Inkybear

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a good story always affects the reader.

2018-06-20 加入 United Kingdom
徽章 7

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Inkybear
Inkybear
4 months ago
Commented

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Inkybear
Inkybear
10 months ago
Commented

Yup….. this episode made me drop the whole series now. Cringey chapter

Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Commented

He had 4 blocks, not 4 steals in the previous chapters. Better edit that while its early

Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Commented

Ooofff, first page grammar errors are tough to ignore.

Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Posted

This is the only novel ive read the first 6 chapters in (not even short chapters) and the story is still mysteriously shit. Dropping it

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Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Posted

Good novel. The writers grammar and storytelling is great. He/she adds proper description of the scene to paint the image , and the main protagonist is like-able. Good job.

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Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Replied to the_god_of_plot

Yeah. The indian english sentence structure around those chapters bothered me so much.

Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Posted

I cant get past the poor english grammatical errors. I know the author is from india but it really bothers me. The lack of vocabulary and sentence structures make it feel like the characters are all 5 year olds. "Master, what master call Yunyun for?" Grave looked at Yunyun and speak. "Playing time is over."

Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Commented

Bad grammar and poor spelling errors. Tsk tsk tsk

Inkybear
Inkybear
1 years ago
Commented

Need to improve on the writing…. Having Alex thought, alex rolled, Alex came, Alex moved, Alex walked , used in almost every paragraph is horrendous considering he is the only character in the whole chapter.