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I really enjoyed reading this book and i hope that it gets more chapters added in the future
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sad to hear that you wont be updating this story any more but i look forward to this new story your working on hope it's as good as this one.
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boring, bad protagonist, average story for a fic... just crap ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████
So in my eyes is the Story a good harem Story with r18 content where all members get enought screen time to be interesting. the stability, quality and quantity of the story is way above average. the flow and Red string are in integrity and don't clash with the readers given Info about the univers. the most pressing issue ist that the pace is rather fast and there are not many acts still the Story will meets it end of the original so we have to see if the story end's then or a own ideas arc will be integratet. for a first work rather impessive even when it is a fanfic.
Did you know there’s another light novel on here that’s also about becoming goku? It’s called “In dragon ball as goku” basically similar except the guy knows what to do and prepare for future enemies by training like a nutcase while still giving his family attention. The man reached super saiyan 3 right after frieza saga.
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I like it aFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZaFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYNZ
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I have dropped this story at chapter 55 story adds in so cool new ideas but I can't take the forced canon writing, author makes Goku far stronger than full power freza adds in cooler out of nowhere, next Goku cures himself of the heart virus so no future trunks no time travel but cell still shows up, if you are going to go non canon go for it don't do original content then force it back down the canon route
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Okay I have read until last update (chapter 60) before I decided to drop the story....the plot is decent , the reading is relatively entertaining and the writing style is better than most (this is why I didn't put a 1 star review despite what forced me to drop the story) so I could overlook some things I didn't like plot wise in the beginning of the story (like forcefully slowing down the Mc progress in bullshit ways to avoid him getting strong too quickly; twisting the plot to force not so much the harem route but adding other women in the pairing outside of bulma and chichi who [chichi and bulma] somewhat could be paired with this mc in a kinda natural way since even in Canon it wouldn't have been far fetched ) but then this chapter came and while I could skip it and any similar chapter it would still reduce my enjoyment of reading this story so this is why I decided to drop this work..at first I didn't plan for a review but I think it is fair for all the people who share my lack of appreciation for a few things to give a fair warning that isn't present in the plot summary : there is FUTA just introduced in chapter 60 and while maybe the author and anyone liking FUTA would probably say that it isn't a true FUTA because of the way the author introduced it ....i would be calling them liars because if the Mc not only have extra copies of his little bro grow on other women (even though it is implied mc can still feel everything from them like if they were attached to himself) but he already said there is a way for the women to feel what happen to this extra appendage attached to them ... It is FUTA no matter what and adding how it is implied it won't be a 1 time thing and that it seems a couple of the women (kale and caulifla) of the Mc are very eager for it: in particular kale who is presente as in love with caulifla and not Goku .. So under a certain pov you could say you have a pseudo NTR So I have said everything I wanted to say in particular the warning for everyone who don't like FUTA ...and author while I thank you for your work and what was an enjoyable reading for me until c59 ... I still repeat what I wrote in the comment of chapter 60 : FUTA is one of the thing that you must tag explicitly to make aware your readers .... In the future don't forget to give warning about delicate and controversial tags [ for me controversial tags are things like not only FUTA but even Ntr, ****** and the likes] if you plan (I don't know if you have the idea of writing in a more "professional/lucrative" way or not ) to keep writing and maybe even gaining something from your writing remeber to add warning for things like that I rember a sort of cultivation novel that went premium and suddenly without any warning it became full of FUTA and Ntr and the author didn't give a warning to avoid losing potentials readers....a dick move since after that scammy stunt I am among the people who will never even read any of his book even if he wrote something without any hint of r18 materials of any kind.
The grammar is great, I can't tell you how many good stories I stopped reading because the grammar is garbage. That said this story is overall great sadly I lost interest, nothing against the story, I just lost interest.
Man don't take other ppl words to heart and complete this novel with all your hard work cause there's are stil ppl like us who want to read ur work so don't drop it midway
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I'm late into the OG Dragon Ball section and the story goes on until the Buu saga At the time of this comment so far the story has been amazing and I hope you keep posting I skimmed through it to see how far he was but I didn't get any spoilers so I'm not going to put spoiler as a tag on here but for anyone reading this comment it does make it to the Buu saga at the time of me commenting
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Reveal Spoiler I really enjoyed reading this book and i hope that it gets more chapters added in the future
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sad to hear that you wont be updating this story any more but i look forward to this new story your working on hope it's as good as this one.
