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摘要
MC in his original world dies, reincarnated into Murim, becomes The Heavenly Demon. The world, of course, hates him and expels him. Then he arrives in Twilight.
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The MCs origin is unique but overall very cliche when it comes to the outcome. MC is supposed to be chill and laid back in this life but then goes around considering if he's going to kill innocent teenage girls. he says to put them out of their misery... or you could you know stop the abuse and let them live full lives. MC seems to be all over the place. Story isn't bad but there is no rhyme or rhythm to the MC or the plot.
I mean he lived a whole life in a murim world, became stronger than everyone, got dic slapped to another world by a protagonist, but he doesn’t have that heavenly demon rizz. Just a regular guy not affected by decades of danger and betrayal he even died a couple times(immortal apparently). No faceslapping yet. Might as well have made him go to a regular fantasy world where all the beta Mc’s go. Has good potential, but potential means nothing when it’s not utilized. Anyways I’ll keep reading mabye it gets better 😃
It’s such a cringe that it’s hard to tell… [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Can you author update this novel please thank you i really like the story but you dont update like in 3 months ……… Zzzzzz Zzz Zzz Zz. Zzz
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Honestly it ain’t too bad. Just could use more frequent updates and some better writing. But if you don’t have much else to read then this is decent
meh meh there is not much this story does from other Twilight novels ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________-__
Writing Quality: Good Stability of Updates: 11 months for 46 chapters Story Development: The MC follows the plot. Character Design: The MC doesn't know whether to act like a normal human or a psychopath. And don't get me started with that love destiny stuff from Twilight. Overall, his character is all over the place. World Background: It's just Earth. There is no world background, no exploring the mystery of where the vampires or werewolves come from, etc.
Warning it's another Alice pairing with a supposedly mature mc who once again is forced to be smitten cause some destiny mate bs.
its pretty good and I love how the prologue could be 1000 chapters in cultivation novel but you have it in 5 chapters.
Fixed some things and hope you enjoyed it