摘要
This is the story of a teenager who died from illness and was given a chance to go to his favorite universe, the Pokemon Universe.
Come and enjoy his adventure with his pokemon and as he travel the world, meeting numerous people both good and evil. Where will his quest lead him ?
This is my first attempt at writing a story so I would love if you could point mispelling or other errors.
Cover come from zheN
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與他人分享您的想法
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A história é boa, mas a velocidade com que ele consegue novos pokemons é muito rápido ! Acaba tirando a emoção de conseguir novos pokemons. É necessário melhorar a forma que você descreve as lutas.
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This book keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖🙏📖🙏🙏📖🙏📖😂📖🙏📖😂🙏🙏😂🙏🙏