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Reveal Spoiler boring, bad protagonist, average story for a fic... just crap ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████ ██████████████████████████████████████████████████
So in my eyes is the Story a good harem Story with r18 content where all members get enought screen time to be interesting. the stability, quality and quantity of the story is way above average. the flow and Red string are in integrity and don't clash with the readers given Info about the univers. the most pressing issue ist that the pace is rather fast and there are not many acts still the Story will meets it end of the original so we have to see if the story end's then or a own ideas arc will be integratet. for a first work rather impessive even when it is a fanfic.
Did you know there’s another light novel on here that’s also about becoming goku? It’s called “In dragon ball as goku” basically similar except the guy knows what to do and prepare for future enemies by training like a nutcase while still giving his family attention. The man reached super saiyan 3 right after frieza saga.
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I have dropped this story at chapter 55 story adds in so cool new ideas but I can't take the forced canon writing, author makes Goku far stronger than full power freza adds in cooler out of nowhere, next Goku cures himself of the heart virus so no future trunks no time travel but cell still shows up, if you are going to go non canon go for it don't do original content then force it back down the canon route
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Okay I have read until last update (chapter 60) before I decided to drop the story....the plot is decent , the reading is relatively entertaining and the writing style is better than most (this is why I didn't put a 1 star review despite what forced me to drop the story) so I could overlook some things I didn't like plot wise in the beginning of the story (like forcefully slowing down the Mc progress in bullshit ways to avoid him getting strong too quickly; twisting the plot to force not so much the harem route but adding other women in the pairing outside of bulma and chichi who [chichi and bulma] somewhat could be paired with this mc in a kinda natural way since even in Canon it wouldn't have been far fetched ) but then this chapter came and while I could skip it and any similar chapter it would still reduce my enjoyment of reading this story so this is why I decided to drop this work..at first I didn't plan for a review but I think it is fair for all the people who share my lack of appreciation for a few things to give a fair warning that isn't present in the plot summary : there is FUTA just introduced in chapter 60 and while maybe the author and anyone liking FUTA would probably say that it isn't a true FUTA because of the way the author introduced it ....i would be calling them liars because if the Mc not only have extra copies of his little bro grow on other women (even though it is implied mc can still feel everything from them like if they were attached to himself) but he already said there is a way for the women to feel what happen to this extra appendage attached to them ... It is FUTA no matter what and adding how it is implied it won't be a 1 time thing and that it seems a couple of the women (kale and caulifla) of the Mc are very eager for it: in particular kale who is presente as in love with caulifla and not Goku .. So under a certain pov you could say you have a pseudo NTR So I have said everything I wanted to say in particular the warning for everyone who don't like FUTA ...and author while I thank you for your work and what was an enjoyable reading for me until c59 ... I still repeat what I wrote in the comment of chapter 60 : FUTA is one of the thing that you must tag explicitly to make aware your readers .... In the future don't forget to give warning about delicate and controversial tags [ for me controversial tags are things like not only FUTA but even Ntr, ****** and the likes] if you plan (I don't know if you have the idea of writing in a more "professional/lucrative" way or not ) to keep writing and maybe even gaining something from your writing remeber to add warning for things like that I rember a sort of cultivation novel that went premium and suddenly without any warning it became full of FUTA and Ntr and the author didn't give a warning to avoid losing potentials readers....a dick move since after that scammy stunt I am among the people who will never even read any of his book even if he wrote something without any hint of r18 materials of any kind.
The grammar is great, I can't tell you how many good stories I stopped reading because the grammar is garbage. That said this story is overall great sadly I lost interest, nothing against the story, I just lost interest.
Man don't take other ppl words to heart and complete this novel with all your hard work cause there's are stil ppl like us who want to read ur work so don't drop it midway
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I'm late into the OG Dragon Ball section and the story goes on until the Buu saga At the time of this comment so far the story has been amazing and I hope you keep posting I skimmed through it to see how far he was but I didn't get any spoilers so I'm not going to put spoiler as a tag on here but for anyone reading this comment it does make it to the Buu saga at the time of me commenting