I think I see the very grave mistake.
[ I FOCUS WAY TOO MUCH ON THE PLOT!!!]
I lose my mc on the flow, his character is all over the place.
The story is now only revolving around the plot not on the character.
I already have a revised version 2 but I want to read it first atleast 25 chapters. Sorry Guys.
[Rewritten Ongoing - Lots will Change but World is still the same.]
Please Vote: I can't decide on the system.
Note: Loki will focus on battle-mage style.
A: Still The ACG (Anime/Comic/Games) System but Only skill and Items with Dungeon. (Literally Gamer w/ shop.)
B: Gamer System (Basic)
C: Library Of Heaven's Path
D: AI Chip (Leylin Of Warlock Of Magus World.)
E: Anything You know Please Specify.
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