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Benjamin Freed died after saving someone in his previous life and reincarnated into his alternate self in the Marvel universe.
With the Ultimate Marve System, he was asked to choose which side to join.
[Main Quest: Hero or Villain!]
[In this Marvel World, you will be given a choice sooner or later. Will you be one of the good guys, or will you fall to the dark side? It is time to choose!]
[Rewards: 100 MP, Hero/Villain Pack, Free Gacha Draw.]
[This quest has no penalty as there is no chance of failure. Host, please make your choice as it would affect future quests and development of the System!]
Benjamin: I choose...
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寫檢討Bruh, this should be a tutorial on how not to write fan fiction. This book has plot holes larger than the one in your heart when your dad left you.
I can never understand why you want mc to be a sophisticated idiot trying to show his hypocrisy with a idiot face. a world where law is nothing but a tool in hand of powerful you want mc to a strong slave under it right. what to say as expected of you huh!
揭示劇透I skimmed the first few chapters or so hoping the MC would choose villain for once, or at least be a morally grey hero. Well, the author exceeding in disappointing me even more than he would’ve making a cliche ”hero” MC. The MC requests to be a policeman forfeiting the rewards of either the hero or villain path in his stupidity. Assuming we don’t get a new MC a few chapters in I know I will feel absolutely sick watching such an idealistic and naive moron somehow get carried through the dangerous world of marvel by his system.
the reader should know this before reading the story, the mc is one of those mc that have everything handed to him, the woman, or atleast the first i read are the typical that they would fall for the mc because he is breathing in an certain way, for example the balck widow in this fanfic is literally an out of character balck widow, she doesnt act a like a super spy or even assasin, heck she act like high school confused teenager and sleep with the mc just because. knowthing more nothing less also the choices the mc makes are childish and stupid at the very least, he is a fortysomenting year old guy that wakes up in the body of 25 years old guy and act like kid in his 12
I've avoided making reviews since most author's go all "If you don't like it than just leave" and they love their 5 Stars with 0 review sense since it boosts their book(I'm talking about you "More More More More More More"). But this book forced me to review it, it was just that on a pain, I'll get to that later let me review each aspect then rant about the book. 1- Writing Quality: The writing is decent, it could be better and maybe it improved but this is from the first 5 chapters so I don't have a extensive base to go on. The main problem with the writing is punctuation and dialogue marks like quotes and all that (When he thinks, talks to the system and speaks). [3 Stars Here] 2- Story Development: Yikes 😬... The first 4 chapters doesn't give any insight to the hosts current life and the scene with the doctor was forced and rushed. No how are you feeling and all that, just look into my eyes now give me your tongue. [1 Star Here] 3- Character Design: ... He is stupid... Natasha giggles ... The system is Sassy and prideful... The doctor is invasive and dismissive... Those are all the characters that showed up till chapter 4. The system is a better MC than the MC Because the system actually thinks about the choices that it gives while he just goes "Young Master" mindset and is like "I want this so I'll do this no matter what." [1 Star Here, if only we could give zeros...] 4- Updating Stability: The only redeeming part of this book is that when there's a schedule it is followed. [4 Stars Here] 5- World Background: The world is decently designed since we know it's Marvel's New York but the detail in locations are the bare minimum. We don't know if where is is has people until they look at him funny. [3 Stars Here] Overall: 2.4 Honestly if I was one of those impulsive readers that give 1 Stars just because they didn't like a book I'd be doing it with this one. We've all added that book to our library and removed immediately after the first few chapters with how bad it was but this was the first one I've got this year so congrats for being #1 in 2023. I didn't hate the premise of the book, I can tolerate the system with a personality but the stupid choices of the MC were a deal breaker for me. Now let's look at why I remove it so quickly as of 4 complete chapters and one incomplete 5th one. Right from the start we notice that this is the typical "I will save everyone I can." Captain America/Spiderman type hero and later in he gets reincarnated? No it's transmigrated? Scręw it I'll go with reincarnation and a doctor immediately shows up, not giving time for the MC to cope with his death, not that it seemed he needed with how he moved on too fast from that. The first dialogue was forced and rushed and you could see that the author wanted to move along with the story and introduce the system. The next 4 chapters are basically him learning to use and interact with the system. When the system is introduced we learn that stats are not a thing (even though it later said that the Super Soldier Serum enhanced his stats) which made and didn't make sense. Some people will use Wolverine and Deadpool as to explain how stats aren't everything and that's true but quantifying a person's abilities is a great boon. Wolverine could be as strong as Steve(It's an example not fact, I believe he's stronger) but his powers, abilities and skills are what would tip the scale. In this case while both could have 100 STR(Strength) and 100 END(Endurance) Wolverines adamantium bones, his Hyper Regeneration(Don't know if that's the one he has) and his instinctual combat style would give give him the edge. Same with Tony who is a Base human but due to his armor he is more powerful so. even if two people have the same stats it wouldn't be the same depending on the advantage each have so I don't see why stats couldn't be a thing. He could use someone's stats as a goal to achieve and