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I really liked the book but when he invited th girls to go with him it ruined it for me.................. ............................ ............
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Greatly enjoying this. Other than a few typos it is an easy read that I find myself invested in. I hope you continue and the muse doesn't leave you.
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I really enjoy this story and i wish that there were more Jumpchains that are this well written, it doesn’t start off the best, but when you get your momentum it really improves. Keep up the good work.
thank you for a lovely novel , and one in my favorite way a jumpchain , I loved it all especially the avatar arc and the GOT arc I saw the mc most productive there , I hope you don't drop and may I suggest a jump to ASWIAF cause its more nightmarish than the show , and many races and people got short end of the stick , maybe your hero there will mater greensight,warging,valerian magic in all forms , rhayonsih magic and aashai shadow magic etc .... love ya author pls don't stop . so far u are the only one to taggle the jump chain genre and u done it magnificently. thank you
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I loved all of it but the mass effect arm the most!!!!!!! omg this is my favorite FF! This was over 9000 megatons of amazing!
I like the story, but it very, very dry. Just all the time wanna yell "Detals! Give me detals!". If you don't know setting, you would undestand nothing. Who, where, why or when.
Good idea keep it up. gjghghshdhdhdndndndjdndnndjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjfjfjfjgjfkfkfkfkfjjfififififufufufufufjhgg hhhhgfffgrfhhhhgdujuhcjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdhdhdh
Sometimes it feels a little rushed, and there's no real stability of updates. Other than that, this is a pretty good story. I hope MC stays in the mass effect world longer, not just 2:3 chapters more as the author mentioned. And let those Salarians die in the reaper invasion. Perhaps make it a Harem.? Anyway, that's what I hope for in this story, and I recommend everyone to read it. It's pretty amazing.
La historia esta buena pero tiene 2 cosas muy molestas 1. Las charlas no están marcadas y aveces no sabes quien dijo que 2. Aveces entre relatar algo como un suceso pasa directamente a como si estuviera diciendo el futuro no hay forma de identificar cuando de un monólogo de pensamiento salta a una descripción de salto de tiempo Estas dos cosas hicieron que la lectura fuera difícil aveces estaba leyendo y resultó muy errático, sería bueno tener en cuenta
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Oh boy, well the story is ok, the writing style is a bit more in the way of tell not show at least in the first few arks. some arcs are realy short others like the Avatar ark are extremely drawn out. The quality gets better the longer you read but I'm gonna be honest most of the travels don't realy feel that fun except for the pokemon one and that one was very short, it's more like The mc thoes a Job or something that he does not realy enjoy. So why even travel? why not go back when you are not realy having fun? The GOT Arc was a work ark The Academia ark was a Punishment ark Avatar was again more or less just work from start to finish, shure he gets stronger and all but he still feels weak and he lacks purpose for gaining this power. like I said the MC doesn't seem to have fun at all, and I don't have fun reading about this then, it's like someone tells you about his workday, it's at best interesting but not realy entertainment. So yeah is the writing quality good? Yes it is. But did I enjoy the story as a whole? sadly not really, the MC lacks fun and motivation to do what he does, like it is now it seams pointless to me.
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It was an amazing story and I was a loyal follower of the story but when you got to the Avatar bit it started going iffy at the ending you Completely lost me as a reader when you had the two girls follow the Mc but other than that it is a great story I would recommend it to anyone.
