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Expect bad grammar in first five chapters.
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I like this story a lot even though I haven't any dc comics .......................................................................................
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my n*gga really just black-faced Diarmuid 💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀
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gbt has rings that are the same size and shape of a single player as killer and lois is the most popular and lois and I have seen the most beautiful of
he just really just wasted a wish on infinite charm he wanted charm he could easily become a god
The MC is a wimp who will back down at every problem. Characters are constantly doing weird things for no reason (his own brother points a giant frick-off cannon at him because he didnt want to join the teen titans. The story reads like two AI talking to eachother except the AI are the first AI ever made, and lets not forget about the spam he fills a chapter with.
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Try to separate those dialogues. Still good though[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
first five chapters are horrible and even the chapter after them aren't much better cuz then he has heat vision out of nowhere and the whole thing changed instead of rewriting the whole story he just picks up where he left off and tries to fix the story which ends up making it worse