possibly surpass. Then there where no Levels... Makes sense if we go by the route that Levels are based on exp(experience) that would be what a person has... you guessed it, experienced. A homeless person could have more experience than someone living in a house because of what they both experience daily and not because of skills. Knowing how to count and having been robbed are both have different degrees of impact on a person so the experience would be different but it's not necessary to see levels. NOW THE MOMENT WHERE YOU G MASTER MC SHOWS HIS BRILLIANCE! ALL SHALL BOW TO THE SUPREME ...Policeman. The system explained to the MC about it's functions like the store, inventory and all that. But it did not mention how to replenish the currency of the Shop(Marvel Points/MP) so when given the change to shop in the various sections of the store the recently "reincarnated" MC decides to get Medicine which is normal but instead of having some points left "For emergency" he decided that he'll spend it all on medicine and disregarding Weapons, knowledge, skills, powers and all that. The final straw was when the MC was given a quest, with no repercussions to choose if he wants to be a Hero or a Villain and regardless of his choice he'd get 500MP if I'm not mistaken and in his infinite wisdom the MC decides to become a Policeman losing his reward and "completing" the quest. And even the system said that it was stupid and that he could have chosen Hero route and becoming a Policeman but the MC smartly tells the system to "Shut it!" so he doesn't question his choices... And why did the brilliant MC do that? Because he wants to help the little guy and do it by the law... Dude if you wanted to help and follow the law you could've gone all Daredevil and become a lawyer, fighting against corruption, helping people who suffer because of the corrupt upper echelon, protect the defenseless using said law and fighting the good fight at night or even during his off times as a hero but no. I want to be a cop, something that has been shown in any country to have corruption in it and most of the times the upper echelon has the bosses if the police department in their pockets. I really wondered why this story got lots of powerstones but then I remembered... this is WebNovel, logic doesn't work here. Anyway thank you all for seeing my review, sorry to all those I offended while voicing my opinion specially the author but I feel that for a book I saw a lot of potential the way it was playing out was disappointing. Like they say "each to their own" so I'm sure some people are loving it so that means at least you got what you wanted, people who liked your work. Tastes are subjective and unfortunately I'm one of those who didn't like it. Which you luck on your journey as a writer and keep writing what you want...(even if it's not something I liked but still).
揭示劇透imagine being given a second chance at life then you waste it as a cop in world which is already more corrupt then ours . yeah i don't have enough brain cells to waste on this
Hmm, thanks to LewdPaper, Grid, and others who keep pestering Break to write another fanfic in discord server... We finally success to make Imbreak to upload another fanfic after 2 years has passed...
The excuse I made the MC stupid because I wanted him to be stupid is only thing the author could say for creating this. The MC literally said I don't if this body is a virgin so I have to act like a virgin but he's not a virgin. If this first deter you from this story you are a more open-minded person than me and I salute you.
the mc gets everything gifted to him by system doesnt earn anything. mc is also unfathomably dumb and believes that making clearly dumb decisions is thinking outside of the box. for some reason this reads like a bad tl'ed novel of certain origin as well with mc having cringe dialogue about his system being domineering. all characters are dumb and half are either OC or from one comic in 1912, there is no plot, mc earns nothing but gets everything and mc is also introduced after all the hero cast has had their origin story so mc cant change or be a part of an existing plot either. all in all this is unfathomably bad and makes massive plot, character, dialogue and world building almost every 2nd paragraph. Note when choosing between Hero/Villain mentioned in synopsis he calls himself smart for picking 'policeman' in the corrupt HYDRA marvel government.
揭示劇透I can't. I just can't. you know I had high hopes for the story. in fact, I was one of the first few people who read it but it's not good. I just have to say I'm sorry
You know I looked at the rating and I thought it was a good fanfic but the truth is that this fanfic has one of the worst mc I've ever read.........................
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writing quality is only thing good in this. this is basically an Chinese Marvel fanfic but an unsensored vr. , which sadly is not enough overcome all negatives of this novel to make me continue reading this sigh another waste of time i hope writer takes this as constructive feedback and work in future to not make his novel similar to Chinese works afterall if i wanted to read such work there are hundreds of Chinese Marvel fanfics with chapters count ranging from 200 to 2500 ch
I loved!! Continue with the great job !!! <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3<3 <3 <3 <3
so far storys great only complaint is the new chapter update takes a while but still really good story and unique as far as i know being a cop in marvel in a first for me. Well done keep up the good story
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作者 Imbreak
First of all, I think this deserves a warning. The MC makes stupid choices. If endless frustration at missed opportunities is not your cup of tea, this may be a miss for you.(I have that enough in my real life, no need to relive it in fanfiction). Second, It's been 5 chapters and I still can't place where and when the MC transmigrated. It's not the start of MCU, as the Avengers are already a thing, but Captain Marvel is also with them and Tony is still alive...I kind of lost interest when I found myself floating between Marvel timelines and plots so...yeah...pass.