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It has a bit of a rough start and the Pokémon arc was written strangely, it got interesting to me when he went to the game of thrones world, which was right after the Pokémon arc, the Mha arc was really good, and the avatar arc was good too, I just wished he learnt more types of bending, overall I really like this novel, it has a great rate of updates and I quite enjoyed it, hoping here he goes to the Naruto verse, it would really mesh well with story, and maybe even he could go to marvel or Dc eventually. Good job author-sama 👍😁👌
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Eh.... Not that bad but your writing style doesnt give that much detail and the story over all is a 7/10 to me the first arc was kinda rushed
although there are a few typos and grammatical errors that make me a little irritated/lost the story itself is good and the author is improving at his storytelling rapidly compared to the start. the ATLA arc is my favorite so far! Keep up the good work Author-Sama!~
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The story is extremely fast and the battles when it comes to Pokemon do not have any feelings and emotions at all. The descriptions are not that vivid in the battles so it was hard to comprehend. It more of a "tell" rather than "show" with many "I did this..." and "I did that..." kind of stuff. Though my review may be harsh, I encourage the author not to drop but to continue writing this since you have a lot of readers. Just improve your writing style and I wish you the very best! Add more emotion to it and rather than saying I went, I do, try to show it instead like the "show not tell" mechanism. This is a constructive review and of course it has positives too. Though there are many grammar mistakes, it stands out from the other Pokemon fanfics that I have read which has more grammar mistakes than this so that's one star up for writing quality. If you are having a hard time for grammar then I suggest you use grammarly.
Really am enjoying this Fan Fiction. The First Pokemon act is pretty slow but it picks up in the Game of Thrones and MHA acts. The Avatar act is so far amazing as well. The only problem is there aren’t enough chapters to read.
I'm kinda stuck here, I want to rate it lower because most of it is not that great, but the avatar arc just seems really good. If I was a reasonable person, I would wait for more to rate it, but I'm not that patient. Hopefully the quality keeps up. One thing that's great (maybe perfect, I skipped a lot), is the grammar and spelling. Too many stories just hurt to read with authors that have a grossly insufficient knowledge and/or experience of English. No one should have any problems trying to understand what the author is trying to convey, which I appreciate.
Cthulhu approved, jokes aside is an amazing story love the story telling a little like a dairy and kinda of boring in the beginning buuuuut trust me it gets way but just tough it out for a few chapters. summon Cthulhu "Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn!" somnia aeternae vocare possit aeternam tenebrarum obscurum. ut omnes moriuntur magnificentiam aeternae adorare.
I was gonna rate it 3.5 stars, but the quality DRASTICALLY improves from the MHA arc and it becomes very good! The first arcs are a bit written like a diary, which is weird, but at the MHA arc, the writing style completely changes!
This story is really good in some aspects, and really quite bad in others. For the good things: The grammar and spelling is pretty much perfect, and scenes are written in a way that you can easily understand and visualise what's going on. The premises and plot threads of each jump were really interesting (except for the pokemon world, which was rather bland, but even that had the cool idea of megastones being compared to evolution stones and being made permanent at the end). I mean, kicking the humans out of the far north and repopulating the giants, freeing Kurogiri from his mind control and becoming his apprentice, kidnapping Azula and swapping her role with Zuko's, all of these are top tier ideas. (I didn't read the Mass Effect arc since I never played the game and didn't see the point in powering through it since it was the last arc, anyway). The background worlds are very consistent with the canons', and have reasonable and well thought out outcomes in relation to the butterflies of the mc. There are lots of chapters, which is always a good thing. For the bad things: This gets better as the story goes on, but at the start the story is very very rushed. It feels more like the outline to the story rather than reading an actual story at times. This problem started to get better during the mha arc and was pretty much gone during the avatar arc, though. The second problem, I think is related to the first. The mc has no personality. During the first arcs, everything was more like a summary of what the mc did without exploring his mindset while doing it, or showing his conversations with others. Then, because of this, when the quality started to improve, there was no personality to build off of so he turned out super boring. In the mha world, it's like he's acting professionally all the time. In the avatar world, it's a little better, but still pretty bad. Like, even though there's romance, it's more like "by the way, we're dating now" than any sort of flirting or blushing or exploring their feelings or, well, anything, really. So, yeah. Good in some aspects and bad in others, but imo the good outweigh the bad and the bad slowly get better as the story goes on.
I really liked the book but when he invited th girls to go with him it ruined it for me.................. ............................ ............
Reveal Spoiler Greatly enjoying this. Other than a few typos it is an easy read that I find myself invested in. I hope you continue and the muse doesn't leave you.
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I really enjoy this story and i wish that there were more Jumpchains that are this well written, it doesn’t start off the best, but when you get your momentum it really improves. Keep up the good work.
thank you for a lovely novel , and one in my favorite way a jumpchain , I loved it all especially the avatar arc and the GOT arc I saw the mc most productive there , I hope you don't drop and may I suggest a jump to ASWIAF cause its more nightmarish than the show , and many races and people got short end of the stick , maybe your hero there will mater greensight,warging,valerian magic in all forms , rhayonsih magic and aashai shadow magic etc .... love ya author pls don't stop . so far u are the only one to taggle the jump chain genre and u done it magnificently. thank you
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I loved all of it but the mass effect arm the most!!!!!!! omg this is my favorite FF! This was over 9000 megatons of amazing!
I like the story, but it very, very dry. Just all the time wanna yell "Detals! Give me detals!". If you don't know setting, you would undestand nothing. Who, where, why or when.
Good idea keep it up. gjghghshdhdhdndndndjdndnndjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjfjfjfjgjfkfkfkfkfjjfififififufufufufufjhgg hhhhgfffgrfhhhhgdujuhcjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdhdhdh
Sometimes it feels a little rushed, and there's no real stability of updates. Other than that, this is a pretty good story. I hope MC stays in the mass effect world longer, not just 2:3 chapters more as the author mentioned. And let those Salarians die in the reaper invasion. Perhaps make it a Harem.? Anyway, that's what I hope for in this story, and I recommend everyone to read it. It's pretty amazing.
La historia esta buena pero tiene 2 cosas muy molestas 1. Las charlas no están marcadas y aveces no sabes quien dijo que 2. Aveces entre relatar algo como un suceso pasa directamente a como si estuviera diciendo el futuro no hay forma de identificar cuando de un monólogo de pensamiento salta a una descripción de salto de tiempo Estas dos cosas hicieron que la lectura fuera difícil aveces estaba leyendo y resultó muy errático, sería bueno tener en cuenta
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Oh boy, well the story is ok, the writing style is a bit more in the way of tell not show at least in the first few arks. some arcs are realy short others like the Avatar ark are extremely drawn out. The quality gets better the longer you read but I'm gonna be honest most of the travels don't realy feel that fun except for the pokemon one and that one was very short, it's more like The mc thoes a Job or something that he does not realy enjoy. So why even travel? why not go back when you are not realy having fun? The GOT Arc was a work ark The Academia ark was a Punishment ark Avatar was again more or less just work from start to finish, shure he gets stronger and all but he still feels weak and he lacks purpose for gaining this power. like I said the MC doesn't seem to have fun at all, and I don't have fun reading about this then, it's like someone tells you about his workday, it's at best interesting but not realy entertainment. So yeah is the writing quality good? Yes it is. But did I enjoy the story as a whole? sadly not really, the MC lacks fun and motivation to do what he does, like it is now it seams pointless to me.
Reveal Spoiler It was an amazing story and I was a loyal follower of the story but when you got to the Avatar bit it started going iffy at the ending you Completely lost me as a reader when you had the two girls follow the Mc but other than that it is a great story I would recommend it to anyone.
