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Axel wakes up in the world of Hunter x Hunter; he was an avid reader of the series and always wanted to be a hunter and Nen user himself.
With a system and an ability, he wants to create his own destiny.
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let me tell you clearly. I think axel should have been involved much further into the main story. because I think he shouldn't have been this strong against the spider gang in this state. Besides, both his enemies and himself constantly call himself inexperienced, but he is a very experienced fighter. He killed people and fought with very different Nen abilities. I think it's ridiculous that he underestimates himself too much and has too many ops. I've added this to my notes and will continue to read it in the future.
Snooze-fest. 40 chapters in and it is almost completely exposition, small amount of dialog, and Alot of Ocs we don't get the description or personality of. Not to mention that the MC refuses to get in the plot any which way, Which would be fine if he did his own thing but he doesn't. He watches almost every main fight, monolog about it, realizes the importance of training harder, and reaffirms that he will not get involved in the plot. My advice to the author, pick a lane. If you are going to show the story get involved, if not then avoid the plot like the plague if it is not a major plot like the chimera ant plot. Right now the fic seems really whishy-washy. Finally get and editor or ask chat gpt how to describe the nen abilities better. The secondary aura thing only make the barest of sense to me.
This is what most should want to say when they read this story. The personality of ms is not as weak as in most krinzh stories, however, due to the large accent of secondary characters, he seems not only weak but also stupid at some points. In general, this is 4, but I do not like stories where there is a bunch of useless information that you don’t want to read. Overall it's 3/5
I dont know why no one has addressed it yet but it is very difficult to read this story. There is no continuity. In one scene we are reading about MC and then cut to some scene between some OCs from the middle without any context and then suddenly cut to some other MC scene in the middle of it or his thinking. It is even more difficult to read than a Chinese MTL. I can ignore the massive grammar and pronouns change issues but this break the story immersion for me. It would be a good read if you can ignore these things as decent hxh novels are very difficult to find here.
Honestly not that bad of a fanfic but can use a few improvement in the pov department because i sometimes don't know who the character the author is mentioning or who we are looking this pov at. Also every chapter is very short. For his cheat is ok but he can instantly become OP if he just skipped the plot and focus on training, i mean it will not make a good book and he wants to be a witness, all I'm saying is if he wants to just be OP he can literally do it instantly from his perspective. Overall it's alright to read, does not make your brain want to punch the author so i say that is a plus.
This is a very good transmigration story, I found the story quite engaging. I found the character building to be quite average. I liked this fanfic, because it's HunterXHunter
Too many problems for me to write, but the deal breaker for me is his so-called cheat or original ability time void that lets his body do whatever he says as his mind goes to the void, just A stupid way to do time skips, and takes away all the time for character growth. Unless the author makes Mc immortal then he'll spend most of his life with his mind in the void witch is stupid for a fan-fic especially with how he avoids the original story worried about changing it but the hunter x hunter anime only covers a very tiny part of the world so its stupid to avoid it just for the future that may or may not change
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La manera en la que escribe y se desarrollan las cosas se siente como si hablara de alguien más tercera persona avanza muy rápido y a menudo es incoherente
Does anyone know a HxH FF, where MC uses Ice attacks and summoned Boa Hancock and ate Ice ice devil fruit?
anything of hxh is always great pleaseeeee keep updating author and you have my stones👍👍🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
The story needs a bit.. well a LOT of getting used to before you can enjoy it. . It was quite confusing at the beginning.. i had to read the first 12 chapters 3 times to get a sense for the authors flow and way of writing... But one you adjust to it it's quite enjoyable. ----- Don't get me wrong... the story needs some serious editing and beta reading... but the author seems new and based on that tis a gud (beginrs) work. ----- Hope the author keeps writing & keeps improving.
nice fic but MC is too nerfed, whenever there is need to improve MC just creats a new Nen ability, but i see no link with his other Nen abilities.
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First, shameless author review will be the five star as always. First, shameless author review will be the five star as always.First, shameless author review will be the five star as always. First, shameless author review will be the five star as always. First, shameless author review will be the five star as always.
Evaluation: Average (Could've been a Gem). WQ: With less to no mistake grammatical errors (Needs improvement of gender-pronouns usage) and a well thought/structured storyline, however, Interaction or dialogues ain't good as it is repetitive and lacking. 3/5 SD: First, this is a canon-compliant FF which was balanced as author-san focus more on MC's own adventure/development without following or hightailing the OG protagonists. With a slow to average pace of development that affects story progression and repetitive dialogues and interaction which affects story progression. 3/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator from earth which is aware of HxHVerse with a simple & non-dependent system golden finger (basic system without quests, store, inventory & etc). He also has a chaotic-neutral persona which is apt for HxHVerse. MC is canon-compliant and is very afraid to meddle on the plot to avoid repercussions & affect his future knowledge which is a letdown. Average in utilizing his foreknowledge of HxHVerse and lacks utilization of his previous life earthly experiences & knowledge that can be applied on HxHVerse. 3/5 US: Based on the plot progression and author-san prolonging the chapters as well as making it short which is also crammed with MC's thought, I'd say the upload and stability matches the quality of this FF which is Subpar. 3/5 WB: This is where author-san hit it big-time as he introduced NeN on a different perspective which much more details, however, exploration of NeN itself is a bit slow as well as discoveries and other adventures that wasn't shown in canon is a bit lacking. 4/5 My opinion: Don't make it too long winded and get in too much details with MC's thought just to prolong plot and chapters as I am aware that you are doing it to entice your readers to delve more in this FF and encourage them in your Patreon as I am not against it. Just decrease it a little bit to avoid your readers annoyance and keep them on their feet on this FF. Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD