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This story is very good. Considering its suppose to be a system story. I enjoy them more when the mc’s work for the power they gain instead of just being flat out OP. I hope the author comes back to continue this story because from all of the current chapters im enjoying where the stoey is going.
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If you want to read a Really good, like Really Really Good Written one-piece fanfiction than consider this fanfic "one-piece this bites" just search it up using that name and I promise you it will blow your sock off It, not an op mc, not a system, not a genius fighter, or anything. It about a guy that wishes to be in One piece than he appears in one piece but with his body like a normal body of a normal person on Earth which is super weak compare to the normal body of any person on One Piece, like one hit from Nami would knock him out for about Five minutes I don't know how to actually make a better synopsis than what is above but just give it a chance and read it, "one-piece this bites" will 100% not disappoint you
Please please please right more i really like your story i need more please please please please please please please . also i love cats good story
I really like the story as a whole from the world build to including the straw hats in a cool way. Love the while acting like a shingigami. Devil fruit is a little wack, but I'm surprisingly grateful it's not OP. Sad they you stop updating though.
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HEY AUTHOR WHY STOP?? I TOOK A QUITE A LIKING TO THIS AS ALL THE FANFIC ABOUT ONE PIECE DON'T TAKE NAMI AS PART OF THEIR HAREM, I MEAN IF YOU CAN TAKE ALL THE WOMAN WHY NOT TAKE NAMI TOO RIGHT?? SO I SUGGEST YOU TO CONTINUE THIS AUTHOR AND IF YOU CAN, YOU CAN ADD GION, REBECCA AND THE WOMAN THAT KISS SANJI IN DRESSROSA BUT CHANGE IT AS I DON'T WANT THE WOMAN OF MC KISS OTHER. JUST TAKE ALL WOMAN THAT SEMMED PLEASING TO OUR EYES OR IF DICK-SAMA AGREED
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Muy buena, debo decir que es uno de los mejores fanfic de one-piece que he leído, aunque sería bueno un poco más rápido los caps pero esta muy interesante👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
I love this novel it is my second favorite novel to read love your writing keep up the good work i how the mc gets all the devil fruits in the world
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It would have been a higher vote from me but the moment the author introduced getting things from other worlds I just quit. If the MC developed the abilities or whatever then sure go ahead, no problem. but when he can get things from anime or video games different to the world/story he is in that's when I know I'm done.
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I have stopped reading this at chapter 38...The story is good it follows the canon story and the system is useful. the cannon characters get fleshed out decently, and some defeated bad guys get recruited. Why did I stop reading this, purely due to not liking the MC personality...he is too calculating emotionally detached for my liking, however many will like it.
system fanfic... and the devil fruit author gave him was the shake shake fruit. I don't get fanfic authors with stupid choices for powers they give. Especially if they make dumb trash powers OP. Just give him directly something cool not something the reader cringes about while reading.
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One of the Best one piece stories there is. Though I wonder why you made max amount of AP around 10000, I mean MC boosted them only to 500 and already quiet skilled. If he gets them max out he'll be like Saitama. More plsss.
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Story was okay and was enjoying it to an extent BUT the mc is an idiot. First tome he sees nico robin he strts saying things that the entire crew started asking questions and kinda seemed like they didnt trust him and the mc excuse is just saying”Learned everything before because i want to be a yonkou”..... i made a comment on the previous chapter bashing how dumb the mc was for doing that while saying that if he just says “learned everythibg before because i want to be a yonkou” would just be dumb like why? Ruined a potentially decent story with two chapters
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This story is very good. Considering its suppose to be a system story. I enjoy them more when the mc’s work for the power they gain instead of just being flat out OP. I hope the author comes back to continue this story because from all of the current chapters im enjoying where the stoey is going.
goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
If you want to read a Really good, like Really Really Good Written one-piece fanfiction than consider this fanfic "one-piece this bites" just search it up using that name and I promise you it will blow your sock off It, not an op mc, not a system, not a genius fighter, or anything. It about a guy that wishes to be in One piece than he appears in one piece but with his body like a normal body of a normal person on Earth which is super weak compare to the normal body of any person on One Piece, like one hit from Nami would knock him out for about Five minutes I don't know how to actually make a better synopsis than what is above but just give it a chance and read it, "one-piece this bites" will 100% not disappoint you
Please please please right more i really like your story i need more please please please please please please please . also i love cats good story
I really like the story as a whole from the world build to including the straw hats in a cool way. Love the while acting like a shingigami. Devil fruit is a little wack, but I'm surprisingly grateful it's not OP. Sad they you stop updating though.
UPDATE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
HEY AUTHOR WHY STOP?? I TOOK A QUITE A LIKING TO THIS AS ALL THE FANFIC ABOUT ONE PIECE DON'T TAKE NAMI AS PART OF THEIR HAREM, I MEAN IF YOU CAN TAKE ALL THE WOMAN WHY NOT TAKE NAMI TOO RIGHT?? SO I SUGGEST YOU TO CONTINUE THIS AUTHOR AND IF YOU CAN, YOU CAN ADD GION, REBECCA AND THE WOMAN THAT KISS SANJI IN DRESSROSA BUT CHANGE IT AS I DON'T WANT THE WOMAN OF MC KISS OTHER. JUST TAKE ALL WOMAN THAT SEMMED PLEASING TO OUR EYES OR IF DICK-SAMA AGREED
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Muy buena, debo decir que es uno de los mejores fanfic de one-piece que he leído, aunque sería bueno un poco más rápido los caps pero esta muy interesante👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
I love this novel it is my second favorite novel to read love your writing keep up the good work i how the mc gets all the devil fruits in the world
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It would have been a higher vote from me but the moment the author introduced getting things from other worlds I just quit. If the MC developed the abilities or whatever then sure go ahead, no problem. but when he can get things from anime or video games different to the world/story he is in that's when I know I'm done.
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I have stopped reading this at chapter 38...The story is good it follows the canon story and the system is useful. the cannon characters get fleshed out decently, and some defeated bad guys get recruited. Why did I stop reading this, purely due to not liking the MC personality...he is too calculating emotionally detached for my liking, however many will like it.
system fanfic... and the devil fruit author gave him was the shake shake fruit. I don't get fanfic authors with stupid choices for powers they give. Especially if they make dumb trash powers OP. Just give him directly something cool not something the reader cringes about while reading.
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One of the Best one piece stories there is. Though I wonder why you made max amount of AP around 10000, I mean MC boosted them only to 500 and already quiet skilled. If he gets them max out he'll be like Saitama. More plsss.
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Story was okay and was enjoying it to an extent BUT the mc is an idiot. First tome he sees nico robin he strts saying things that the entire crew started asking questions and kinda seemed like they didnt trust him and the mc excuse is just saying”Learned everything before because i want to be a yonkou”..... i made a comment on the previous chapter bashing how dumb the mc was for doing that while saying that if he just says “learned everythibg before because i want to be a yonkou” would just be dumb like why? Ruined a potentially decent story with two chapters
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Great, keep up the awesome work 😍 .....................