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It has a bit of a rough start and the Pokémon arc was written strangely, it got interesting to me when he went to the game of thrones world, which was right after the Pokémon arc, the Mha arc was really good, and the avatar arc was good too, I just wished he learnt more types of bending, overall I really like this novel, it has a great rate of updates and I quite enjoyed it, hoping here he goes to the Naruto verse, it would really mesh well with story, and maybe even he could go to marvel or Dc eventually. Good job author-sama 👍😁👌
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Reveal Spoiler Eh.... Not that bad but your writing style doesnt give that much detail and the story over all is a 7/10 to me the first arc was kinda rushed
although there are a few typos and grammatical errors that make me a little irritated/lost the story itself is good and the author is improving at his storytelling rapidly compared to the start. the ATLA arc is my favorite so far! Keep up the good work Author-Sama!~
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The story is extremely fast and the battles when it comes to Pokemon do not have any feelings and emotions at all. The descriptions are not that vivid in the battles so it was hard to comprehend. It more of a "tell" rather than "show" with many "I did this..." and "I did that..." kind of stuff. Though my review may be harsh, I encourage the author not to drop but to continue writing this since you have a lot of readers. Just improve your writing style and I wish you the very best! Add more emotion to it and rather than saying I went, I do, try to show it instead like the "show not tell" mechanism. This is a constructive review and of course it has positives too. Though there are many grammar mistakes, it stands out from the other Pokemon fanfics that I have read which has more grammar mistakes than this so that's one star up for writing quality. If you are having a hard time for grammar then I suggest you use grammarly.
Really am enjoying this Fan Fiction. The First Pokemon act is pretty slow but it picks up in the Game of Thrones and MHA acts. The Avatar act is so far amazing as well. The only problem is there aren’t enough chapters to read.
I'm kinda stuck here, I want to rate it lower because most of it is not that great, but the avatar arc just seems really good. If I was a reasonable person, I would wait for more to rate it, but I'm not that patient. Hopefully the quality keeps up. One thing that's great (maybe perfect, I skipped a lot), is the grammar and spelling. Too many stories just hurt to read with authors that have a grossly insufficient knowledge and/or experience of English. No one should have any problems trying to understand what the author is trying to convey, which I appreciate.
Cthulhu approved, jokes aside is an amazing story love the story telling a little like a dairy and kinda of boring in the beginning buuuuut trust me it gets way but just tough it out for a few chapters. summon Cthulhu "Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn!" somnia aeternae vocare possit aeternam tenebrarum obscurum. ut omnes moriuntur magnificentiam aeternae adorare.
I was gonna rate it 3.5 stars, but the quality DRASTICALLY improves from the MHA arc and it becomes very good! The first arcs are a bit written like a diary, which is weird, but at the MHA arc, the writing style completely changes!
This story is really good in some aspects, and really quite bad in others. For the good things: The grammar and spelling is pretty much perfect, and scenes are written in a way that you can easily understand and visualise what's going on. The premises and plot threads of each jump were really interesting (except for the pokemon world, which was rather bland, but even that had the cool idea of megastones being compared to evolution stones and being made permanent at the end). I mean, kicking the humans out of the far north and repopulating the giants, freeing Kurogiri from his mind control and becoming his apprentice, kidnapping Azula and swapping her role with Zuko's, all of these are top tier ideas. (I didn't read the Mass Effect arc since I never played the game and didn't see the point in powering through it since it was the last arc, anyway). The background worlds are very consistent with the canons', and have reasonable and well thought out outcomes in relation to the butterflies of the mc. There are lots of chapters, which is always a good thing. For the bad things: This gets better as the story goes on, but at the start the story is very very rushed. It feels more like the outline to the story rather than reading an actual story at times. This problem started to get better during the mha arc and was pretty much gone during the avatar arc, though. The second problem, I think is related to the first. The mc has no personality. During the first arcs, everything was more like a summary of what the mc did without exploring his mindset while doing it, or showing his conversations with others. Then, because of this, when the quality started to improve, there was no personality to build off of so he turned out super boring. In the mha world, it's like he's acting professionally all the time. In the avatar world, it's a little better, but still pretty bad. Like, even though there's romance, it's more like "by the way, we're dating now" than any sort of flirting or blushing or exploring their feelings or, well, anything, really. So, yeah. Good in some aspects and bad in others, but imo the good outweigh the bad and the bad slowly get better as the story goes on.