I just found your book and I don't say this to be mean. But you have a bunch of run on sentence. I think you mean to put periods instead of comas ie instead of (she is running,) you should put it (she is running. ) I just wanted you to know. sorry if this came out rude. I just want to see this book improve because it is interesting.
thanks for the chapter
don't waste your time you can't read it on here . it would be different if they mentioned it in the synopsis but they don't. 1 star
I think the back story is good but I would like to get back to the ncis part soon
why is he troubled isn't it just battle meditation that was used by the jedi?
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is there a patreon to read ahead?
is there a patreon or something to read ahead?
it was written in mandarin so it was 3 words this person doesn't say it but this is just a mtl
In just half a year, the three words "Whirlpool Country" have appeared on his desk too many times.
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original reborn in a world of magic!
what happens when a boy gets reborn in a world of magic? follow ray along his journey through this magical world of swordplay and magic. this is my first story constructive criticism hoped for to improve my writing. help progress the story with your choice. I want this to interact with everyone.7 Chs 12 收藏
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