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Chapter 75: Surprisingly Fun

Su Yan didn't dare to have the program count the number of words again and just began to type the last scene.

[It had been three months since Yun Bei Fen and Mei Chao Bing became friends on their mission. By now, Yun Bei Fen's injury had completely healed. The mission had also finished and they had returned home to the sect.

Right now, they were sitting at the edge of a small grove not far from where Yun Bei Fen lived, looking over the crystal clear lake in front of them. It really showed how much his Master loved Yun Bei Fen that he was able to live there. The other disciples could only look on in envy.

Mei Chao Bing turned to face Yun Bei Fen and his friend looked up and smiled naturally in response. He felt completely at ease with him. The trust that had formed between them couldn't be described in words. It could only be felt in the heart.

"Fen'er …" Mei Chao Bing leaned over a bit and reached out, gently combing Yun Bei Fen's hair back. He had adopted that manner of addressing him from his Master and Yun Bei Fen seemed to like it.

Indeed, hearing him call him like that Yun Bei Fen gave another smile. It really made him feel like being family.

Mei Chao Bing didn't think of him as family, though. He sidled even closer and hugged Yun Bei Fen to his chest. Since his friend didn't protest he cupped his cheek, bent down and pressed his lips to Yun Bei Fen's. He closed his eyes with a satisfied sigh while Yun Bei Fen froze.

He couldn't understand what was going on. Mei Chao Bing's grip on him tightened and he deepened the kiss as if he wanted to merge with him.

Yun Bei Fen pressed against his chest and opened his mouth to protest but —]

Su Yan's hands stopped moving and he lightly banged his head against the table. "Ugh! I can't write this!"

Next door, Nie Chang leaped to his feet and hurried over. He pulled Su Yan up and frowned at him. "Are you an idiot? You just came back from the hospital because of a concussion! Be more careful!"

Su Yan looked up and pursed his lips. "Ah Chang!" He extended his arms and waited.

Nie Chang looked at him and gritted his teeth. He couldn't give in. This dunce deserved to be scolded! Then again … Hugging him meant loving him, right? He couldn't not hug him. Nie Chang cursed his own weakness inwardly, stepped forward and hugged Su Yan back who sidled up against his chest immediately. "So, what's the problem?"

"I can't write!"

"It didn't sound like that when I was in the living room. You were typing the whole time." Well, minus the few minutes when he took a break to mumble about.

"But I can't write the ending!" Su Yan nestled up against his boyfriend even closer. He felt really, really embarrassed. Who could have known that writing romance was so hard? It always looked so easy when you read it in the novels!

Nie Chang looked at the notebook and read the last few sentences. His lips curled up immediately and he comfortingly rubbed Su Yan's back. "So what's the problem with that? You can't think of what will happen after that?"

Su Yan pouted. "No, it's obvious. He'll get angry and leave."

"That's not romantic at all." Nie Chang's hand found its way to the nape of his neck and stroked up and down. "How about I show you what I'd do?" There was an obvious smile in his voice that made Su Yan's hair stand on end.

"What … What do you mean by that?"

"Well … If that was me kissing you …"

He bent down and pressed his lips onto Su Yan's just like Mei Chao Bing had done with Yun Bei Fen. And just like Yun Bei Fen Su Yan pressed against his chest and opened his mouth in protest.

Nie Chang nearly laughed out loud but then he would have needed to let go of this prime opportunity to take advantage of his boyfriend's plight. Thus, he held back and instead snuck his tongue into Su Yan's mouth.

Su Yan made a sound that was probably meant as a protest but right after that his arms curled around Nie Chang's neck and his fingers grabbed onto his hair. Nie Chang suddenly wasn't sure anymore if this had been such a good idea. How was he supposed to hold back at that reaction?! His hand stroked up and down on Su Yan's back while he cursed the fact that he couldn't just strip him.

In the end, Nie Chang was the one to break away and give an uneasy smile. "Well, if this was in the story, I'd definitely topple you to the ground after that and have my way with you but … unfortunately, this is real life and I promised I wouldn't do it so … Have fun writing." Then, he turned around and fled, feeling like an idiot.

Su Yan looked at his boyfriend's back and pressed his lips together to keep himself from laughing. Ah, being in a relationship was surprisingly fun! He suddenly understood why Nie Chang loved to tease him so much! With a happy grin on his face, he turned back to his notebook and continued where he left off.

[Yun Bei Fen pressed against his chest and opened his mouth to protest but that just allowed Mei Chao Bing to push his tongue into his mouth. Before Yun Bei Fen knew what was happening his friend had already shoved him to the ground and pinned his whole body beneath him.

For a while, he didn't know how to react and just let Mei Chao Bing continue. But then his thoughts caught up with him again. This was wrong! They were friends. They shouldn't be doing things like this!

