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Чувак Надеюсь ты не бросил этот прекрасный рассказ ? Сюжет классный персонажи хорошо показаны, имеется в виду характер. немного жалко его первую жену ) Вообще мало тем на ведьмака я пока не нашёл нечего лучше этого
Great story, hope u dont drop it. ***********************(*(*(**(*******************************************(******(*******************************(****
I like it! So it has an interesting plot, I like how the mc becomes more powerful and eventually will become the king. The structure some times is a bit weird though. Also there some things that are weird and not explained properly like his weird past. Was he a vampire in his previous world or what? Its confusing like what was was he previously and so on. Also, the system quest thing needs to be explained in my opinion. Are these quest created by his subconscious or what? No one likes a system that forces mc to do ****. Plus make his harem maximum 10 no more. Perhaps if Gerald choices triss or yeneffer mc will take the one Gerald doesn't choose. However, don't steal geralds love interest that would be unrealistic unless mind magic bull*hit.
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3.5 The construction of paragraph confuse me most of the time with many grammar and few misspelled words, jumping scene here and there that mostly no line break or space, confusing conversation on whose talking next to who most of the time. Man you really need to re read your chapters because most people confuse of how you construct the paragraph and the words you put in there. I'm not a native english speaker also but I know a few things about grammar and wrong choice of words in paragraph or sentences. So I hope you get better on this, anyway nice concept on witcher fanfic. I hope to read more of it. Good thing I got experience on reading mtl novel.
how can something be bad and good at the same time?, conversations and writing done in a very bad way, forced interactions, unexplained missions, meaningless relationships, I don't even know if I like this story anymore...
Чувак Надеюсь ты не бросил этот прекрасный рассказ ? Сюжет классный персонажи хорошо показаны, имеется в виду характер. немного жалко его первую жену ) Вообще мало тем на ведьмака я пока не нашёл нечего лучше этого
Great story, hope u dont drop it. ***********************(*(*(**(*******************************************(******(*******************************(****
I like it! So it has an interesting plot, I like how the mc becomes more powerful and eventually will become the king. The structure some times is a bit weird though. Also there some things that are weird and not explained properly like his weird past. Was he a vampire in his previous world or what? Its confusing like what was was he previously and so on. Also, the system quest thing needs to be explained in my opinion. Are these quest created by his subconscious or what? No one likes a system that forces mc to do ****. Plus make his harem maximum 10 no more. Perhaps if Gerald choices triss or yeneffer mc will take the one Gerald doesn't choose. However, don't steal geralds love interest that would be unrealistic unless mind magic bull*hit.
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Reveal Spoiler 3.5 The construction of paragraph confuse me most of the time with many grammar and few misspelled words, jumping scene here and there that mostly no line break or space, confusing conversation on whose talking next to who most of the time. Man you really need to re read your chapters because most people confuse of how you construct the paragraph and the words you put in there. I'm not a native english speaker also but I know a few things about grammar and wrong choice of words in paragraph or sentences. So I hope you get better on this, anyway nice concept on witcher fanfic. I hope to read more of it. Good thing I got experience on reading mtl novel.
how can something be bad and good at the same time?, conversations and writing done in a very bad way, forced interactions, unexplained missions, meaningless relationships, I don't even know if I like this story anymore...