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In a future where humanity has already conquered the galaxy, a whole new realm of mystery and horrors beyond human comprehension opens up to them, the Primordial Expanse.
For as long as he could remember, Alex worked in the mines of an asteroid so desolate it didn't even have a name. But to him, this was home.
He knew that his future held nothing for him and he would die a lonely and forgotten death just like everyone else stuck on this godforsaken rock.
That was, until one day he wakes up to the realisation that he would die soon, as the Primordial Expanse called for him.
This mysterious realm is a place of promise and opportunity for many, but for people from the slums of society like Alex, it was only a curse that almost always guaranteed death.
Follow Alex on his journey though the Primordial Expanse as he navigates his way through battles, trials and enemies to carve out a space for himself at the peak of the universe.
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[WSA 2024]
This novel is purely a work of fiction, any names, locations and characters are all made up and do not depict or represent the real world.
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Okay, so my review is gonna be more critical than that of the other reviews. I’m going to update it as I read further until I either catch up or drop it. (Warning, the spoilers get more detailed the further down you get.)I will note the grammar is good. This is where the positive things end. As of where I’ve read to, chapter 30 something, the author seems to either have been writing without an outline or storyboard. So moments contradict each other. The speeds and strengths of characters in particular are highly inconsistent. I did the math and main character at his weakest and injured easily avoided and killed a 10m/s enemy. After getting massively stronger three times, main character is only 30m/s at fastest speed. As well, a different thing was only a bit faster than a horse before but was later 30+ times faster than main character. The characters are aweful in my opinion. Not a single character can think outside of the box, the author is dumbing all the characters down to the point a group of what is supposed to be hardened adventurers + mc follow a guy for four days into the forest. It’s the IRL equivalent of following a creepy man into his van because he offered to take you home, only thing is that you’re a grown man and know you shouldn’t go with him. Main character has not touched a book once despite being in an unfamiliar world for weeks. He’s also more naive than the average 10 year old. That would be a fine plot point if it was written better, it’s mostly been written as, oh I noticed this but ignored it. Or, “I’ve been too hopeful in this world, I’m gonna do better.” Then he forgets to do better. He also casually kills with no remorse despite living all his life in the mines. Which is also crazy that a universally united human federation allows that form of slavery to exist. The novel feels almost as though it is being written through the eyes of someone who has only read a few novels and purely wants their ideas on paper. Whether it’s true or not, I don’t know, but that’s how it feels. It also lacks descriptive language. It’s a very, this happened then that happened type novel. TLDR: The grammar is fine, the problem is the story itself and the lack of structure. I hope I have clearly articulated what I mean. Thanks for reading my review.
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Writing is decent, dialogue is mostly fine. People are a bit too two dimensional, but not the worst I have seen. Author needs to fill in some plot holes, though. The MC is so *dumb*! All he needs to do to level up is grind. He doesn't even need missions, or could take missions to kill low level creatures. Even if he doesn't know that beast cores don't help him as much as soul orbs, he does know that soul orbs help him get stronger. So at least he should be going out to the forest to kill beasts. Oh, wait. He killed a rabbit while still unrated and got a soul orb. And yet, author has him "running to the forest to kill animals for food." for a weeks, having no skills, no injuries, and yet no soul orbs drop? Author needs to explain that. Giving the benefit of the doubt on the updating stability here.
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Its good. Felt a little like shadow slave but thats not a bad thing. The pacing is great to.
I was tremendously enjoying the story and looking forward to how far the MC can go. But I just couldn't anymore. The world building was decent, with showing that both worlds are different enough and have different societies. It's basically a cut and paste of the beginning of and rough semantics of Shadow Slave, something the autor himself admitted. But the MC is just stupid. Repeatedly. Constantly forgets abilities he has, and has so many Ex Machinas to save his life in fights he should have no business participating in. Then you're constantly slapped in the face, over and over, about how special MC is. Like how much stronger for his level he is, and how much potential he has compared to others.
A pretty good and interesting story , the fights are not dragged too much which is what I like. The characters are fleshed out and have different personalities , the bad guys or the villains are not dumb they have their own schemes and stuff. The mc is a teenager who was not exposed to the outer world so he is a little naive but certainly not dumb and he adapts very quickly so him being dumb won't be a problem . Overall a pretty interesting story and good easy to read writing make it a must read if you like these types of story. Pretty excited to see where this story will go. SPOILER AHEAD !!! Message for Author - Keep going Author your work is certainly a top tier , Also I like the way how Alex and Mira relationship is going . I would certainly like to see their relation grow more . And maybe how they fight together in duo .
[Alert Spoiler - Cap 121] Does the MC have a hero complex, or is he just stupid? This cave arc is really annoying me—I was really enjoying this story, but now I'm not sure if I should continue. I'll probably read a few more chapters, though... Why is the MC going to fight someone he knows almost nothing about, who has a high chance of killing him? To save people in a world he knows very little about? It's worth noting that he can already return to his own universe—he's completed his objective. He could even just go train somewhere else if he doesn't want to go back yet... But no, he prefers to risk his life constantly and in every possible way.
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I like where this story is headed and the interactions between the many different characters is fun to see [img=recommend] [img=update]. Need more chapters
A good mixture of mystery and fantasy, combined with the fun and exciting aspects of Super Gene and Shadow Slave. I'm excited to see where the direction of this novel is headed in the future!
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the author took huge inspiration from "Shadow Slave" and then made it entirely their own... This story is awesome, worth reading and adding to your library!
my best book , really i love this book, i think you can give one chance , dont be hesitate, will be a rising star over time [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
So, after reading the free chapters, this story is for sure INSPIRED by shadow slave, but by no means is ripping it off. look, that old saying, there is nothing new under the sun, is very true in fiction. this author was clearly inspired by the idea/world building of shadow slave...BUUUUUT, it then it veers off into its own world that IS DIFFERENT than the world of sunny. I mean, the sci fi aspects alone are great, but the first few locked chapters builds the world in such a way that it will clearly be different than earth bound shadow slave. I look forward to seeing how it goes in the future!
great novel ,just waiting to stack up more chapters..but I hope author can update more chapters...😅
Excellent work an extra writing quality of this masterpiece this stability is very upgraded a developed story design is very hard for a normal person characters are special background for the world in this masterpiece is amazing
The synopsis and the beginning of this story made me think of Sunny in the shadow slave, so far, I am loving the story.
This story will really give you a Shadow Slave vibes especially in the first few chapters🙄... Anyway the story is good and entertaining. I agree with the authors note about the MC being "dumber than a rock" but I don't agree with him being unlucky because the plot armor is slightly thick. As for romance, still acceptable, a bit cringe. The only thing I don't like about this story is, there are plots that readers might find boring or need to kill a few brain cells and just let the story pass. That's all...
Obligatory shameless author review! This is my second official book, and I am taking this one much more seriously than my last one as I made some bad mistakes with that one that unfortunately led to it being dropped. But I learned a lot from writing my previous book and I'm putting my all into this novel from this point onwards! Happy reading!
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