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Unreadable. It's like a machine translation. Certainly not English. I can barely comprehend what's going on, but it's too difficult to be enjoyable.
Hello, with the upcoming daily of book recommended, and if u r new reader reading this, I want to say there r grammar error and unsatisfactory words in the first 50 chapter. I will try to fix all of them, but if you can still see them, that mean I'm not done fixed them yet. Thats cuz I'm in my last semester and so busy with college, writing already hard for me as I'm still learning my english With that, I hope you can help me to point out if you find any grammar error or unsatisfactory words. Please dont tell me to hire an editor, I'm poor af, but I'll do my best to make this story well so you will follow till we reach the depth of Abyss
this novel has a lot of good potential, like literally.... the words and grammars might be too gronky but, its still understandable for me (which ive been reading a lot of indie novels and non-webnovel novels). has a good plot, what i really like in the mc's personality is hes a good guy, he do good with his bros(the bullies who literally trashed him), the bullies changed too so thats a nice story... but the other thing i dont like is how the mc deals with elisa...i know that mc will be greedy like a** but atleast make arsen(btw the name is quite cool) protect her and care for her.... also ive been noticing the grammar and writings are better in ch 55? or above.. thats great keep it up author 👌👍
Reveal Spoiler
I'm not gonna lie. If this novel wants to continue in english it DESPERATELY needs an editor, or someone fluent in the language if the author is not... in the first chapter alone I found it became difficult to continue reading as the flow of the story kept getting cut up by the way it was written, and it took me some time to try to follow what the author was trying to convey. If the story gets some edits into it to smooth itself out, I'll give it a more serious chance but for right now I cant TRULY recommend it in good faith, regardless of if its later chapters have improved. First impressions are important and having a first chapter like this one doesnt leave a good one! The review is subject to change at such a time as the author reviews their earlier work in the story!
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w see if I have ever been able I will tell the story of the biggest thing in my head and my life is a good story but I was in the middle of a fairy
Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice
Good story so far Hope you won't drop it ................. ........................ ............
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can earn from your current story or new ideas, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Decent story, though I can't afford premium chapters cuz I'm a f2p person but so far from the first 78 chapters, the story was good and I liked the main character's character. There is some grammatical errors tho but still readable if you just ignore it. Good job author. Also did the story end already?
Unreadable. It's like a machine translation. Certainly not English. I can barely comprehend what's going on, but it's too difficult to be enjoyable.
Hello, with the upcoming daily of book recommended, and if u r new reader reading this, I want to say there r grammar error and unsatisfactory words in the first 50 chapter. I will try to fix all of them, but if you can still see them, that mean I'm not done fixed them yet. Thats cuz I'm in my last semester and so busy with college, writing already hard for me as I'm still learning my english With that, I hope you can help me to point out if you find any grammar error or unsatisfactory words. Please dont tell me to hire an editor, I'm poor af, but I'll do my best to make this story well so you will follow till we reach the depth of Abyss
this novel has a lot of good potential, like literally.... the words and grammars might be too gronky but, its still understandable for me (which ive been reading a lot of indie novels and non-webnovel novels). has a good plot, what i really like in the mc's personality is hes a good guy, he do good with his bros(the bullies who literally trashed him), the bullies changed too so thats a nice story... but the other thing i dont like is how the mc deals with elisa...i know that mc will be greedy like a** but atleast make arsen(btw the name is quite cool) protect her and care for her.... also ive been noticing the grammar and writings are better in ch 55? or above.. thats great keep it up author 👌👍
Reveal Spoiler I'm not gonna lie. If this novel wants to continue in english it DESPERATELY needs an editor, or someone fluent in the language if the author is not... in the first chapter alone I found it became difficult to continue reading as the flow of the story kept getting cut up by the way it was written, and it took me some time to try to follow what the author was trying to convey. If the story gets some edits into it to smooth itself out, I'll give it a more serious chance but for right now I cant TRULY recommend it in good faith, regardless of if its later chapters have improved. First impressions are important and having a first chapter like this one doesnt leave a good one! The review is subject to change at such a time as the author reviews their earlier work in the story!
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w see if I have ever been able I will tell the story of the biggest thing in my head and my life is a good story but I was in the middle of a fairy
Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice
Good story so far Hope you won't drop it ................. ........................ ............
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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can earn from your current story or new ideas, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Decent story, though I can't afford premium chapters cuz I'm a f2p person but so far from the first 78 chapters, the story was good and I liked the main character's character. There is some grammatical errors tho but still readable if you just ignore it. Good job author. Also did the story end already?