/ Fantasy / Supreme Lich Necromancy
摘要
Jay is a modern day college student who one day is running late for class ,but is stopped by an old man who introduces himself as mark and asks him if he wants to reborn in another world with a system he accepts and is transported to another world named Planet Tian. He gets reborn sadly as a Lich instead of of his wish as a Human.
Read to find out Jay's crazy adventure as he finds his path to becoming a God Necromancer as lich .
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寫檢討
The 3rd person is very prominent and makes this extremely difficult to read. Basically every line starts with the characters name and then proceeds to explain what that character does or says. It is almost similar to reading a script. The grammar is also just generally not great, though that can be improved. My main critisizism is the way the story is told to you instead of you experiencing. It's like this character did this and said that and felt that way. The writing should express that, but leave some room for interpretation instead of being so closed. Hope my ramblings make some sense, this is intended to be constrcutive not cruel.
It's not bad, for a first novel. You can take this story as a side read. If the author starts pumping in more chapters, it might make the novel more better. So far, not a bad read.