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A young man on the path to martial perfection in the world of one piece.
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Hard to read for me. Ignoring the grammar, lack of caps in several areas, and POV changes for insignificant reasons, the one thing I hate most here is the page-long paragraphs. They can easily be cut down to manageable chunks and make the story flow better. It is a slog fest to read a single paragraph and I found myself skimming a lot, which isn’t good since most of the chapter consists of long paragraphs. I can ignore grammar and cap errors (few), but when they are all crammed into 10-sentence-long paragraphs, it’s just a pain to read. 4 chapters in a dropped.
lol at first i thought this was going to be a good fanfic without the author fanboying to the strawhats but then it turned to a typical one piece novel and yes he didn't join the strawhats but he is just with yhem the whole time, it's basically him joining without really joining them the author is pretending to be a deep thinker and already planning the "BIG THING" but lol no the only thing happening so far is the mc beating up luffy's enemy while he bumps into them, that's basically the whole patern of the story so far (the mc goes to an island defeat the enemy luffy was supposed to take down and show everyone how "MIGHTY" he is and them bump into strawhats) what a fucking joke
the cover is from a game called smite.....................................................................................................................
ch 4 seems to be one of those slow pace fanfic, no hint of OP Harem or Canon story line so far --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Its pretty good, the mc story doesn't start as op when he was younger but getting better as the story goes on to op. I like it how the mc romance is with one girl only, instead of a harem.
Continue, faz tempo que não acho uma fanfic de one piece decente e essa aqui é simplesmente fantástica. Quero muito ver o futuro de Azul e quão alto ele irá nesse mundo foda que é one piece. Bem continue com o bom trabalho e tenha um ano maravilhoso hahhahahah
This would have been a great novel by itself instead of a fanfiction but tis is the path it went so i can’t be picky about it but it’s really good so great job.
This is honestly a very fun read. The mc with his OPness is quite enjoyable, and his budding romance with Robin is quite cute in my opinion. The writing quality is lacking, with a lot of grammatical errors and paragraphs that are too long but it doesn't change that the plot is great and this story really keeps me hooked. Please continue to update this author and don't drop.
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Nice story but MC to much focus strawhat,MC should create group is owned n rulling the world.thank you very much for story.
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Well, well, the story is very short, the beginning is slow, but considering that 3 chapters of it give 1 of the great ones ... but anyway ... very narrative, something happens and the author goes on explaining things that happened before, you stay like: “what ?! Where is it? Did I miss something? ” I don't know how to explain the story well, but if I had to summarize it, it would be: The author tried to make a story with a long progression but got bored halfway and decided to explain things with a few lines, that's the feeling I have.
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I thought it would be interesting because MC is not from the earth and so i thought.. But it turned out to be utter disappointment. Here MC is just travelling alone and authr nows for how many chapters he will and he just keep on bumping the enemys that luffy had to deal with and goes there before him and defeats them and not yhe language is utter boring i can say, it like listening the physics class in my college i don't even get interest in reading this novel as he keep on adding radom ****t to ghe content and its really boring.
Enjoyable as hell finally a OC one piece where I dont have to completely relive the whole one piece story all over again in an excruciatingly slow novel. However, this novel has a good enough pacing and a well structured MC that his powerful but still bot too OP and tbh his strength perfectly compliments the story written. I quite love the development of the MC and the FMC which is a nice addition to the main focus of the story. But overall I'd recommend it to any reader regardless of if they are a one piece fan.
Love it and the character to but still like it to follow the main story a bit. But overall great story and will Always want more 😍😍😍😍😍😍
Man you got a fan.... I'm truly inspired and impress with your work From the starting.. Woh it was really unique and enjoying start... Wish he could cook to...it would be fun Well I'm truly enjoying the story... Thanks for writing a master piece...
One of if not the best OC One piece fanfictions I've ever read. The mc has a solid backstory, and a consistent personality (which can be hard to find in fanfiction).
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The story is good and the character not to overpowered and is balanced I like the story lot wish for more chapters it so gooooooooooooopppppd
Hey, If anything even if you had just ruined the whole story by writing S**T plots (WHICH YOU HAVE CERTAINLY! NOT!). Just by the way the MC didn't make any female a lover already like other s**ts who straight up start the story with 1) MC arrives, 2) Becomes God(in a sense), 3)Gets a girl (IT! ONLY! HAPPENS! IN! LIKE! 10! CHAPS!). You've got me hooked up by the story. Really appreciated!.Stable update (check),Quality(check),Character design(check),No bulls**t(check). WHAT MORE DO YOU NEED ?????