/ Fantasy / The Darkness In Your Mind
摘要
The darkness in your mind is a novel about a killer named Harold who meets his inevitable demise and says that if he had a second chance at life he "might" not be such a bad guy he is then reincarnated into a fantasy world without the memories of his past life and gains dark powers that are extremely strong, yet despite gaining these obviously evil powers that could be used in so many wrong ways, he stays true to his word from his past life, in his own ways.
(This novel is also going to be on Royal Road from now on as well, however upload times will not differ.)
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7評論
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- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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For the writing quality, I would like to suggest to the author to do another look over at least once before uploading the chapters for any errors. "You're" and "Your" are two different things. Also, punctuations and sometimes, capitalization problems. Please don't let this review put you down. There is still room for improvements as long as you are willing to improve! Keep writing what you like and learn from mistakes! I also have a few mistakes of my own sometimes that I miss even after the first edit.
I am enjoying this book so far, I have currently read up to chapter 3 already and am addicted though the wall of text is odd I think its a good thing since it looks good when reading on phone because of the page turning :)
I love story's where the main character is an outcast and has to hide his true identity,I also love stuff about reincarnation. Due to these things I like this story a lot so far and will continue reading it as it continues, though there are a few problems. The problems I have is that there are a few mistakes here and there like misusage of certain words and such, the other problem is not much of a problem just more of a opinion...I wanted to wait until chapter 5 came out to do a review and I'm glad I did but I don't like how long it took for this chapter compared to the others that came out fast...but other than those two problems I think everything is great.
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I'm only rating my own cuz I wanted to thank y'all for reading my novel so far. Also I wanted to say that you should check out my other novel
Even though I found a spelling error in the synopsis the rest of the novel is guaranteed to be perfect. Untolddead always supports fellow authors. This killer will surely change his life or maybe not. Perhaps he'll get supper killer powers and slaughter the world! The only way you'll know for sure is by reading. So get to it!