this author is the real villain. I had to either scroll(on phone) all the way down or fat finger the chapter select.
like chapter 30 something one of the characters took a 1080 and I couldn't read anymore it just seemed so stupid to me. like I can understand it and I think the novel is good. I just despise scenes like those where one character so completely offsets the tone
it is really good as really good story, I thought this was the pokemon fic. this is in my opinion better though. I think the only problem is that it is slow to update and that it replaced a different fic.
no problem, everyone need some advice i still need advice myself(and get it from a friend, Tho i stopped writing on this site) since i cant make dialogue between characters very well, you did that fantastically tho.
the whole enslavement thing made me stop reading due to the notes in novel about spoilers and the fact that the reasons for enslavement could've been achieved willingly, it was good but if you got ocd when it comes to stuff like plot holes just becareful encase you end up putting the novel down
natural for sure but like say u want to represent a more dire situation maybe think about, "critical condition health below 2%" or "status condition poisoned" when outside of a battle.
**** man, this story was one of my favorites. honestly it doesn't matter if someone rants man, look for the one good comment and maybe it will make your day. I actually really like this story... I would want a little more action but I know it will take some time before that happens. so have a good day man, and keep writing if you really enjoy it.
I'll throw you a cookie here, not a story as a whole by a connection to any stories, think literal dragons and characters that are dragons
it isn't an aux chapter, sorry about that
patron pay? really? How many people will actually even go to you patron if u only have like what 2 chapters? I legit would rather pay someone to kick me in my nuts for 10 dollars then pay 7 bucks for a story we see nothing of. might I add the stuff we do see is dog ass. he has a system and a quirk but is what an oc character? either make the system is quirk if it's an oc or make him a real character reborn with the system. like say todoroki or mineta. not to mention the mc is clearly fucking arrogant to the point is boring. man saw a lvl 70 endeavor and said "I CaN tAkE HiM!" and if that's not the case we can't even tell because u need to pay 7$s for this trash. Only way it's worth that money is if you re-upload it after reading without the author reading. even then u might want to just french kiss an alligator's butthole.
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