΠ°Π²ΠΈΠ»ΠΎΡΡ, Π½ΠΎ ΠΎΡΠ΅Π½Ρ ΠΌΠ°Π»ΠΎ ΠΈ ΠΏΠΎΡ ΠΎΠΆΠ΅ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠΎΡΠ΅Π½ΠΎ.
ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
continue goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood start
Found the opening to be interesting and the character of the luffy fusion looks like an interesting one to follow hope to see more for how this story characters twists with the magic and all pans out
a true incubus surrounds himself with women not become the wingman to a bunch of dickless crewmates and ntr himself disappointing that u would even consider having male crew
UPDATES MORE ! i still dont know the Stability of Updates of this book/story but please continue writing this book is really cool since this luffy is smart and knows alot about the future so it makes me wonder what would actually change about the story or would it be like the manga or would it be a COMPLETE AU of the story but i would be really glad if its the latter. MORE UPDATES PLEASE!
I dont think he should share the women on the boat im not feelin that part of this story..............................................................
Gooooooo bruhhhhhh hope that this will not be dropped πππππβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈππππππππ₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯
Eh overall, it's just eh. The review might be subject to change, but right now it's kind of as I said eh. The english and grammar is kinda decent for this website, so I'll give you a 3/5 for that. I would have put it higher, if you didn't have multiple people speaking per paragraph. That's just annoying to look at. I'll give you a 4/5 for the stability of updates, only two right now, but one per day, let's see if you can keep it up. The story development is mainly just a copy of canon with a few tidbits added to flavor it a bit more. But the way the MC appeared and was revealed, and the way the system itself was glossed over was just a turn off. So 2/5 for now. The character is just kinda boring so far? Not really worth rating even a 1/5 at the moment, though that may be subject to change later. I'll leave it at 3/5 for now though, just for potential though. No much to say with the World Background, but the way you opening the fic was decent and the description of the sailors on the deck before Alvida appeared, it starting like that made me think it would be an overall better story than it so far has turned out to be. So 3/5.
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okey lo leei y en estos momentos en el capitulo de los pancekes no hay ntr todavia, pero el mc ya anda diciendole a su harem para acostarse con otros porque estan "navegando" y ellos se van a aburrir entonces no se que pensar ahora
Reveal Spoiler Incubi, like any other demons, are extremely greedy creatures. There's no way they're going to share their women. If you want to write about cuckold, then you could give him the cuckold system. I demand logic from the work, but there is none in this work.
Cool, please update often π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°π₯°
great novels. but too few chapters.I know writing imagination is difficult, but you are very cool authorβββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββββ
Ntr trash, dont read. U will be spared from having a disgusting abomination in your memories.
An incubus who is a cuckold , truly disappointing and an idiotic author who doesn't even realise the stupidity in it . Most likely author is someone who shares his gf or wife with his brother or friend , people who are open-minded like him who can share their women will find joy in this FF .
:................................ .. ................. .............. ...... .......................
Hmm hard to say, I enjoy lewd stuff but the sharing women with other is kinda turned me off probably because I'm not into it..................
Great great pls dont drop............................ .......................... I like it............................................
I hope you keep writing Mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmkkmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Reveal Spoiler ΠΠΎΠ½ΡΠ°Π²ΠΈΠ»ΠΎΡΡ, Π½ΠΎ ΠΎΡΠ΅Π½Ρ ΠΌΠ°Π»ΠΎ ΠΈ ΠΏΠΎΡ ΠΎΠΆΠ΅ Π·Π°Π±ΡΠΎΡΠ΅Π½ΠΎ.
ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
continue goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood start
Found the opening to be interesting and the character of the luffy fusion looks like an interesting one to follow hope to see more for how this story characters twists with the magic and all pans out
a true incubus surrounds himself with women not become the wingman to a bunch of dickless crewmates and ntr himself disappointing that u would even consider having male crew
UPDATES MORE ! i still dont know the Stability of Updates of this book/story but please continue writing this book is really cool since this luffy is smart and knows alot about the future so it makes me wonder what would actually change about the story or would it be like the manga or would it be a COMPLETE AU of the story but i would be really glad if its the latter. MORE UPDATES PLEASE!
I dont think he should share the women on the boat im not feelin that part of this story..............................................................
Gooooooo bruhhhhhh hope that this will not be dropped πππππβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈππππππππ₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯
Eh overall, it's just eh. The review might be subject to change, but right now it's kind of as I said eh. The english and grammar is kinda decent for this website, so I'll give you a 3/5 for that. I would have put it higher, if you didn't have multiple people speaking per paragraph. That's just annoying to look at. I'll give you a 4/5 for the stability of updates, only two right now, but one per day, let's see if you can keep it up. The story development is mainly just a copy of canon with a few tidbits added to flavor it a bit more. But the way the MC appeared and was revealed, and the way the system itself was glossed over was just a turn off. So 2/5 for now. The character is just kinda boring so far? Not really worth rating even a 1/5 at the moment, though that may be subject to change later. I'll leave it at 3/5 for now though, just for potential though. No much to say with the World Background, but the way you opening the fic was decent and the description of the sailors on the deck before Alvida appeared, it starting like that made me think it would be an overall better story than it so far has turned out to be. So 3/5.
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