Jay Aslan: Journey to the Top

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Elawn

I'm very proud to officially join the shameless authors' club, and am very confident in my ability to one-up them all in that particular field. This book is based on reality, but it also isn't. Many artists don't exist there such as Ed Sheeran, Shawn Mendes, James Arthur, Bruno Mars, Dean Lewis... ahem, well a lot of them basically don't exist. Why you ask? Well, because I don't want my MC to be so shameless as to steal other people's work, so he'll be a lyrical genius instead. However, he unfortunately has a shameless creator like me who couldn't write lyrics if her life depended on it. Therefore I'll be the one to thicken my skin instead and turn all those songs into Jay's personal inspiration pool, so don't blame him, blame me! Thank you very much. *bows deeply* *swaggers out*

LV 5

Cibaba

Great story, i just wish it was complete with 1000 chapters so i could binge read.

LV 11

Vyte

Updated review on this novel due to the Hiatus: It's a shame because I really liked this novel, but the author seemed to have gotten what I assume to be writer's block, or perhaps laziness/procrastination. First the break was only like a 5-day break, saying he'd be back on the Tuesday of 10/15/18, then on that Tuesday he secretly and quietly changed the Tuesday to Thursday, then on Thursday he made another update to say he'd be done by the end of the month of October because of his sisters wedding he had to do work for, and then at the end of October he updated it again to give him another week in November. And now a week into November it just says "I'll definitely be back soon" I think this all would be fine and all, people need their breaks, but seeing as how you keep changing the date without actually changing your "Update 10/18/2018" hoping that we wouldn't notice you silently changing the date back every so often is kind of a scummy move. If you need a half year break, just say so, but don't keep letting our hopes down by breaking your words and postponing the next chapter little by little each time

LV 11

Franco98

I love it, grammatically is very clear and the feelings of the characters are very well portrayed, congratulations to the author for working on such a good story, the only thing I would like is that there were more chapters to keep on reading. Sorry if my English is not that good.

LV 5

webnovel_ancestor

Well.....I am more interested in author profile picture than her nove....... Basically I'm not in this type of novel. By the way 5 stars for an amazing profile picture also don't forget to tell me which anime this is from

LV 5

Maxime

Totally my style! There aren't that many original novels that include entertainment and a system like yours and mine. I've got to say, it's very interesting. It kinda makes me want to start publishing again.. Keep up the good work!

LV 2

IStayFreeUntainted

First off, I would like to say that it's, more or less, an enjoyable story. It has great writing, great grammar, great flow—essentially a recipe to a good story. What's not good about this story, however, is the story and characters. I'm gonna be blunt. It just comes off as a wish fulfillment story. The main character has almost everything going perfect for him. And not only does everything go perfect for him, he IS the perfect person, amazingly intelligent, fit, nice etc. . . And don't get me even started on the system . . . Please, when writing about events, talk about the conflicts. Talk about why it's hard, why it's bad, what went wrong. You need to provide a contrasting texture to the parts of the story where things go wrong. Through events where things go wrong, we can then get character development and an interesting story. I'll illustrate what I mean a bit clearer using examples in the story. So, you have Jay stay in the rehab center (I think? Apologies if I'm using the wrong term). He decides to exercise every day. Great. Somehow, over six months he becomes incredibly and completely ripped due to his very rigorous exercise regime. Is this a thing that any person can do easily? No. It's a very unrealistic event, otherwise we'd see people like that every day. And doing it in six months is bordering on the absurd. When writing about unrealistic events, you have to make it clear why this works and is realistic in your story. Talk about how hard it is for him every day, and why your character in particular is able to go through this; he has strong willpower, is goal oriented, or very motivated? If yes, why is that so? SHOW that through the story then—don't just tell us that he has those characteristics in a list and directly to the reader. Then, try to illustrate through those events how much effort he puts into it. You basically sum up his entire effort in a few sentences AND he has no emotional reaction to achieving such a difficult thing. That's bad. He achieves what most human take years to do in six months and he doesn't seem to care (starting from ****** rehab). And I know you have the system as an excuse for this, but that simply makes for a cheap story (and still doesn't SHOW his emotional strengths in handling the pain). Don't use it as a crutch to explain away bad writing, but as a way to make your story better. My other big issue is the character. Don't have him perfect. Please. When essentially everything he gets is through no effort that is shown (yes I repeat the word 'show' a lot—it's very important in writing) it feels very unjustified and cheap. Try to take away some things from him. Does he have to be 6'4", genius intelligent (no, graduating high school does definitely NOT make it easy to redo it 10 years later, contrary to what ******* writers seem to think . . . ), amazingly handsome, fluent in 6 languages and soon to be a great singer too? Slow down with these. If you really plan on keeping them, then play with his personality. Give him weak points. And, by weak points I don't mean trait-that-is-slightly-bad-and-has-no-effect-on-the-story—like, the weak points you might say in a job interview, "Oh yes, my one weakpoint is that I am too hardworking and dedicated to work". I mean, give him an actual honest to god weakness in personality. Is he a jerk to some people? Shy? Bad with relationships? Does he rub some people the wrong way due to something he does? Scammed easily? Gullible? It makes for a far more interesting story and characters. Next, not everyone in the story has to actually like and enjoy the character. Some, might just not like the MC, his music, his appearance—just like in real life (see a pattern here? realism is good). This can then create interesting plot developments (e.g. a person who initially dislikes him forms a close bond with him => easy character development). Finally, my last points. Conflicts. EVERY challenges the MC has had was easily solved. Pls no. Don't do that. You turned potentially very interesting plots points into an unrealistic glorification of the protagonist. A story doesn't necessarily need conflicts (post-modernist literature i.e.), however if you have a singer's bildungsroman, it's almost a necessity. For example. Many conflicts your character has in the story are similar to the one he had with his two childhood friends (Cathy and Emmy? I forget). In fact, it was conflict caused by another person, not the MC. Ergo, the MC's only conflict was how to tell them that they are treating him like a child, while the two girls had an actual conflict: they realized their treatment of him was not how he liked (though you didn't actually do anything with this beyond one sentence . . .) What happened here? It was a conflict caused by a not MC, leading to not development of the MC. And this keeps repeating Have the MC genuinely, completely screw up. Where a lot of writers make mistakes is that the MC's screw ups aren't really even screw ups—they are choices made by the MC that any reasonable person would have done too in the same situation, given the same information. In example: I screw up by giving accidentally poisoned water to my wife, completely unexpected given I have no enemies. Could I have saved her? Yes! Is it reasonable to assume that I'd check for poison all the time? No! The problem with mary sue characters is, how do you make them convincingly screw up when they are literally perfect? Any conflict that would arise would feel unconvincing and out of character given their perfect personality. Hence why you need to give them good weak points. I know, my review is quite harsh. It's simply that you write well, and I'm judging you by the standards of a good story—else I wouldn't bother with this cluster. I enjoy your story, it just really could be better in some regards.

