Guessing that you've read more, can you tell me if this story will be the typical 'she the damsel in distress'. Those would have the fl look like she is useless. I'm not into the mafia ones because of that.
remember to add the dialogue like: "..."
The old patriarch hasn't been here for a few days. I just walked nearby today and thought I might have gone to the wrong place, so I turned back to find the way again. As I get older, I don't know where I'm going when I walk, so I have to go home and find Jimmy to come with me.
Days In Beautiful World
Fantasy · ShadiScribe
quick question, does it have harem. it's looking good till now, but am no fan of those. so before gettibg too deep, I'll like to know
That's right, he didn't have a cliché roommate with a mysterious background and could instead move alone, freely.
My Girlfriend is an Ice Dragon
Fantasy · Zefyr
i just started reading this, I don't like harem tho. so before I get too into the story, can someone enlighten me, does it have harem
'The world is unfair. I'll help you change it, Lux.' Silvanna's eyes burned with passion as she thought of this.
My Girlfriend is an Ice Dragon
Fantasy · Zefyr
I haven't even started but I already approved. Why? Cause of the 'no harem'. I hate how there is even a need to have the mc pick up girls everywhere he goes. I have no problem with romance in this stories, but it's quite a let down when it turns into a harem. Especially, when I learn of that AFTER I've read 100 chapters. Everything else could be great in a story but the sudden appearance of a genre you don't particularly like ruins the experience. So yeah, I appreciate the heads up.
Is it a harem? Not looking for those. No offense
You avoided describing, in detail, her initiative to a kiss...changing to his POV there would have been great. Maybe describing her difficulty in managing the newfound ability of hers and doing it slowly with her mate would show the bonding better. And the thoughts of the other pack members when seeing her suddenly power up. You just skimmed through it all. Just an opinion, okay.
...their first night and you ain't describing nothing...why author, WHY.
her mind like, "you for real? Ain't even gonna answer "
Everly gazed at him, and slowly, without uttering a word, she snatched her arm from him.
A Vampire’s Caregiver
Fantasy · AngelLily
right? how along was she again?
Then by instinct, she ran in another direction and rolled over, avoiding another one.
After Surviving the Apocalypse, I Built a City in Another World
Fantasy · NispedanaSan