Eh... and the grammar died again. It was fine for a few paragraphs and it's gone. The story was fun up until this point but I don't have time to decipher each sentence. Wish you more luck, soul that stopped to read this.
"Does Chad think hostages will work on him?" Justin asked.
Dark Warlock in the Apocalypse
Urban · Harbinger_
And the grammar is gone. I hope the next chapters are not as bad as this unreadable mess.
Awesome chapter, I am blown away by the quality of writing and entertainment of the story so far. You are doing a great job!
it should be consequences instead of sequels.
first chapter, but it's really well written and interesting right from the first paragraph!
One of the worst chapters, grammar-wise. I wanted to check how bad it was and it was every other paragraph. The story is fun, but those mistakes seem to be getting worse with each chapter.
writing logic error. you described the attacker with an axe but he shot the bull with a gun. should have mentioned it in the previous paragraph.
The gauge was packed with special types of sharp nails and the moment it burst, the bull's head was filled with small holes as blood gushed out.
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
* and, he first took a shot ... a bit messy sentence that could be rewritten as: and he was the first one to take a shot at the...
The attack with an axe was ready for this and he first took a shot at the bull's right eye, 'Boom!'
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
attack => attacker
The attack with an axe was ready for this and he first took a shot at the bull's right eye, 'Boom!'
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
English translation is really bad. The first few chapters are perfect, but the farther you read, the more names randomly change to their chinese ones. But what's worse, the grammar completely dies in favor of everyone speaking like Hulk, in 3rd person. Moment when the main character name changes was the final nail to the coffin for me. The story itself is typical isekai with the gamer protagonist using his knowledge of the game to his advantage. With his companions being flat characters following specific tropes. Even subject of killing other people has been touched but completely brushed over as "They got used to it quickly because their enemies were bad people" no trauma or moral dilemma considering killing fellow human beings, no clash of the lifetime of living in a 21st century versus barbarian setting they are thrown into. I generally wouldn't recommend it, unless you are desperate to read something new.
Dark Warlock in the Apocalypse
Urban · Harbinger_