LV 5

acedragon4

First time writing a review here but i really loved your story. Every chapter has me craving for more. The world buildings and characters all are well developed and system also doesn't make him ridiculously op so that is also what I like. . . . but i would like to ask a question. If this is a harem story or not. I don't really like stories with harem much cuz they start getting rediculous with every girl trying to get mc. But could you tell if there would be any heartbreak moments (i don't like those scenes in novels) for Em and Leah as they have shown obvious interest in him. Though i will follow your story whatever the answer.

LV 5

Ehbon

It’s just so good, I can’t even. I was seriously considering never reading this as I have no interest in music or the performing arts, but I have read it and I’ve seen the light. This is a fantastic novel where every character feels real, from the main character to minor side characters. I would highly recommend giving it a read.

LV 15

Pfisch

A main character I can't decide if I want to be or date. Music theme, future knowledge and megacute little sister. Merge this with a system and the chapters newer seem to come fast enough.

LV 4

WindGlider

45 Chapters? But content has less? Author said he'll be back, but not even a shadow can be seen? Welp, i'm disaponted. First 40chaps, nothing important really happened. Was excited for the coming updates but there was none. Dropped.

LV 15

DeadEye12

Author said he will be back by end of month in october, at the end of october author said give me a little bit. Its now december. Our author has just vanished so I'm gonna go off a limb and say that this has been dropped

LV 4

Krutch

Writing a 2nd review in hopes of seeing a response from the author. The story is amazing. It is absolutely the best story I have read on this site. Unfortunately, it has not been updated in 2-3 months. I still check in every few days to see its status, however. I do hope the author is doing well and it is not a health issue causing the delay. Is there any update on the status of this story? Even hearing there was a loss in motivation to continue it would be a welcome, though disappointing, revelation. Sincerely, Avid fan.

LV 13

notiam

Sorry to be so mean for my first review but I want the author to take conscience that his story is event more chidlish than my little poney. The mc has only one setbacks that he forgets in the first ten chapters that is his wife’s betrayal although the author could have used this to give the mc a more complex personality than « i love everyone, everyone is beautiful come with me pluck flower ». He could have used this to create a more complex relationship with lu and his friends. Like he doesn’t trust any women and is a perfect bastards until he finds the female lead. The character of the stories are either here to help the mc either... Sorry there is only this sort of character. The mc is born : Rich (check) In a lovely family (check, btw i love you lu) With true friens (check) With insane luck (check, if one day he goes in a forest i expect him to at least found a unicorn) The things with stories with a system is that it makes all too easy there are no exterior problems that the mc won’t be able to take care of. So please create some real problem.

LV 12

KimSasha

I really love this story!! Btw, I tried to draw Jay and Lou. If ever you love, you can use it as cover or whatever. I'll try to do others ;) Link for images: https://imgur.com/a/sj56AHk

LV 11

Vyte

I don't know who you are. I don't know what you want. If you are looking for readers, I can tell you I don't have many friends to share this with, but what I do have are a very particular set of skills. Skills I have acquired over a very long career. Skills that make me a nightmare for people like you. If you continue the story through the end and have a satisfying ending, that'll be the end of it. I will not look for you, I will not pursue you, but if you EVER drop this, I will look for you... I will find you... and I will.... lock you in my basement until you continue writing :p

LV 5

Sphinxz2

Bring some tissue if you'll read this novel, you'll probably need it. "Love is in the air, you cant touch but you can feel it, and you know it exist." well, bla bla bla. Please support this novel. :)

LV 13

GrandmasterYu

To whom it may concern, Author, parents, significant other, brother or sister, friends, or acquaintance, I hope all is well. It’s been 4 years since the last chapter was updated, I was hoping if author or someone knows the author if she is doing okay. There is still few, dozen, hundreds or even thousand of readers still coming back to check if this novel was updated. I’ve come to love this novel since author started it, I wish to know and everyone else if this is the end of it. There was no closure to this novel, author suddenly disappeared. I really hope author is okay and doing well, maybe just long writers block. Wish you all the best! Best regards, Grandmaster Yu.

LV 5

b0ss

It's like reading a wet dream. I'm not sure why this is so highly rated. So far basically nothing has happened... So I'll just leave this super low review to counter the super high ones.