This is bullshit! Even without his Taoist skills, someone with twin martial souls will not just have a lvl 6 soul power. Intentionally trying to nerf him compared to the original is just stupid and a complete let down.
This entire chapter in just him rambling in broken english!
What is this even saying? Also, why is he referring to Sun Yutao in third person while directly speaking to him?
Although Tang San at this time, the soul master did not awaken, the blue-silver emperor bloodline was even more distant, and his appearance was ordinary, but he couldn't stand his lively temper. Outgoing children are always likeable.
Dou Luo: This Tang San is Different
Anime & Comics · Un1que
Bro, your grammar is a bit off in both the chapters. Has this really been edited?
Tang Hao lifted the curtain and walked out of the bedroom, yawning, and walked out of the house, ready to wash, and saw Tang San dividing the firewood, and asked: "Have you been to Old Jack's?"
Dou Luo: This Tang San is Different
Anime & Comics · Un1que
So now, his voice his like a Sirens song as well?
"Oh, Annie, I'm going to cum inside of you!" Wayne declared, his voice like the sweetest of siren songs.
System in Hollywood
Movies · Belamy_2024
Dude, what's with this? The Sirens have ran out of songs at this point.
"Yes, Wayne, fuck me harder!" Annie cried out, her voice like the sweetest of siren songs.
System in Hollywood
Movies · Belamy_2024
Dude, at least proofread! The same things are repeating again and again.
So, just a little over an hour later, Wayne—having just taken a refreshing shower—was lying by the outdoor pool, reading the script while enjoying Hanna's services.
System in Hollywood
Movies · Belamy_2024
If you're going to use AI, atleast proofread and fix the characters names, so it's not wrong or different names in different chapters. Her name is Tree, not Teri or Terry.
"She rushed forward with the dagger, and amid Teri's terrified screams, she stabbed Teri to death."
System in Hollywood
Movies · Belamy_2024
What's the point of having a fanfic if you are just going to follow the original blindly. People change under circumstances, and Penny can change to if you make her fall in love. Is it really that inconceivable for her to just date one guy from the start and still have her personality somewhat. You can just have them seeing each other and nake them a 'thing' without officially getting into a relationship until a bit later, without them seeing other people during that time. This happens all the time, even in real life. Even if she changes a bit, why is that a problem. Fanfics exist to make things different from the original, that's the whole point. People who get hung up on not changing anything and making things as close to original as possible often end up with a bland fanfic. Idk man, you're writing this and you can decide for yourself, but I probably won't read it if Missy is the FML. It's just not for me.
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original Haikyuu: Rise To The Top
4.81
Hinata Shoyo wakes up one day with memories of a life he hasn't lived yet.. but feels completely real. What will he do next? How will this change him and his path to the Top? Would he be just as good as he was in his memories.. or will he become someone different altogether? He doesn't know yet but he'll find out soon enough. Follow his new journey and his rise to the Top. _______________________ Tags - Romance, Comedy, Action, Weak-To-Strong, ( not sure about R-18 but I'll decide as I write and see where it goes). I might add more tags in the future.20 Chs 2.1k 收藏
This story feels so much more realistic and I quit like the MC, which isn't something that happens very often. I also like how the System isn't a huge part of the story and only has a scanning feature, cause more often than not, that just ends up ruining the progression of a story. Please continue to update and don't drop this.
Pokemon: The Legendary Trainer
Anime & Comics · Sniperwoof