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A young man finds himself suddenly within a white void, and a voice telling him that he had died before his time and he is going to be reborn into a new life with a system to help him make the most of things, what will he do when he gets there, what dreams will he aspire to reach for, lets find out
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people should try writing one piece fanfic with doflamingo or Blackbeard the mc because lot of people is kind of sick of being goody2x following luffy, saving ace, whitebeard. shits
2 stars instead of 1 because he's not directly luffy's dog but instead a guard dog, the mc's goal is only the yonko and became the allied dog of luffy, also the mc is still doesn't have a crew so he temporary became luffy's dog
This story has potential. the mc isnt weak, and inky is following luffy Until hes strong enough to get gis own crew and become the second whitebeard. which Is a respectable goal.
Story was okay and was enjoying it to an extent BUT the mc is an idiot. First tome he sees nico robin he strts saying things that the entire crew started asking questions and kinda seemed like they didnt trust him and the mc excuse is just saying”Learned everything before because i want to be a yonkou”..... i made a comment on the previous chapter bashing how dumb the mc was for doing that while saying that if he just says “learned everythibg before because i want to be a yonkou” would just be dumb like why? Ruined a potentially decent story with two chapters
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It would have been a higher vote from me but the moment the author introduced getting things from other worlds I just quit. If the MC developed the abilities or whatever then sure go ahead, no problem. but when he can get things from anime or video games different to the world/story he is in that's when I know I'm done.
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I have stopped reading this at chapter 38...The story is good it follows the canon story and the system is useful. the cannon characters get fleshed out decently, and some defeated bad guys get recruited. Why did I stop reading this, purely due to not liking the MC personality...he is too calculating emotionally detached for my liking, however many will like it.
One of the Best one piece stories there is. Though I wonder why you made max amount of AP around 10000, I mean MC boosted them only to 500 and already quiet skilled. If he gets them max out he'll be like Saitama. More plsss.
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This story is very good. Considering its suppose to be a system story. I enjoy them more when the mc’s work for the power they gain instead of just being flat out OP. I hope the author comes back to continue this story because from all of the current chapters im enjoying where the stoey is going.
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If you want to read a Really good, like Really Really Good Written one-piece fanfiction than consider this fanfic "one-piece this bites" just search it up using that name and I promise you it will blow your sock off It, not an op mc, not a system, not a genius fighter, or anything. It about a guy that wishes to be in One piece than he appears in one piece but with his body like a normal body of a normal person on Earth which is super weak compare to the normal body of any person on One Piece, like one hit from Nami would knock him out for about Five minutes I don't know how to actually make a better synopsis than what is above but just give it a chance and read it, "one-piece this bites" will 100% not disappoint you
Please please please right more i really like your story i need more please please please please please please please . also i love cats good story
I really like the story as a whole from the world build to including the straw hats in a cool way. Love the while acting like a shingigami. Devil fruit is a little wack, but I'm surprisingly grateful it's not OP. Sad they you stop updating though.
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HEY AUTHOR WHY STOP?? I TOOK A QUITE A LIKING TO THIS AS ALL THE FANFIC ABOUT ONE PIECE DON'T TAKE NAMI AS PART OF THEIR HAREM, I MEAN IF YOU CAN TAKE ALL THE WOMAN WHY NOT TAKE NAMI TOO RIGHT?? SO I SUGGEST YOU TO CONTINUE THIS AUTHOR AND IF YOU CAN, YOU CAN ADD GION, REBECCA AND THE WOMAN THAT KISS SANJI IN DRESSROSA BUT CHANGE IT AS I DON'T WANT THE WOMAN OF MC KISS OTHER. JUST TAKE ALL WOMAN THAT SEMMED PLEASING TO OUR EYES OR IF DICK-SAMA AGREED
This story has the potential to be one of the best on the site, but it's been all put ruined. The author has fallen into the trap that most gamer/system stories do. That is to say, they have zero restraint when it comes to the system. To the point that thing are just ridiculous. It hits all the boxes of poorly designed system fictions. Given a Devil Fruit right off the bat, despite doing nothing to earn it. The system also (apparently) makes random changes to reality to make his life easier. The system applies to his Devil Fruit, so no experimenting, creativity or training. Just adding XP to the Devil Fruit tab. Also hinted he will get another Devil Fruit. One of the worst OP tropes. The system store that has no limits, including weapons from other anime and devil fruits. Gets a "mind palace". AKA a grinding system that lets the MC become even more OP by simply sitting in a corner while they sail around. Caps on learning skills are super low. He's able to learn Rokushiki before he even gets into the Grand Line. Super specific hidden quests that the MC just so happen to do anyway. What are the chances! And so on. There's a lot to enjoy, but it's mired in constant upgrades and BS rewards that take any suspense or tension out of the story. If you want to turn your brain off and read power fantasy wanking than you'll probably enjoy it. Otherwise, meh.