He shoved Mei Chao Bing off, leaped to his feet and ran back to his house, banging the door shut behind him. He had heard Mei Chao Bing following him but he couldn't face him now. He felt used and betrayed. Thus, for the first time in his life, Yun Bei Fen actually grew angry at someone.

Mei Chao Bing who was still waiting in front of the door didn't know what to do. Had he really done something unforgivable?]


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Chapter 76: Happy End … with Cuts

Su Yan pursed his lips. Looking at all the paragraphs he had written he had to end this in the next few. As a romantic short story, this should have a happy end so the best thing to do would be to have Mei Chao Bing confess and then have Yun Bei Fen reconsider and accept. Mn, that should be possible in a few hundred words.

[Mei Chao Bing continued to stand in front of the door and listened to Yun Bei Fen raging inside. His heart hurt. Why couldn't the person he had fallen in love with accept his feelings? Was his kiss really that repulsive?

He lifted his hand and pressed it against the door. No, he couldn't give up this easily! He loved him and he wanted him to reciprocate his feelings. If he didn't try, then he would always regret it.

"Fen'er, open the door, please. Let's talk it out."

"What is there to talk about?" Yun Bei Fen's voice sounded as if he was close to crying, making Mei Chao Bing's heart hurt even more.

"I love you. Is that so unacceptable to you?"

There was silence on the other side. Yun Bei Fen didn't know what to say. Love? "But … I've always seen you as a friend. Or maybe as a brother. You're family to me." Hearing Mei Chao Bing's voice he calmed down but he still didn't open the door.

"Does that have to be mutually exclusive? Why can't we be a family … and still love each other like that?"

"That … How should that work out?" Yun Bei Fen tugged at his lapel but he couldn't hold back from stepping closer to the door. He didn't want to lose him. Mei Chao Bing was so important to him.

Mei Chao Bing leaned against the door and closed his eyes, taking a deep breath. "Then how about … becoming my dao partner?"

Yun Bei Fen's lips trembled. His dao partner? "I … I'd have to ask my Master."

Mei Chao Bing smiled. "So, if your Master says yes, then you'd marry me?"

Yun Bei Fen took a moment to consider. They would still be family if they married and he really liked being with Mei Chao Bing. "Mn. Alright."

Mei Chao Bing smiled and just opened the door. He pulled his friend, no, his lover into his arms and kissed him again. Even if his Master didn't accept at first, he would do whatever was necessary to have him allow it. For this person, it was worth it.]

Su Yan smiled and rubbed his hands. Ah, this was definitely a happy end! It was a little bit open but what else could be expected of just five thousand words? You couldn't include everything.

Speaking of which … Su Yan had the program count the words again and stared at the number. This … Was this thing trying to kid him?! It was just a few words above the upper limit!

Su Yan collapsed on his chair and hid his face in his hands. This couldn't be! Now he'd have to delete something and knowing himself he'd want to add a few details when he edited his text. Now what?

Su Yan lowered his hands and pressed his lips together. There was nothing he could do. In case the system would only issue a reward if the story really was exactly five thousand words or a bit lower he couldn't risk having a bit more. Mn, most likely there were some fillers anyway. He'd just try to delete as many as he could and then maybe cut a sentence or two wherever it was possible.

He nodded to himself and scrolled back to the beginning of the text, slowly working through every paragraph. There were indeed some things that could be deleted but he found even more places he would have liked to expand.

Ah, this probably would have made a good novel. If he was allowed to describe how those two had fallen in love while fighting against the heretic practitioners side by side or maybe how exactly Mei Chao Bing had nursed Yun Bei Fen back to health, wouldn't this story have become a much more romantic? And wouldn't it have been more suspenseful if he described the betrayal of Mei Chao Bing's Master in more detail?

Maybe it could even play a big role in the story. For example, Mei Chao Bing could have really left the good faction after he felt betrayed by Yun Bei Fen. Then he might have followed his Master and become a heretic practitioner himself.

Yun Bei Fen naturally wouldn't be able to take it especially since he felt that it was his fault. He would follow him and then he could be attacked or maybe just caught and the heretic practitioners would demand of Mei Chao Bing to kill him as a sign of his loyalty to them.

In the end, Mei Chao Bing would naturally realize that he couldn't bring himself to do that. He would set him free and flee with him but Yun Bei Fen would be gravely injured when they escaped and would nearly die in his arms. It really would be tear-jerking!

Ah, just imagining all this drama made him giddy! But alas, he couldn't write that since the system wanted him to limit his story to a fucking five thousand words! Argh! Why did it have to be five thousand? At least make it twice times as much. He certainly wouldn't be able to fit the scenes with the heretic practitioners in that either but he could at least add a few details.

In the end, Su Yan managed to cut his story down to exactly five thousand words though. He gave a relieved sigh and copied his text into the space provided by the Lovely Writing System. It had been really hard to cut it down like that and leave all these great ideas out. This thing better not dare to give him a low score for his trouble!


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